Just believe!
Somethings never die, if only you will ....50 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
We are never too old to feel young at heart. This is very well written and in a way, could be considered, a modern Aesop fable. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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We are never too old to feel young at heart. This is very well written and in a way, could be considered, a modern Aesop fable. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Charlie
Had never written a fantasy..At first I thought I was joining a normal flash fiction..Surprise! Glad you enjoyed the little story. Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from Jordan Rose
So that's what happened to Puff and Jackie! This was great, so heart warming. It made me remember watching the movie with my sisters when we were kids. Nice job. Jordan
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So that's what happened to Puff and Jackie! This was great, so heart warming. It made me remember watching the movie with my sisters when we were kids. Nice job. Jordan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Jordan
Yes, my grandchildren enjoy Puff too. So I needed him to make one last visit and then pass him on to the next child. Smiles, Carol
Comment from fayesh
Nice fantasy, but the rest of the song speaks about the loss of innocence:
"A dragon lives forever but not so little boys
Painted wings and giant rings make way for other toys.
One grey night it happened, Jackie Paper came no more
And puff that mighty dragon, he ceased his fearless roar.
His head was bent in sorrow, green scales fell like rain,
Puff no longer went to play along the cherry lane.
Without his life-long friend, puff could not be brave,
So puff that mighty dragon sadly slipped into his cave. oh!"
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Nice fantasy, but the rest of the song speaks about the loss of innocence:
"A dragon lives forever but not so little boys
Painted wings and giant rings make way for other toys.
One grey night it happened, Jackie Paper came no more
And puff that mighty dragon, he ceased his fearless roar.
His head was bent in sorrow, green scales fell like rain,
Puff no longer went to play along the cherry lane.
Without his life-long friend, puff could not be brave,
So puff that mighty dragon sadly slipped into his cave. oh!"
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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fayesh
Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. Carol
Comment from amada
Oh, i just love that song. My husband introduced it to me in our courting days. It has a special place in our hearts. Our story is great...there is magic at any age, in any place.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Oh, i just love that song. My husband introduced it to me in our courting days. It has a special place in our hearts. Our story is great...there is magic at any age, in any place.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Amada
I am thrilled that you enjoyed the story. It was my first attempt at fantasy. My grandchildren love Puff so I thought it worked. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Carol! I enjoyed this story and the way you mixed the different songs and stories into one. The fantasy caterpillar/dragon is a good one. I used to play Puff for my daughter--she didn't know the words but would shout at the top of her lungs "Puff, the magic dragon!!" Best wishes in the contest.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Hello Carol! I enjoyed this story and the way you mixed the different songs and stories into one. The fantasy caterpillar/dragon is a good one. I used to play Puff for my daughter--she didn't know the words but would shout at the top of her lungs "Puff, the magic dragon!!" Best wishes in the contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Indy
I have never written fantasy before so I am thrilled that you enjoyed this one. Thanks for the great review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from AlvinTEthington
What a lovely fantasy story and very good flash fiction. You capture a moment in time very well. I love the fantasy references (caterpillar to Alice in Wonderland ) and to music popular in the sixties (I wonder if many readers will catch the reference to Joni Mitchell in The crocuses were in bloom .) You show the importance of fantasy for both children and adults quite well.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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What a lovely fantasy story and very good flash fiction. You capture a moment in time very well. I love the fantasy references (caterpillar to Alice in Wonderland ) and to music popular in the sixties (I wonder if many readers will catch the reference to Joni Mitchell in The crocuses were in bloom .) You show the importance of fantasy for both children and adults quite well.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Alvin
Well done! You were the only one who has mentioned anything other than Puff...Bravo! This was my first attempt at fantasy fiction. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you for the wonderful review. smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I loved it. I am going to share this with my first graders, if it's all right?
Good luck with the contest.
Wow, that's going to be a climb. But climb I must! (Not sure about this one, but I am going back to my HS English teacher, don't start a sentence with but. to be a climg, but climb I must.)
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I loved it. I am going to share this with my first graders, if it's all right?
Good luck with the contest.
Wow, that's going to be a climb. But climb I must! (Not sure about this one, but I am going back to my HS English teacher, don't start a sentence with but. to be a climg, but climb I must.)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Barbara,
I figured since it was a thought not an actual sentence it would be okay...otherwise I should connect the two sentences. Not sure about that, but I figured a caterpillar could talk that way...not that I have talked to many caterpillars. LOL
Thanks for the review...Hope the children enjoy the story. Carol
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I honestly am not sure. Don't do anything with it until somebody else does something.
Comment from AnnaLinda
BeginAgain,
Your fantasy flash fiction story, "Just believe!" is very magical for sure! I don't know how exactly you came up with the idea, but I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for reminding me of this song. I used to love singing it when I was young.
"Jack closed his eyes. He thought of a time when a magic dragon lived by the sea and frolicked in the autumn mist in a land called Honah Lee."
You did a fantastic job on this. I guess I just have to believe, right?
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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BeginAgain,
Your fantasy flash fiction story, "Just believe!" is very magical for sure! I don't know how exactly you came up with the idea, but I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for reminding me of this song. I used to love singing it when I was young.
"Jack closed his eyes. He thought of a time when a magic dragon lived by the sea and frolicked in the autumn mist in a land called Honah Lee."
You did a fantastic job on this. I guess I just have to believe, right?
SweetLinda
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Linda
Thank you so much. I have never written a fantasy story and couldn't imagine where to start. I thought of stories my grandchildren enjoyed and then went from there. Glad you enjoyed it. smiles, Carol
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I would have never guessed that! You did such a great job on it.
Comment from light
Begin again,
Thanks for the ride on the magic carpet. It was a fun trip. I always liked that song, but I found out later that someone was smoking something funny. I sill like the song. Good entry.
Elaine
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Begin again,
Thanks for the ride on the magic carpet. It was a fun trip. I always liked that song, but I found out later that someone was smoking something funny. I sill like the song. Good entry.
Elaine
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Elaine
I like to think of just the cartoon version. My grandchildren loved the show and all the magic. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from hotstuff
This story is lovely. It is so uplifting, a tale that gives value to make believe. At this time of year with Christmas approaching your story enforces my view that children should be allowed to believe in Father Christmas and not have this belief shattered by well meaning adults who feel they shouldn't lie to their children. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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This story is lovely. It is so uplifting, a tale that gives value to make believe. At this time of year with Christmas approaching your story enforces my view that children should be allowed to believe in Father Christmas and not have this belief shattered by well meaning adults who feel they shouldn't lie to their children. Great stuff.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
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Hotstuff
I couldn't agree with you more. Thank you so much for the kind review and believing in "just believing"...Smiles, Carol
