You Would Know
A poem about betrayal29 total reviews
Comment from njcoleman
Wow! Jessica,
This is so honest and powerful.
"I'd place it at your feet,
then fall apart before you".
What? Holy Pete! That is an awesome line. Fantastic work! Neil
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Wow! Jessica,
This is so honest and powerful.
"I'd place it at your feet,
then fall apart before you".
What? Holy Pete! That is an awesome line. Fantastic work! Neil
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Neil, thank you so much for your wonderful review! Xoxoxo
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
I really liked your poem. The last stanza was a great way to wrap this poem up. The poem told a story which is an achievement of its own. I wish you luck in the contest.
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I really liked your poem. The last stanza was a great way to wrap this poem up. The poem told a story which is an achievement of its own. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from royowen
I never truly understood what love was until I met God, and then realised, it's like truth, we have an incredibly poor view and concept, and never really understand its depth and height and width, every waking hour I have it is my desire is to apprehend it, at least in part, the pinnacle is being willing to die for it, if we struggle with that, we'll never know it's glory. Here's a sample:
If I speak in the tongues of men or of angels, but do not have love, I am only a resounding gong or a clanging cymbal. If I have the gift of prophecy and can fathom all mysteries and all knowledge, and if I have a faith that can move mountains, but do not have love, I am nothing. If I give all I possess to the poor and give over my body to hardship that I may boast, but do not have love, I gain nothing.
Love is patient, love is kind. It does not envy, it does not boast, it is not proud. It does not dishonor others, it is not self-seeking, it is not easily angered, it keeps no record of wrongs. Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. It always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres.
Love never fails.
Blessings Roy
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I never truly understood what love was until I met God, and then realised, it's like truth, we have an incredibly poor view and concept, and never really understand its depth and height and width, every waking hour I have it is my desire is to apprehend it, at least in part, the pinnacle is being willing to die for it, if we struggle with that, we'll never know it's glory. Here's a sample:
If I speak in the tongues of men or of angels, but do not have love, I am only a resounding gong or a clanging cymbal. If I have the gift of prophecy and can fathom all mysteries and all knowledge, and if I have a faith that can move mountains, but do not have love, I am nothing. If I give all I possess to the poor and give over my body to hardship that I may boast, but do not have love, I gain nothing.
Love is patient, love is kind. It does not envy, it does not boast, it is not proud. It does not dishonor others, it is not self-seeking, it is not easily angered, it keeps no record of wrongs. Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. It always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres.
Love never fails.
Blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from Sally Law
This is with a doubt one of your finest poems, Jess. It has such depth and soul. The cadence of your poem never let up, it beat like a soft drum throughout. The last two stanzas made me weep.
Please take my final word,
a token from the wreckage.
And know this promise sworn, I'll not betray.
One day the wind will pull;
you'll fall without resistance,
and I'll be just a stop along your way.
Magnificent! Brava!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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This is with a doubt one of your finest poems, Jess. It has such depth and soul. The cadence of your poem never let up, it beat like a soft drum throughout. The last two stanzas made me weep.
Please take my final word,
a token from the wreckage.
And know this promise sworn, I'll not betray.
One day the wind will pull;
you'll fall without resistance,
and I'll be just a stop along your way.
Magnificent! Brava!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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My Sally, thank you so much for your wonderful words and kindness. Truly, it means the world! Xoxo
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My pleasure, dear Jess.
Blessings to you always.
Sal Xoxo
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a well written emotional poem of betrayal. You use details descriptions and effective words to express your regret of betraying. The one betrayed most likely moves on more freely than the one who has betrayed. Excellent writing!
Alex
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This is a well written emotional poem of betrayal. You use details descriptions and effective words to express your regret of betraying. The one betrayed most likely moves on more freely than the one who has betrayed. Excellent writing!
Alex
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from estory
This poem takes us on a rhythmic journey of a relationship. I really liked how you built up the rhythm of these short and long lines juxtaposed against each other, with these strong ringing rhymes that ring at such regular intervals. There is a strong melancholy mood to it. It almost reminded me of Keats' St. Agnes Eve in some ways. The imagery is colorful, but sad, not despairing, but accepting of the nature of relationships. There is forgiveness here, awareness of the responsibilities of each person in the relationship. estory
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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This poem takes us on a rhythmic journey of a relationship. I really liked how you built up the rhythm of these short and long lines juxtaposed against each other, with these strong ringing rhymes that ring at such regular intervals. There is a strong melancholy mood to it. It almost reminded me of Keats' St. Agnes Eve in some ways. The imagery is colorful, but sad, not despairing, but accepting of the nature of relationships. There is forgiveness here, awareness of the responsibilities of each person in the relationship. estory
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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estory, I am so grateful for your insightful words, as always. Thank you. Xo
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is deeply moving. It is filled with so much emotion. Each stanza flows beautifully. And the honesty in your words is heartbreaking.
The final lines hit especially hard. There is an acceptance there that feels both painful and freeing. Absolutely stunning writing!
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Your poem is deeply moving. It is filled with so much emotion. Each stanza flows beautifully. And the honesty in your words is heartbreaking.
The final lines hit especially hard. There is an acceptance there that feels both painful and freeing. Absolutely stunning writing!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from patcelaw
This is very beautifully written, and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read out loud. I like the idea that you chose to make this part of your life how that you may be betrayed someone that you loved. It takes a very big person to admit that they have betrayed someone and to ask for forgiveness. Patricia.
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This is very beautifully written, and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read out loud. I like the idea that you chose to make this part of your life how that you may be betrayed someone that you loved. It takes a very big person to admit that they have betrayed someone and to ask for forgiveness. Patricia.
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this betrayal contest entry with us. You came at this contest from a different point of view. Yet, it works perfectly. I could feel the emotion. Wonderful job and good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this betrayal contest entry with us. You came at this contest from a different point of view. Yet, it works perfectly. I could feel the emotion. Wonderful job and good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
