Solace in My Quill
a pantoum33 total reviews
Comment from BarnCat
This is an excellent pantoum. The measured constraint works so well with your subject and the rhymes are subtle. You chose excellent repeating lines that progressed smoothely throughout. Well done. Deborah
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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This is an excellent pantoum. The measured constraint works so well with your subject and the rhymes are subtle. You chose excellent repeating lines that progressed smoothely throughout. Well done. Deborah
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from babylonia
solace in the quill is what i find as well. whenever life has turned on me. i know that i can write about it and everything will be well. good luck~
imagery is excellent. hope you are doing well.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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solace in the quill is what i find as well. whenever life has turned on me. i know that i can write about it and everything will be well. good luck~
imagery is excellent. hope you are doing well.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thanks for the exceptional review. I greatly appreciate it. Yes, I am doing quite well.
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i'm so glad you are doing well. you are welcome~
love,
barbara
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Thank you.
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you are welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Judian James
As you know, I never give four stars Al, but I do give the truth and I have to say, that what you criticized me for with my pantoum, "Conscience" (a lot of monosyllabic words), you seem to have done the same! I'm not faulting it however, just pointing it out. In the first verse, I think I would start line three with "the" and line four with "then" It works better there and fits nicely when it comes again in the poem as well. Just a thought. well done
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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As you know, I never give four stars Al, but I do give the truth and I have to say, that what you criticized me for with my pantoum, "Conscience" (a lot of monosyllabic words), you seem to have done the same! I'm not faulting it however, just pointing it out. In the first verse, I think I would start line three with "the" and line four with "then" It works better there and fits nicely when it comes again in the poem as well. Just a thought. well done
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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I view each review as independent of another. I would have been perfectly happy with four or even three stars from you on this poem. (On one of my works last week, I received three stars from a well-known and well-liked reviewer.) Thanks for the review.
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No, I never do that Al, but I didn't quite understand why you wrote in a similar fashion and posted after conveying to me you thought it a bad idea with a pantoum. I liked your piece and thought the flow was good. Oh, and you're welcome
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My review of your piece had more to do than with the monosyllabic works--the use of the cliche was surprising coming from someone who writes as well as you do.
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Yeah, I know, but somehow within the context of that piece, it just worked someone. A line everyone could identify with I think is what I was thinking. I will take another look at that though. Honest reviews force me to be a better writer and for that I am always grateful Al.
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OK, we'll let's move on and not flog that dead horse. Since we can't criticize other reviewers on this site, it will be hard to enter a meaningful dialogue on this subject on this site. However, if you want to write me at AlvinTEthington@aol.com, I would be happy to discuss this issue at length. (In case the E-mail bounces back, tell me here, and I'll fix the outside E-mail.)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Alvin ,
yes writing, I know can give one comfort and peace within their mind.
I like the form you slected it gives your well written thoughts a wonderful deep emontional feeling
I'm sure you have heard this quote--
Writing is the supreme solace. by--
W. Somerset Maugham
The best to you in the contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Hello Alvin ,
yes writing, I know can give one comfort and peace within their mind.
I like the form you slected it gives your well written thoughts a wonderful deep emontional feeling
I'm sure you have heard this quote--
Writing is the supreme solace. by--
W. Somerset Maugham
The best to you in the contest.
Gert
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Thanks for an exceptional review. I truly appreciate it. The response to this pantoum I wrote late last night has been amazing! Thanks again.
Comment from BJean
Yes, there can be such a tranguility when you take the load out of the heart and put it on paper. This is lovely and I love the pantoum style which you have obviously mastered. I'm giving you a six on behalf of all those who love to write for speaking our hearts! Great job. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Yes, there can be such a tranguility when you take the load out of the heart and put it on paper. This is lovely and I love the pantoum style which you have obviously mastered. I'm giving you a six on behalf of all those who love to write for speaking our hearts! Great job. Love, Jean
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review. I really appreciate. I think I really touched some people with this poem written late last night.
Comment from c_lucas
I often find solace in my writings. The creating factor relaxes me and I find myself at peace. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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I often find solace in my writings. The creating factor relaxes me and I find myself at peace. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review. I truly appreciate it.
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You're welcome, Alvin. Charlie
Comment from sgalletti
What a wonderful pantoum Al! This piece flows beautifully, has a wonderful lyrical lilt to it and incorporates so many poetic devices--rhyme, alliteration--the piece captures it all. Plus, it is a lovely story with powerful imagery. I enjoyed it a great deal! Never even missed a picture! Sue
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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What a wonderful pantoum Al! This piece flows beautifully, has a wonderful lyrical lilt to it and incorporates so many poetic devices--rhyme, alliteration--the piece captures it all. Plus, it is a lovely story with powerful imagery. I enjoyed it a great deal! Never even missed a picture! Sue
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from lola29
Bravo! Alvin, your quatrain is divine. You are the master of poetry, and I'm so inspired by your message wrapped in golden threads.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Bravo! Alvin, your quatrain is divine. You are the master of poetry, and I'm so inspired by your message wrapped in golden threads.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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You are so kind; thank you so much. I truly appreciate the exceptional review.
Comment from Joan E.
I certainly hope members do not downgrade work without a picture! I hope you found some joy in looking at our sister site, although I know it can be frustrating not to find a suitable image. Thank you for your description of the pantoun, which is hard to remember. I especially enjoyed your title. I admired the strong declaration of your faith, the "children" simile and your use of alliteration as well.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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I certainly hope members do not downgrade work without a picture! I hope you found some joy in looking at our sister site, although I know it can be frustrating not to find a suitable image. Thank you for your description of the pantoun, which is hard to remember. I especially enjoyed your title. I admired the strong declaration of your faith, the "children" simile and your use of alliteration as well.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Yes, the downgrading for lack of a picture from five stars to four stars has happened to me twice with two different poems from two different people. Thanks for a great review.
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I can only assume they were new to the site and won't last long if they keep up that behavior. My biggest gripe is when someone says they don't like a particular form, and they grade the writer's work down as a result--why don't they spare themselves and us the annoyance by pressing "skip it?" Pardon the rant, especially on Sunday. Back to reviewing the full range of possibilities...
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Actually, Tom said it was acceptable, but rather minor. He said it was because the reader looks at the whole presentation. I see now that the site adds pictures to works that have none if they are advertised on the first page (see my Tears)
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Actually, Tom said it was acceptable, but rather minor. He said it was because the reader looks at the whole presentation. I see now that the site adds pictures to works that have none if they are advertised on the first page (see my Tears)
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I did not know that; if that's the case why doesn't the site notify us when an artist removes their work from the site, which in turns causes it to drop off our presentation? I've inadvertently discovered on two occasions that my poems lost their illustration. Oh, well, rather minor also.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Alvin:
The tonal quality of this pantoum reminds (I have no idea reason why but, it is a great compliment, I assure you), of Edgar allen Poe's writing.... perhaps the grammatical structure is resonant of his style? At any rate, I very well done and outstanding poem!
~ steven
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Alvin:
The tonal quality of this pantoum reminds (I have no idea reason why but, it is a great compliment, I assure you), of Edgar allen Poe's writing.... perhaps the grammatical structure is resonant of his style? At any rate, I very well done and outstanding poem!
~ steven
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2010
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Actually, the writer I am most often compared to is Poe. I don't particularly like the comparison (I think I am a happier person.)
But you are quite right that the style is reminiscent of his. Thanks for an exceptional review. I greatly appreciate it.
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You are most welcome.
~ Steven
