Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

A different poem form for you Debi. It was an interesting take with a different perspective. There was an asylum in the country where I grew up in Pennsylvania. Of course has been closed since the '60s.
Prayer is definitely the answer.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Janet, I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL

Asylums I don't even think exist anymore and if they did I wouldn't have made light of it by doing it for this song. Now I am second guessing myself.
Thanks for the kind review and kind words, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Kirsten Shonle

Excellent

I liked how each stanza had its own rhyming scheme that was kept through out. Oh how scary it would be to be locked up in an asylum. I would go nutty too. This poem was a good read.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Kristen, I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL

Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Kirsten Shonle on 01-Apr-2025

Oh, yeah had no idea that it was going with a song.

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

Your poem made me laugh, Debi. Thank you! I like the monorhyme in each stanza of your poem. The words convey a cute story, keeping with the theme of the prompt. Have a blessed week. Carol

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Oh Carol, thank you. Because I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Carol Clark2 on 01-Apr-2025

I didn't remember the song, but the words of the visual are familiar to me.

Comment from Nicki.B

Excellent

Oh this gave me goosebumps it's a real creepy one. Debi I don't know if I have seen you venture to the dark side of writing before, you could have but I've not seen it. You've done a great job here to create the dark atmosphere of an asylum, with great rhyme throughout, a great entry for the prompt! Well done I really enjoyed it..well in a creepy way lol!
Love
Nicki xxx

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Nicki and thank you. Because I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Wow! This isn't like anything I've ever read from you before, but it's great. I hate that I haven't been able to spend much time reading or even sitting to read, but hopefully it won't be long until I'm back in full swing. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

OMGosh, Ric, do you see what your absence has done to me. I am now writing dark poetry with weird songs. Hahahaha.

No, seriously, first of all it is terrific to see you, but I hope you aren't overdoing it.
Also, this is not me at all, and I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with it. LOL

Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend.
And gosh, you are a sight for sore eyes. Please take care of yourself and don't overdo it. Love, Debi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh my! I didn't think you'd join this club but you did write a scary suite of 1-5-5-9 poems. And the solution to pray is the right one. At least, the mental health institutions are not as horrible as it was in the 1960s

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025

OMGosh, Helen, I have been writing for Nomi's birthday for tomorrow. I am just doing a fun one this year for him, as he says he doesn't get into birthdays but he sure loves his poems about it. Haha.

But I said I was going to review yours and I fell asleep and then forgot until now. This is only the second scary poem I think I have ever written, but I only did it cause I had that song in my head and I thought it would be funny.
I hope nobody was offended but I just didn't take it serious. I made it as spooky as I could so I could play up to the part about, "They're coming to take me away." I thought the song is hilarious, so that is why I did it.

I maybe should write in my notes for anyone else who thought this was serious that I Just assumed they would see by the ending that it was a joke.
I don't even know if they call them that anymore. Now I think they are called Psychiatric hospitals.

So no, not me going to change my type of writing, but my sense of humor can be a little dark at times. As long as it doesn't deal with satan at all or anything to do with Christianity. There's where I draw the line.

Thanks for the review. Now I am on my way to review you. Hugs.
Love, Debi

reply by lyenochka on 31-Mar-2025

No worries! I do think you have been through some scary times!

We're on our way to help with grandkids as my daughter is having an emergency surgery 😲🙏💕

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025

I have but none of my poem had anything to do with those times. I had to really think to come up with scary comments.

I hope your daughter is going to be ok? What kind of surgery did she have? I am praying for her.

reply by lyenochka on 31-Mar-2025

Thank you! It's an emergency regarding her ovary

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Debi, excellent entry for the little shop of horror club... I'm enjoying participating too. Great presentation and rhyme scheme.

Well done


Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the uns aid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Thanks so very much, Gypsy. I sure appreciate your kind review and comments. I will come and check yours out as well. I am sure it is great.
Thanks again, dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I remember the song very well indeed, They're coming to take away he heh, hah hah. A brilliant talking record, it's a long time ago now, but I remember as if it were yesterday, this is beautifully written in 1/5/5/9 stanzas, a great job, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Roy, I thank you so much for that, because I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL.. I think you already knew that. Hehe.
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by royowen on 01-Apr-2025

I think it was a hit

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I will refuse to let them take you away no way will you ever be taken away by them. I enjoyed your poem and it is very well done. May you have a blessed day and may you understand that God loves you a whole lot more than anybody else. Patricia.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Oh Patricia, thank you. You are such a sweetheart. I wouldn't have even done this but I just realized that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. LOL
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from estory

Excellent

I think this poem captures something of the sense of isolation one feels in a place like this, a sense of the self against the establishment, the confusing surroundings, the sense of separation from society. estory

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

estory, you are so right. However, I have to be honest with you. I didn't mean any disrespect, but I did it for the humor. I know that they no longer treat people like that, so when I heard of this prompt I remembered that song from my childhood and I had it in my head to use the song and wrote it accordingly so it would end that way and go right into the video.

However, I did agree with you that when I was young and saw "One freeway over the Cuckoo's Nest" I was appalled. So it is good that now patients are treated with more dignity. Thanks for the awesome review and comments.
Love, Debi