As Good As Better Men
He always was35 total reviews
Comment from charliecheshire
A very moving and beautiful piece of verse that was wonderfully graphic in its descriptions. great
All the best
Charlie Cheshire
The Cheese People
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2008
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A very moving and beautiful piece of verse that was wonderfully graphic in its descriptions. great
All the best
Charlie Cheshire
The Cheese People
Comment Written 03-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2008
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Thanks so much Mr Cheese People President! xoxoxoxo
Comment from Hitcher
That was really beautiful and very moving, I enjoyed that a lot and have got to thank you for sharing that little bit of magic. There is nothing I would change friend because it was perfect.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2008
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That was really beautiful and very moving, I enjoyed that a lot and have got to thank you for sharing that little bit of magic. There is nothing I would change friend because it was perfect.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2008
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Well, thank YOU friend, for your kind and beautiful words. Your review is like a blessing, all on its own xoxoxoxoxoxoo
Comment from skye
Such a beautiful, sad poem of love and loss, and hope, and love, and loss.
Your lines are exquisite, well written, tell the story in such a simple way.
The last lines are memorable.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Such a beautiful, sad poem of love and loss, and hope, and love, and loss.
Your lines are exquisite, well written, tell the story in such a simple way.
The last lines are memorable.
Very well done.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Thanks so much skye. Your comments are very much appreciated as is what I detect to be a very sharp perception. As said, thanks so very much for stopping by xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from dportwood
Sad, touching, heartfelt poetry. Well-written and easy reading with its rhyming flow. I like the message and the format you used all through the poem. Nicely done.
Duane
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Sad, touching, heartfelt poetry. Well-written and easy reading with its rhyming flow. I like the message and the format you used all through the poem. Nicely done.
Duane
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Thanks Duane; I'm always happy when you like my work xoxoxoxo
Comment from earthlybeing
Oh what a beautiful but sad poem. The story of their love is heart warming but this part of it is sad. Yet how beautiful to be together as she leaves the world. Great write. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Oh what a beautiful but sad poem. The story of their love is heart warming but this part of it is sad. Yet how beautiful to be together as she leaves the world. Great write. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Thanks Jeanette; it's always great to get another lovely review from you xoxoxoxo
Comment from Russel Chale
I love the poem; you've encapsulated intense emotion within each phrase, line and verse. However, I found the timeline confusing as present seemed to turn to past and then return to present. Perhaps confused reflections of a reminiscing mind?
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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I love the poem; you've encapsulated intense emotion within each phrase, line and verse. However, I found the timeline confusing as present seemed to turn to past and then return to present. Perhaps confused reflections of a reminiscing mind?
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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No my dear; more the confused ramblings of MY confused mind! Tweaked the bit that sent the timeline awry, so it should be right now. Thanks so much for pointing that out and for a great review! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from bard owl
What a genuinely touching poem you have penned about love. How true it is that we sometimes come to appreciate our life's love only when it about to die. Your natural sense of rhythm and rhyme shine in this sadly romantic poem. And the imagery of the beautiful eyes closing was really heartrending. Excellent ... no, exceptional writing. I wish I still had a six so I could give this masterpiece the rating it deserves. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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What a genuinely touching poem you have penned about love. How true it is that we sometimes come to appreciate our life's love only when it about to die. Your natural sense of rhythm and rhyme shine in this sadly romantic poem. And the imagery of the beautiful eyes closing was really heartrending. Excellent ... no, exceptional writing. I wish I still had a six so I could give this masterpiece the rating it deserves. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Your comments are worth a six anyway my friend. Those sixes surely are elusive and frustrating, eh?
Thanks as always for another tremendous review; always does me proud when you stop by xoxoxoxxo
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Two six-star rating are often not enough to dole out to us. When reviewers think something is hot, they should be able to let the writer know their work is more than excellent! Have a great day. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment from lovemyta
A very wonderful poem about a life time with the one he loved. She chose him, a man "good as better men". It is a touching story and emotional as well as strong with images. My only thought was the part that demons were waiting in the room. I only hope that there are angels waiting for me in my room. God bless.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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A very wonderful poem about a life time with the one he loved. She chose him, a man "good as better men". It is a touching story and emotional as well as strong with images. My only thought was the part that demons were waiting in the room. I only hope that there are angels waiting for me in my room. God bless.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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The 'demon' bit was more about his demons re-surfacing as he faced life alone. I tweaked that slightly so it points more to him than his poor dying wife! Thanks so very much for an excellent review and for mentioning that little bit - it got me to do a bit of needed tweaking xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Rar22
I really enjoyed reading this poem- the tone is sad and bittersweet, and the rhyming scheme is very consistent and works well for the piece. I also like your use of repetition, with "better men," "violet eyes," "skin so alabaster pale," etc. You've created an effective narrative with imagery and storytelling, and draw the reader into the speaker's sad nostalgia. Nice work!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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I really enjoyed reading this poem- the tone is sad and bittersweet, and the rhyming scheme is very consistent and works well for the piece. I also like your use of repetition, with "better men," "violet eyes," "skin so alabaster pale," etc. You've created an effective narrative with imagery and storytelling, and draw the reader into the speaker's sad nostalgia. Nice work!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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Thanks so much Rar22. Lovely to meet you this way. I'm glad you enjoyed this one, and I'll look forward to seeing you again! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from SunlitWhisper
I don't really know what to say as I found this to leave me speechless. What an awesome write/poem/prose you have here. It's so very touching to the soul and grabs at the heart. I think it's outstanding work, the flow and structure is just an added bonus for the reader.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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I don't really know what to say as I found this to leave me speechless. What an awesome write/poem/prose you have here. It's so very touching to the soul and grabs at the heart. I think it's outstanding work, the flow and structure is just an added bonus for the reader.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2008
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SunlitWhisper, thanks for this. You've left ME speechless with what you say here. I'm just so glad you enjoyed this and again, thanks so much xoxoxoxoxoxo