'Rock of Ages'
The epitome of love29 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I have long loved Rock of Ages, one of the old time classics in the hymn book
Excellent character development of your grandmother Emma
Excellent description of Cletus's funeral
and of Emma's caring for his grieving mother
A poignant conclusion with Emma's funeral
My voice began to crack and waiver - waver
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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I have long loved Rock of Ages, one of the old time classics in the hymn book
Excellent character development of your grandmother Emma
Excellent description of Cletus's funeral
and of Emma's caring for his grieving mother
A poignant conclusion with Emma's funeral
My voice began to crack and waiver - waver
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Brooke, thank you once again. I appreciate you very much. Girl, once again, it is not necessary for you to feel as if you need to review me. I do not know how you do it.. answering, writing, reviewing.. you have so many fans and you follow so many.. are you super woman.. thank you once again.. please do not get me wrong, I am humbled and appreciative of your reviews..... jimi
Comment from Dave M
Jimi,
This is an exceptional memoir of how love and respect transcended the racial gulf in that part of Texas. I thoroughly enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Jimi,
This is an exceptional memoir of how love and respect transcended the racial gulf in that part of Texas. I thoroughly enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 25-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Dave M, thank you ever so much my friend. You have read enough about Emma to know how special she really really was.. I miss her even today.. again thank you so much.. jimi
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, jlsavell, you did a great job writing this story about the grandmother and her friend that taught the true meaning of the song Rock of Ages.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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this is very well written, jlsavell, you did a great job writing this story about the grandmother and her friend that taught the true meaning of the song Rock of Ages.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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sweetwoodjax, thank you ever so much fro stopping by to read and review my work. I appreciate your continued support... jls
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello jlsavell
You brought out the real beauty of the hymn rock of Ages
Your story about your Grandmoter indeed, was very toucking and filled with emontions.
Thank you for sharing
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Hello jlsavell
You brought out the real beauty of the hymn rock of Ages
Your story about your Grandmoter indeed, was very toucking and filled with emontions.
Thank you for sharing
Gert
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Gert, thank you once again my friend, so very very much... jimi
Comment from Gungalo
Special, that's what this write is. Very special. It rolls along very well up until the end where it needs breaking up into smaller paragraphs. I enjoyed reading this one girl for it is real.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Special, that's what this write is. Very special. It rolls along very well up until the end where it needs breaking up into smaller paragraphs. I enjoyed reading this one girl for it is real.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Gungalo, and thank you!! I will look at that paragraph to break up. I appreciate you very much.. jimi
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Smiling at you.
Comment from Father Flaps
"and the timbre of its words penetrated all emotions of those in the perimeters of her dulcet aria." This is a great line, but I'm wondering if "within" might be a better choice for "within the perimeters of her dulcet aria"?
"A grey morning, where the sun had left its post to weep behind the clouds and the dry vapid leaves of monarch Oaks tumbled through the wind," ...another terrific line, you paint this October morning. But I would use a comma, and link it to the previous sentence... "offering" for "morning"...
"Although I was but six years old, I remember distinctly standing beside her on a cold, blustery, October morn, a grey offering, where the sun had left its post to weep behind the clouds and the dry vapid leaves of monarch Oaks tumbled through the wind, giving a disjunct motion to her voice which charged through air."
"Most of the day, and the people surrounding this event are but a blur to me, but I knew it was a funeral, although I had not fully grasped the finality of death, or the significance of this gesture in a growing era of social unrest."... I read this over quite a few times to be sure, but this sentence is incomplete.
"screened-in porch"
"potbellied stove", as an adjective
"worship services, which happened to be two worlds's apart" ...(worlds)
"To dishonor His creation was nothing short of blasphemy, and to declare you were better than anyone was to arrogantly declare that God was flawed."... good for you, Jimi!
"except I and Emma." ... (except Emma and me)
"walked toward Emma and I"... (walked toward Emma and me)
"Emma eyes filled with tears as she bent to kiss her faithful friend."... (Emma's eyes)
"She gathered her pose, stepped to the side and began singing 'Rock Of Ages' with such incredible beauty, the birds gathered and quieted in the giant shady oaks." ...a wonderful line, Jimi!
Oh, what a great ending to your story, Jimi! The climax, of course, is your version of "Rock of Ages", singing your heart out at your grandmother's funeral. But the anti-climax is so special... the African-American congregation standing behind the aged man with the silvery hair who held your grandmother in her grief at Ettie May's funeral. It gave me shivers.
You know, Jimi, when God looks down here to the earth, He doesn't see color. He doesn't see religion either... United, Full Gospel, Anglican, Wesleyan, Baptist, Catholic, etc. He sees people that He loves unconditionally. He sees past our sin. He sees those who are followers.
This is a great piece you've written. I hope many will read it. My pleasure to read and review!
your ultimate fan
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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"and the timbre of its words penetrated all emotions of those in the perimeters of her dulcet aria." This is a great line, but I'm wondering if "within" might be a better choice for "within the perimeters of her dulcet aria"?
