Millie and Vicky want to fly.
What is Millie's idea?40 total reviews
Comment from Tonulak
Hi Sandra,
This was a very jolly children's poem with a few subtle tips; doing homework before going out to play and not excersing after eating. Good rhyme and rhythm throughout. A nice narrative and cute characters. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Hi Sandra,
This was a very jolly children's poem with a few subtle tips; doing homework before going out to play and not excersing after eating. Good rhyme and rhythm throughout. A nice narrative and cute characters. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thank you for you lovely review, Tonulac! I really apreciate it. Thank you. xsx
Comment from Herb
Cool for kids.
I could imagine this being a nice bed time story for the little ones. a nice rhyme-y tale to send little ones of to sleep. A good concept and well executed.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Cool for kids.
I could imagine this being a nice bed time story for the little ones. a nice rhyme-y tale to send little ones of to sleep. A good concept and well executed.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, Herb, that is such a lovely thing to say. Thank you. xsx
Comment from adewpearl
I love the characters' alliterative names
good rhyming couplets
and when read aloud, a good cadence
asked Millie to take it off of her back - drop "of"
Excellent use of dialogue and a good story line about being scared of heights and overcoming that fear
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I love the characters' alliterative names
good rhyming couplets
and when read aloud, a good cadence
asked Millie to take it off of her back - drop "of"
Excellent use of dialogue and a good story line about being scared of heights and overcoming that fear
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Brooke, for this helpful review, I have taken of the 'of', and yes, it sounds better, thank you! xsx
Comment from misscookie
I enjoyed reading this happy story
And I found it intresting and I like how your story moves
there was no dull moments. I must confess by chance I can across your work now I have to read what I missed.
This is a good write.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I enjoyed reading this happy story
And I found it intresting and I like how your story moves
there was no dull moments. I must confess by chance I can across your work now I have to read what I missed.
This is a good write.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Oh, thank you, misscookie, for such a lovely review! I do hope you like the others! Thank you. xsx
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Im sure I will. untill nhext time
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work and the words very much here.
These lovely words flowed very well.
I loved reading these words very much
Children would love reading these words
Honey tree
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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I loved the art work and the words very much here.
These lovely words flowed very well.
I loved reading these words very much
Children would love reading these words
Honey tree
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you, honeytree! What a lovely review, I do appreciate it, thank you. xsx
Comment from Mastery
Very good job, Sandra. It is a bit long, but not for a children's audience. Very clever rhymes throughout. Sharp concise images for kids. Well done! Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Very good job, Sandra. It is a bit long, but not for a children's audience. Very clever rhymes throughout. Sharp concise images for kids. Well done! Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Bob, so much. I am really pleased you enjoyed it, thank you. xsx
Comment from Gungalo
'It's Cyril the Squirrel; he's up in the tree,
It's the shells from his nuts that are falling on me.'
Vicky yelled loudly, 'Hey, Cyril, come down
And pick up these shells you have thrown on the ground.
'You do it!' he called, 'Can't you both see
I'm sitting up here and having my tea?'
You doing a great job on these stories and you're to be commended for it.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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'It's Cyril the Squirrel; he's up in the tree,
It's the shells from his nuts that are falling on me.'
Vicky yelled loudly, 'Hey, Cyril, come down
And pick up these shells you have thrown on the ground.
'You do it!' he called, 'Can't you both see
I'm sitting up here and having my tea?'
You doing a great job on these stories and you're to be commended for it.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, Gungalo! Coming from you, that is such a compliment, thank you. xsx
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Comment from wordsfromsue
Oh my goodness, I absolutely adore the adventures of Vicky the Vole and Millie the Mole! Even their names are adorable. :-) Although we don't enjoy the voles that our cat Buddy deposits on the welcome mat occasionally!
This chapter is wonderful, the lyrical feel was in place from start to finish. And I'm quite enamored by the last two words: tickity boo! Not sure what that means exactly, but when someone at work asks me how I am tomorrow, I may just reply, "Tickity boo, thank you!"
A very fun adventure and winning chapter in your continuing series. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Oh my goodness, I absolutely adore the adventures of Vicky the Vole and Millie the Mole! Even their names are adorable. :-) Although we don't enjoy the voles that our cat Buddy deposits on the welcome mat occasionally!
This chapter is wonderful, the lyrical feel was in place from start to finish. And I'm quite enamored by the last two words: tickity boo! Not sure what that means exactly, but when someone at work asks me how I am tomorrow, I may just reply, "Tickity boo, thank you!"
A very fun adventure and winning chapter in your continuing series. :-)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, Sue! I know what you mean, my cat does the same thing. Tickety boo, is an expression my grand father used a lot, meaning he is, feeling great. It was quite a well used phrase years ago, perhaps Cyril the Squirrel will bring it back! Thank you again, Sue, as usual, I love reading your reviews. xsx
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your poem, We want to fly!, is an excellent chapter to add to your book, HEDGEROW CAPERS. Your poem has a wonderful rhyming scheme and the cadence is light and happy. I am sure the children will LOVE this!!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Your poem, We want to fly!, is an excellent chapter to add to your book, HEDGEROW CAPERS. Your poem has a wonderful rhyming scheme and the cadence is light and happy. I am sure the children will LOVE this!!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, William! I value your review a lot. xsx
Comment from geoniasha
Sandra -- This is a great children's poem. The rhyming is good; it has talking animals who are on a mission; building suspense and nonsense words--'tickity boo'. When I first viewed it, it seemed rather long but after beginning, I couldn't stop until the finish.
Just a suggestion:
In the second line, last stanza -- you might try...
'...to push us so much, a really hard task.' It's not a perfect rhyme but it might suffice.
Thank you very much for sharing. geo
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Sandra -- This is a great children's poem. The rhyming is good; it has talking animals who are on a mission; building suspense and nonsense words--'tickity boo'. When I first viewed it, it seemed rather long but after beginning, I couldn't stop until the finish.
Just a suggestion:
In the second line, last stanza -- you might try...
'...to push us so much, a really hard task.' It's not a perfect rhyme but it might suffice.
Thank you very much for sharing. geo
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Thank You, geo, I will certainly look again at that line, I am always open to sugestions to improve my stories, that´s one of the good things about being on this site. Thank you for your helpful review, I really appreciate it. xsx
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You are most welcome, my friend. geo