A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This chapter flows so well from start to finish. Rebeka sounds very independent. Tyler's professionalism is very kind. Listening to the baby's heartbeat sounded realistic, but then, I've never had children. The dialogue is well done. Could not find anything to improve on for now.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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This chapter flows so well from start to finish. Rebeka sounds very independent. Tyler's professionalism is very kind. Listening to the baby's heartbeat sounded realistic, but then, I've never had children. The dialogue is well done. Could not find anything to improve on for now.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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I have 5 pregnancies. Listening to the baby's heartbeat is very exciting. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Rebeka is in the kind of place she has no ability to take care of by herself. She is very fortunate to have run into the doctor's mailbox. She is even more fortunate to learn he has a lawyer friend who knows how to handle her problems. The story is building tension nicely.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Rebeka is in the kind of place she has no ability to take care of by herself. She is very fortunate to have run into the doctor's mailbox. She is even more fortunate to learn he has a lawyer friend who knows how to handle her problems. The story is building tension nicely.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Her running into the mailbox is sort of a serendipitous meeting. LOL
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your story! Tyler's kindness Rebeka made him so easy to like. I loved how you captured Rebeka's hesitation but also her growing trust in him. Especially during the scene with the baby's heartbeat - such a sweet moment! The little touches of humor are wonderful. The dialogue flowed really well - makes it all feel so real. Great job - I can't wait to see where this goes!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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I really enjoyed your story! Tyler's kindness Rebeka made him so easy to like. I loved how you captured Rebeka's hesitation but also her growing trust in him. Especially during the scene with the baby's heartbeat - such a sweet moment! The little touches of humor are wonderful. The dialogue flowed really well - makes it all feel so real. Great job - I can't wait to see where this goes!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another interesting read with Tyler giving Rebeka more than her fair share of attention. And also Roger attending to her legal affairs. This girl seems to have it all going for her, plus Amber who is a nice contrast to Rebeka's very reserved disposition. Could you remind be how far gone her pregnancy is because the lawyer's intervention seems a bit premature? Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Another interesting read with Tyler giving Rebeka more than her fair share of attention. And also Roger attending to her legal affairs. This girl seems to have it all going for her, plus Amber who is a nice contrast to Rebeka's very reserved disposition. Could you remind be how far gone her pregnancy is because the lawyer's intervention seems a bit premature? Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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She's right at 13 weeks pregnant. Roger was involved because of the stolen money, but... Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Are you kidding me? Thi sis a story I think I would love to see as a feature film. I have no doubt that it would become a favorite. If cast with the right actors, maybe even an award winner. Definitely a contender. This is starting out as another great story.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Are you kidding me? Thi sis a story I think I would love to see as a feature film. I have no doubt that it would become a favorite. If cast with the right actors, maybe even an award winner. Definitely a contender. This is starting out as another great story.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Barbara,
What a great chapter of your book. I think Tyler has a thing for Rebeka. I think he's going to pursue her till he gets what he wants. Love the tension between them.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Barbara,
What a great chapter of your book. I think Tyler has a thing for Rebeka. I think he's going to pursue her till he gets what he wants. Love the tension between them.
Cecilia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Rebeka will be a challenge. I wonder if Tyler is up for it.
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Oh, I think he is
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
How interesting this is, Tyler is most amused by a very vulnerable 22 year pregnant woman in Rebeka, and I suspect despite her precarious position in being in her life is Tyler is probably attracted to her, nobody is more vulnerable and attracts compassion is a pregnant woman, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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How interesting this is, Tyler is most amused by a very vulnerable 22 year pregnant woman in Rebeka, and I suspect despite her precarious position in being in her life is Tyler is probably attracted to her, nobody is more vulnerable and attracts compassion is a pregnant woman, well done Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the understanding and the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are continuing to develop your story wonderfully.I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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This is another excellent chapter. You are continuing to develop your story wonderfully.I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"Tyler, this is my assistance, Amber Wilson." assistant
Gee, Rebeka may never leave if she's not feeling well. No reason why she can't extend that vacation a little:-)
Thanks, Barbara.
xo
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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"Tyler, this is my assistance, Amber Wilson." assistant
Gee, Rebeka may never leave if she's not feeling well. No reason why she can't extend that vacation a little:-)
Thanks, Barbara.
xo
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the catch. I'm amazed I didn't catch it in editing. I appreciate the help. Rebeka is a writer, she can write from anywhere. LOL
Comment from Begin Again
Great job with this chapter, Barbara. It's obvious that Tyler and Roger will take good care of Rebekah and the baby and prevent any harm to either of them. Good people are something we all need in our lives. Excellent!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Great job with this chapter, Barbara. It's obvious that Tyler and Roger will take good care of Rebekah and the baby and prevent any harm to either of them. Good people are something we all need in our lives. Excellent!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Yes, we all need good people and there are good people in the world. Thank you for the kind review.