"A grey morning, where the sun had left its post to weep behind the clouds and the dry vapid leaves of monarch Oaks tumbled through the wind," ...another terrific line, you paint this October morning. But I would use a comma, and link it to the previous sentence... "offering" for "morning"...
"Although I was but six years old, I remember distinctly standing beside her on a cold, blustery, October morn, a grey offering, where the sun had left its post to weep behind the clouds and the dry vapid leaves of monarch Oaks tumbled through the wind, giving a disjunct motion to her voice which charged through air."
"Most of the day, and the people surrounding this event are but a blur to me, but I knew it was a funeral, although I had not fully grasped the finality of death, or the significance of this gesture in a growing era of social unrest."... I read this over quite a few times to be sure, but this sentence is incomplete.
"screened-in porch"
"potbellied stove", as an adjective
"worship services, which happened to be two worlds's apart" ...(worlds)
"To dishonor His creation was nothing short of blasphemy, and to declare you were better than anyone was to arrogantly declare that God was flawed."... good for you, Jimi!
"except I and Emma." ... (except Emma and me)
"walked toward Emma and I"... (walked toward Emma and me)
"Emma eyes filled with tears as she bent to kiss her faithful friend."... (Emma's eyes)
"She gathered her pose, stepped to the side and began singing 'Rock Of Ages' with such incredible beauty, the birds gathered and quieted in the giant shady oaks." ...a wonderful line, Jimi!
Oh, what a great ending to your story, Jimi! The climax, of course, is your version of "Rock of Ages", singing your heart out at your grandmother's funeral. But the anti-climax is so special... the African-American congregation standing behind the aged man with the silvery hair who held your grandmother in her grief at Ettie May's funeral. It gave me shivers.
You know, Jimi, when God looks down here to the earth, He doesn't see color. He doesn't see religion either... United, Full Gospel, Anglican, Wesleyan, Baptist, Catholic, etc. He sees people that He loves unconditionally. He sees past our sin. He sees those who are followers.
This is a great piece you've written. I hope many will read it. My pleasure to read and review!
your ultimate fan
Kimbob
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Kimbob, where have you been? I have missed you terribly. I am so honored when you stop by. I made the necessary changes, what would I do without you, tell me???? thank you thank you... your ardent fan jimi
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Hi Jimi, it's that time of the year... the NFL playoffs! I love watching American football. There were two great games on Sunday. New England Patriots will meet the New York Giants in the SuperBowl. But it could just as easily have been Baltimore Ravens against the San Francisco 49ers. My rankings in here have fallen dramatically since January 1st. My creative juices have dried up. I don't know how some writers in here do it... two poems every single day! Your "Rock of Ages" is a wonderful piece. Keep em coming, Jimi!
your pal
Kimbob
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yes, where would we be without football?????
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and the cheerleaders!
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oh look at you!!!!!! uh huh,, now I got your number... lol...
Comment from magicpotwhat
What a heartfelt story so much love beautiful memories deep spiritual emotions LOVE TRUTH FAITH KINDNESS This story is of oneness of the soul very moving, inspiring I can feel the emotions happy and sadness What a angel your grandmother is I love this highly recommended Thank you so much the picture is beautiful love and blessings to you Amazing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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What a heartfelt story so much love beautiful memories deep spiritual emotions LOVE TRUTH FAITH KINDNESS This story is of oneness of the soul very moving, inspiring I can feel the emotions happy and sadness What a angel your grandmother is I love this highly recommended Thank you so much the picture is beautiful love and blessings to you Amazing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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magicpotwhat, how are you? thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. Your support of my work means a great deal to me... thank you once again... jls
Comment from Newsome
This is an absolutely beautiful story. It is sad but uplifting because of the love surrounding it. Not to be redundant...you are such a talented writer. This story captured my attention from beginning to end...touching and extremely heartfelt.
Newsome
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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This is an absolutely beautiful story. It is sad but uplifting because of the love surrounding it. Not to be redundant...you are such a talented writer. This story captured my attention from beginning to end...touching and extremely heartfelt.
Newsome
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Newsome, how are you? Thank you ever so much. You humble me, truly. I never wrote a word, not a poem, not an essay nor a commentary until I joined Fanstory in 2008, so your compliments of my talent, imbue my doubts with confidence... thank you... jimi
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And, I mean every word!Hard to believe that you haven't written longer-your writing is so professional.
Comment from CerysBarbour
Wow! Well done! I can see your really put a lot of effort into this and I honestly did really enjoy reading it!i especially like to read poems that rhyme Keep up the good - infact brilliant - work! Great job!
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Wow! Well done! I can see your really put a lot of effort into this and I honestly did really enjoy reading it!i especially like to read poems that rhyme Keep up the good - infact brilliant - work! Great job!
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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CerysBarbour, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am thrilled you enjoyed my offering... jls