Hues of Life
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Comment from Pili Pubul
Excellent and powerful Senryu, Very clever image about the black widow,
She will be widow again soon. A pleasure to read.
Good luck in the contest. Pili
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Excellent and powerful Senryu, Very clever image about the black widow,
She will be widow again soon. A pleasure to read.
Good luck in the contest. Pili
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
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You are welcome... Pili
Comment from Irish Rain
beautiful senryu...i am terrible at writing these...it appears that you've written a good one, and my many thanks to you for sharing this!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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beautiful senryu...i am terrible at writing these...it appears that you've written a good one, and my many thanks to you for sharing this!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from sunnilicious
That sure is a mean way to view suicide. However, you are quite creative as this poem is brilliant with visual imagery. Also, you met the contest requirements. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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That sure is a mean way to view suicide. However, you are quite creative as this poem is brilliant with visual imagery. Also, you met the contest requirements. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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It is not a contest entry.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Janet Foor
venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps
You created a bleak yet powerful image in just a few words. Very good senryu.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps
You created a bleak yet powerful image in just a few words. Very good senryu.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Glasstruth
The strong shall eat the weak. The cycle of survival is well portrayed. Nice alliteration in line three. Wonderfully written. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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The strong shall eat the weak. The cycle of survival is well portrayed. Nice alliteration in line three. Wonderfully written. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from c_lucas
When "venom" is mention, readers usually think of snakes. The Black Widow spider kills her mate after mating. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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When "venom" is mention, readers usually think of snakes. The Black Widow spider kills her mate after mating. This is very well written.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
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You're welcome.
Comment from marycec
Excellent senryu.Great imagery with the kohled eyes and black widow metaphor.Menace indicated in ,'search new prey'.There is ambiguity in those eyes as she weeps.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Excellent senryu.Great imagery with the kohled eyes and black widow metaphor.Menace indicated in ,'search new prey'.There is ambiguity in those eyes as she weeps.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow such a lot packed into so few wonderful words such vision and emotion so well done and thank you for sharing it gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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wow such a lot packed into so few wonderful words such vision and emotion so well done and thank you for sharing it gazzagodbod
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu makes one wonder about the height of sadness one can expect from a black widowspider. Probably on same order as crocodile tears.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This senryu makes one wonder about the height of sadness one can expect from a black widowspider. Probably on same order as crocodile tears.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Anupam Sharma, Profound. In three short lines you've penned the pain of a slaughtered heart. Good descriptive imagery. I learned a new word, kohled, although I had it figured out quite well through context. However, I do like to learn new words, especially the single words that paints a portrait. AS, you have mastered the senryu. Very good.
Keep the blue waters flowing and keep 'em cool. LateBloomer
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Hello Anupam Sharma, Profound. In three short lines you've penned the pain of a slaughtered heart. Good descriptive imagery. I learned a new word, kohled, although I had it figured out quite well through context. However, I do like to learn new words, especially the single words that paints a portrait. AS, you have mastered the senryu. Very good.
Keep the blue waters flowing and keep 'em cool. LateBloomer
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi,
I appreciate your lovely words and glowing stars.they holds a great value.These shorter forms are very interesting and I am learning still.Your words made my day!Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:)