Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Kuta Moon, Part 1"Murder Mystery
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Comment from Connie C
Another interesting and intriguing chapter, Bev, that still keeps us all guessing. Not being a patient person at all, I can't imagine having the patience to write such a mystery/story as you have here. I'll admit I want to know who the murderer is. I love how you combine mystery with some supernatural. As always, another chapter full of excellent dialogue and description and, once again, leaving your reader wondering about the outcome.
By the way, I'm glad you see you are nominated for book of the month (or whatever it's called). You got my vote and it looks like lots of others too!
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Another interesting and intriguing chapter, Bev, that still keeps us all guessing. Not being a patient person at all, I can't imagine having the patience to write such a mystery/story as you have here. I'll admit I want to know who the murderer is. I love how you combine mystery with some supernatural. As always, another chapter full of excellent dialogue and description and, once again, leaving your reader wondering about the outcome.
By the way, I'm glad you see you are nominated for book of the month (or whatever it's called). You got my vote and it looks like lots of others too!
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Connie! Both for this review and your vote. Part two will have more clues as to who the killer is. And more of the supernatural. Thanks for your support and generosity, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Bev,
You are doing an outstanding job of sharing the suspense and tension Jana and Rick are feeling. The introduction of Dresden Stredwick III, the FBI's number one profiler doesn't bring them any relief. The story continued to hold my attention from the beginning to the end. It is an excellent chapter and a good read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Bev,
You are doing an outstanding job of sharing the suspense and tension Jana and Rick are feeling. The introduction of Dresden Stredwick III, the FBI's number one profiler doesn't bring them any relief. The story continued to hold my attention from the beginning to the end. It is an excellent chapter and a good read.
Curtis
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Curtis, I thank you for this generous and encouraging review. Much appreciated, my friend! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
I like that picture much better than the previous snake pics. I don't like snakes. Are you ever going to let us in on what's going on. Great suspense, my friend. Can't wait to find out who is behind all these horrible murders.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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I like that picture much better than the previous snake pics. I don't like snakes. Are you ever going to let us in on what's going on. Great suspense, my friend. Can't wait to find out who is behind all these horrible murders.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thank you, Joy. I plan a more up-close look at the killer next time. Sure appreciate your support! Hugs, Bev
Comment from JW
This chapter has been analyzed using After The Deadline (a free online grammar checking program), and it was read to me using the text to speech program, Textaloud.
The good news - no spags were found.
Of course, I wasn't really expecting any. :-)
You did a great job in writing this, Bev. It's quite interesting. JW
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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This chapter has been analyzed using After The Deadline (a free online grammar checking program), and it was read to me using the text to speech program, Textaloud.
The good news - no spags were found.
Of course, I wasn't really expecting any. :-)
You did a great job in writing this, Bev. It's quite interesting. JW
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thanks, Jonathon, for running this chapter through your system. I've started using Grammarly. It's a monthly fee and I am finding the service reliable. So, that's likely helping LOL.
I appreciate your gracious and generous review, my friend.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JM daSilva
Good job keeping my interest in the mystery. Supernatural stuff is great and with a mystery to boot is even greater. Now you have a new character to stir things up. Good writing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Good job keeping my interest in the mystery. Supernatural stuff is great and with a mystery to boot is even greater. Now you have a new character to stir things up. Good writing.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, JM. What a gracious and generous review. Thank you! Off to check my messages - hehehehe. Warm regards, Bev
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It was a great pleasure.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Bev,
Another fabulous post - the stillness and inner thoughts of your characters really impressed me.
It gave the reader a greater 3D affect of the inner story. Loved the details and the mixture of native and white law. The Feds showing up I am sure will not impress the killer.
I'd be prone to sit back and watch to see who gets a little more rattled with the Feds around.
Thanks so much for sharing and I'm happy I can give you a well deserved six.
Maureen
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi Bev,
Another fabulous post - the stillness and inner thoughts of your characters really impressed me.
It gave the reader a greater 3D affect of the inner story. Loved the details and the mixture of native and white law. The Feds showing up I am sure will not impress the killer.
I'd be prone to sit back and watch to see who gets a little more rattled with the Feds around.
Thanks so much for sharing and I'm happy I can give you a well deserved six.
Maureen
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Maureen, thank you for this fabulously encouraging and generous review. You are too kind! I really appreciate your support, my friend. Means so much! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It's such a treat to open up and find a chapter from you, Bev - superb writing - need I say more!!
Besides(,) he's a relative
until he got it right[.](,)" Jana responded
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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It's such a treat to open up and find a chapter from you, Bev - superb writing - need I say more!!
Besides(,) he's a relative
until he got it right[.](,)" Jana responded
Margaret
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Margaret, I'm humbled and honored by this review from a writer I admire so much. And thanks for catching the spaggies. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from vickib
Hi Bev! Just had to read a chapter even though I haven't kept up with your book. I'll read it in real book form someday right? Love stopping in and reading a chapter every now and then. Love your easy flow very descriptive story. Its the little things I like, like hands in his pockets arms tight to his side. I can see that. It brings them to life, movement, or something, action, and quirks. But now I want to know more about what's going on here. Lol!
Wish I could sit and read all day, darn it.
Ok, super chapter. Hope to catch the start of part two.
Hope you are well and good.
XO
Vicki
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi Bev! Just had to read a chapter even though I haven't kept up with your book. I'll read it in real book form someday right? Love stopping in and reading a chapter every now and then. Love your easy flow very descriptive story. Its the little things I like, like hands in his pockets arms tight to his side. I can see that. It brings them to life, movement, or something, action, and quirks. But now I want to know more about what's going on here. Lol!
Wish I could sit and read all day, darn it.
Ok, super chapter. Hope to catch the start of part two.
Hope you are well and good.
XO
Vicki
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hiya, Vicks. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter! I sure appreciate the support. I'm having fun with this novel now that I feel more confident with the mechanics. I've been lucky to have very helpful and encouraging reviewers. I hope you're having a fabulous Spring. It's yet to fully arrive here in Michigan. Been toying with our emotions a bit LOL. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Dammit! The system won't allow a six yet for you. This is fabulous, Bev. As always, you have everything all tied together like a complex puzzle, and your detail makes it so authentic! The dialogue is crisp and professional sounding, as if these characters are real. Just super! I was right therewith them.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Dammit! The system won't allow a six yet for you. This is fabulous, Bev. As always, you have everything all tied together like a complex puzzle, and your detail makes it so authentic! The dialogue is crisp and professional sounding, as if these characters are real. Just super! I was right therewith them.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Aw, thanks so very much, Dawn. You lift my spirits with your words of encouragement. I'm so grateful for friends like you! And the thought of a six is so sweet. Hope you know how much I appreciate you! Hugs, Bev
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My words too - I hope you know how much I appreciate YOU - especially how you remembered how much Prissy means to me - that you did says a lot, 'coz this little cat means the world to me.
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You're always so good about letting me know that you appreciate my friendship and support, Dawn. One of the best, in fact! xx
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I'm glad, 'cause you most surely are.
Comment from God's Writer
Another grand chapter for your book. I have my first book of religious and have to more to write before the first of August. So I am not on fanstory much any more. Thank you my friend.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Another grand chapter for your book. I have my first book of religious and have to more to write before the first of August. So I am not on fanstory much any more. Thank you my friend.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thank you, GW. What a lovely review! I appreciate you taking time out to read my chapter given your own time constraints. Good luck with your own writing, I'm excited for you. Hugs, Bev