Longtime Since I Heard Silence
A Villanelle: Long Time Since I Heard Silence30 total reviews
Comment from Pili Pubul
Fabulous Villanelle , you express so well the craving for
silence and calmness. Great style ,word choice and emotion.
I totally identify with this poem. Simply excellent,a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Fabulous Villanelle , you express so well the craving for
silence and calmness. Great style ,word choice and emotion.
I totally identify with this poem. Simply excellent,a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much, dear friend. Blessings!
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You are so welcome.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amada, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about finding God in the midst of the silence. I enjoyed reading this one...
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this is very well written, amada, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about finding God in the midst of the silence. I enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you dear friend. Your comments mean a lot to me.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good words here of telling how complete quietness is a heaven send. With all the noise in the world today it's hard to have even a moment of complete silence. Good words with good rhyming that says a lot.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Good words here of telling how complete quietness is a heaven send. With all the noise in the world today it's hard to have even a moment of complete silence. Good words with good rhyming that says a lot.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you GWinterwin for reading and commenting in my work.
Comment from Rondeno
Villanelles are difficult, and therefore satisfying, to write, and you've produced a good one. My only reservation is the use of "veer", there for the rhyme, but which feels wrong.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Villanelles are difficult, and therefore satisfying, to write, and you've produced a good one. My only reservation is the use of "veer", there for the rhyme, but which feels wrong.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you dear friend for a very honest review.
Comment from samandlancelot
Amada,
I haven't read a villanelle in a long time. For me, it is a very difficult poetry format that you have mastered wonderfully.
Your poetry reached the veil of my inner ear. I love that line. I could hear the disrupting sounds you longed to be free from. Almond-shaped tiers seemed to be a play on words, as I could also picture almond-shaped tears. You don't even wish to record your own sounds or your own words, but merely want to reach that place of quietness where you can hear God's still small voice.
Exceptional and moving!
Patricia
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Amada,
I haven't read a villanelle in a long time. For me, it is a very difficult poetry format that you have mastered wonderfully.
Your poetry reached the veil of my inner ear. I love that line. I could hear the disrupting sounds you longed to be free from. Almond-shaped tiers seemed to be a play on words, as I could also picture almond-shaped tears. You don't even wish to record your own sounds or your own words, but merely want to reach that place of quietness where you can hear God's still small voice.
Exceptional and moving!
Patricia
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Patricia, thank you for the awesome review. Yes, it could go almond-shaped tears or tiers; I opted for tiers...too many tears around. What do you think?
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I definitely like tiers. If you had used tears, I wouldn't have the tiers. Now I have both.
Patricia
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Such a wit! I like that.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
I like when silence embrace the veil of inner ear,in its shield I feel that Heavens almost near... This has a good flow. Interesting concept. Well done.
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I like when silence embrace the veil of inner ear,in its shield I feel that Heavens almost near... This has a good flow. Interesting concept. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you Deorre for the great comments to my villanelle.
Comment from terry drake
Well there is a lot to be said about peace and quiet. I enjoy it as much as your poem. You maintained an interesting rhyme scheme and a repeat line for effect.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Well there is a lot to be said about peace and quiet. I enjoy it as much as your poem. You maintained an interesting rhyme scheme and a repeat line for effect.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you Terry for reading my work and the very encouraging review.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Amanda,
yes indeed silence is golden and you poem captured the inner sanctity of that perfectly.
Your repeating phrases reinforced the message and gave added clout to it's cause, truly a well penned poem.
Kindest thoughts of silence,
James xx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Hi Amanda,
yes indeed silence is golden and you poem captured the inner sanctity of that perfectly.
Your repeating phrases reinforced the message and gave added clout to it's cause, truly a well penned poem.
Kindest thoughts of silence,
James xx
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you James for reading my work and for your great comments.
Comment from wordsareus
To the love of quietness! I enjoyed reading your poem Longtime Since I Heard Silence. It is well-written and thought-provoking.
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To the love of quietness! I enjoyed reading your poem Longtime Since I Heard Silence. It is well-written and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you for reading and commenting in this villanelle.
Comment from Joannforsberg
Truly enjoyed reading this. Well written with a message. This last part comes across clear.
One nice part of fan story is being able to read so many different types of writings from a assortment of personalities.
Blessings from Jo
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Truly enjoyed reading this. Well written with a message. This last part comes across clear.
One nice part of fan story is being able to read so many different types of writings from a assortment of personalities.
Blessings from Jo
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jo for the great comments to my work.