Comment from
Jazh
This is a very sad and poignant poem. You have portrayed childhood sexual abuse very well. It flows well, with good rhymes. The only suggestion I have - and it's just my personal opinion! - is to slightly shorten that last line. eg 'But I hope you made peace in heaven, [so] the new you [I'll] see". Just a thought. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
Thank you. I will look at it again. Hugs, Teri
Comment from
EllieKaye
That last stanza is such a beautiful expression of forgiveness. Amazing. I am glad you were able to forgive- because that helps you to grow.
Take care, dear Teri.
Ellie
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
Thank you my friend. Hugs, Teri