THICKER Skin
Pentameter Whimsy and Lament...29 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
relationships are sure a mixed bag - not all wine an' roses, that's for SURE! and frankly, is it worth it? I sometimes wonder, Philippa.
couple of spags:
bonifide (bona fide)
hession (hessian)
sounds like a very HONEST write, shall we say?
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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relationships are sure a mixed bag - not all wine an' roses, that's for SURE! and frankly, is it worth it? I sometimes wonder, Philippa.
couple of spags:
bonifide (bona fide)
hession (hessian)
sounds like a very HONEST write, shall we say?
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Yes they sure are...frankly, sometimes NO...other times YES...children make it harder to just up and p*ss off but honestly I'd be a b*tch to live with I'm sure...just ask hub! LOL
No its not this bad...he does have SOME redeeming qualities...I just neglected to feature them in this poem.
Perhaps sometime I need to harness those delightful traits about him and bundle em right up in a poem.
Hmmm, might nail it in a 5/7/5 teehee
okay, that was low...haha...cheers P (watch this space LMAO)
Thanks again Sharyn
Phillippa x
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5/7/5 sounds extraordinarily long-winded - try 3/5/3 - should be just right! :)
Comment from Joy Graham
Sorry to hear you are in a difficult relationship. I read the title and had to read this poem. It pulled me in. Many times people have told me I need to grow a thicker skin. I have thought about it a lot. One day I just decided I like the way I am and if other people think I'm too emotional then tough! LOL!!! I like me just the way I am. My emotions make me who I am and I think people like that about me too. I love that you speak your mind in this poem and I like the words you used such as vitriolic, shit stocks, For arse just can't compete, Potential epidermisuicide. I may not know what these words mean, but I certainly feel them. You go girl!!!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Sorry to hear you are in a difficult relationship. I read the title and had to read this poem. It pulled me in. Many times people have told me I need to grow a thicker skin. I have thought about it a lot. One day I just decided I like the way I am and if other people think I'm too emotional then tough! LOL!!! I like me just the way I am. My emotions make me who I am and I think people like that about me too. I love that you speak your mind in this poem and I like the words you used such as vitriolic, shit stocks, For arse just can't compete, Potential epidermisuicide. I may not know what these words mean, but I certainly feel them. You go girl!!!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thanks Joy, but I've probably sh*t in my own nest mate so I find every now and again I squirm a bit...then I'm back on track. LOL
He IS very critical, but so am I so I find I often disappoint myself first...then he of course backs me up and with a damn sermon full! LOL Sirriusly though, he is a good man mostly, I wouldn't still be here if he wasn't, but I dunno whether I can do the nit picking for another 23 years...I've TOLD him that. Unfortunately Aussie men don't invest a lot of emotion in their relationships...which inevitably could be their loss. WATCH THIS SPACE LOL Anyway, thanks for the sixer, I very much appreciate your support and don't let anyone tell you that you can't have a good howl or blubber over something. We're emotional creatures anyway and if you are a writer as well it seems to exassabate the problem. Haha BTW I made up "epidermisuicide"...I have a tendency to add to the Oxford on occasions. Thanks so much and have a great day, stay true to yourself.
Cheers P
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Comment from Eigle Rull
Oh how well you say your piece young lady. Your words make this piece easy to read and understand. It has very good flow too. It grabbed my interest, as I enjoyed reading it. It was excellent in my opinion. And I found NO errors
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Oh how well you say your piece young lady. Your words make this piece easy to read and understand. It has very good flow too. It grabbed my interest, as I enjoyed reading it. It was excellent in my opinion. And I found NO errors
Always with respect,
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL Thanks so much and glad you enjoyed my little b*tch at the other half. He isn't this bad really...I just like to amp it up a bit...makes me look a heap better say what? LOL
Cheers P
Comment from Jaq Cee
P, this is a very powerful poem which reads so well. I loved 'epidermisuicide'. What a harsh image that brings forth. I'm no expert on structure or meter but this read well to me. Stunning, sad but with such inner stremgth. You're special girlie.. Jaq xxx
p.s outta sixes :( xx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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P, this is a very powerful poem which reads so well. I loved 'epidermisuicide'. What a harsh image that brings forth. I'm no expert on structure or meter but this read well to me. Stunning, sad but with such inner stremgth. You're special girlie.. Jaq xxx
p.s outta sixes :( xx
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL Thanks mate...yes it seems I'll be contacting the Oxford people with that addition. LMAO...not sure about the inner strength...I think they call it "tolerance"...something I thought I never had. Hmmm, seems I have it in fucking droves mate! *smirk* Its frustrating at times but to be honest when he is peachy nice to me, I feel like he has done something wrong...I'm used to Grumpy Arse! LOL
Cheers P xo
Comment from chasennov
'Thicker Skin.' Any relationship is hard work! Why? Because people are so different. We think we can iron it all out and compensate, but that is where the problem lies. We are selfish. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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'Thicker Skin.' Any relationship is hard work! Why? Because people are so different. We think we can iron it all out and compensate, but that is where the problem lies. We are selfish. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hard work? You are telling me! LOL Thanks so much for your support. Selfish is as selfish does I think. I have my moments, but he is damn caustic at times and unreasonable along with it. I just can't win.
Cheers P
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You're very welcome.
Comment from despiser
Da paw widdo Bunny Wabby. How could anyone be mean to da wabbity smirkity Wabbs? If I were the subject of this little gem I would reply:
If your hide was as thick as your skull you wouldn't have a problem.
But I ain't he, so I just congrat da paw fuckin Bunny on a clever worded melody of angst.
-DEE xx
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Da paw widdo Bunny Wabby. How could anyone be mean to da wabbity smirkity Wabbs? If I were the subject of this little gem I would reply:
If your hide was as thick as your skull you wouldn't have a problem.
But I ain't he, so I just congrat da paw fuckin Bunny on a clever worded melody of angst.
-DEE xx
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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No one is mean. I made it awwup. LOL
Siwwiusly. He CAN be a meanie. Just not ALL the time. Only MOST. Its a constant battle, but I have a secwet...I am Joan of Arc's third couzin twice fucking weemoved...I don't go down with a fi...ahh...I just DON'T go down.
LMAO No wonder he isn't happy! LOL
cpJMelodyBunnethAngsty xx
Re: your skull drag = a big FUCK you! LOL
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you wike dat one huh? * snicky *
xx
Comment from LadyGuyse
I loved the sonnet style and the lament to thicker skin. Would have given you six stars, but guess my skin needs a little thickening when it comes to the F-bomb! Great picture, goes with the piece well.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I loved the sonnet style and the lament to thicker skin. Would have given you six stars, but guess my skin needs a little thickening when it comes to the F-bomb! Great picture, goes with the piece well.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much. Appreciate the thought but understand the f-bomb can drag a write down for some...
I have to be realistic when I write a serious piece so the occasional profanity makes it palpable and in the now. Too much poetry DOESN'T say what it thinks... with that said, I know darn well I could have replaced that word with "tiny"...but it just didn't vent the frustration I feel.
Cheers and much appreciate your honest feedback.
Sincerely Phillippa
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A frustrated state of mind at the constant failures and how lamentation could help one lead a mind fostering is well depicted, I liked this orderly and ironically presented, a good word of earthly order condemnation, I liked. 2/124
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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A frustrated state of mind at the constant failures and how lamentation could help one lead a mind fostering is well depicted, I liked this orderly and ironically presented, a good word of earthly order condemnation, I liked. 2/124
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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A delightfully constant stream of words in a response to my lamentation fostering all that was depicted by the orderly irony I enjoyed presenting with a good word. THANKS for appreciating my earthly condemnation, gotta keep it real and yah, I liked it too.
Cheers P
Comment from gazzagodbod
has anybody seen my violin omg you crushed it lol but im sure your arse can compete my friend nd i look forward to seeing it in the next olympics great poem keep your thin skin better for letting love out than the thick stuff xxgazzaxx
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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has anybody seen my violin omg you crushed it lol but im sure your arse can compete my friend nd i look forward to seeing it in the next olympics great poem keep your thin skin better for letting love out than the thick stuff xxgazzaxx
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL the olympics? Yeah sure! NOT...LOL thanks for your support Gazza. Cheers P xx