A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Rebeka is old-fashioned, yes, but she also seems pretty uptight. Of course, she's alone with a stranger in a dark house, and I think we'll find out that her father is the reason she's so stiff.
Barbara, I'll be away from the site for a while, but hope to follow along as time allows.
Enjoy the writing!
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Rebeka is old-fashioned, yes, but she also seems pretty uptight. Of course, she's alone with a stranger in a dark house, and I think we'll find out that her father is the reason she's so stiff.
Barbara, I'll be away from the site for a while, but hope to follow along as time allows.
Enjoy the writing!
xo
Pam
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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I hope you're able to follow along. Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Rebeka has numerous issues.
Comment from Sankey
You continue to be a great storyteller. These characters all sound so real and love the interactions portrayed. Tyler sounds like a loving Uncle. I do look forward to more of this wonderful story.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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You continue to be a great storyteller. These characters all sound so real and love the interactions portrayed. Tyler sounds like a loving Uncle. I do look forward to more of this wonderful story.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Thank you for your kind support.
Comment from Ulla
Well, it's a great first chapter to a brand new story. So far I'm enjoying it a lot. I loved the part about the goat that seemed to become pregnant for no good reason. It's great. A big hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Well, it's a great first chapter to a brand new story. So far I'm enjoying it a lot. I loved the part about the goat that seemed to become pregnant for no good reason. It's great. A big hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. We will revisite the goat. LOL
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well written No errors in spelling, punctuation, or grammar - of course.
Sugar in cornbread makes it Johnny cake, an abomination to Southerners.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Very well written No errors in spelling, punctuation, or grammar - of course.
Sugar in cornbread makes it Johnny cake, an abomination to Southerners.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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LOL Thank you for the kind review. I put sugar in my cornbread.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very much your structure your presentation and your paragraphing are all excellent. You have also done a very good job with your punctuation in this story which makes it read well when it is read aloud may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very much your structure your presentation and your paragraphing are all excellent. You have also done a very good job with your punctuation in this story which makes it read well when it is read aloud may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from estory
You're orchestrating this romance novel within a romance novel pretty much according to prescription. The guy is cute, the girl is cute, they are stuck together, the storm is keeping them cuddled up together. The people around them are making suggestions. But they are tactfully hanging back for now. A little cute commentary about the goat and the billy getting together in secret between farms. Foreshadowing, perhaps? estory
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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You're orchestrating this romance novel within a romance novel pretty much according to prescription. The guy is cute, the girl is cute, they are stuck together, the storm is keeping them cuddled up together. The people around them are making suggestions. But they are tactfully hanging back for now. A little cute commentary about the goat and the billy getting together in secret between farms. Foreshadowing, perhaps? estory
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Maybe foreshadowing. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
So the saga of Rebeka and Dr. Tyler continues. It will be interesting to see who adventures the first romantic move. It's refreshing to see characters with humility and values. Hope this continues for awhile.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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So the saga of Rebeka and Dr. Tyler continues. It will be interesting to see who adventures the first romantic move. It's refreshing to see characters with humility and values. Hope this continues for awhile.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind and uplifting review with me.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the sound of this being a little different and, already, I can see that there is an awkwardness between Tyler and Rebeka, suggesting something in their background, presumably religion, keeping them acting very properly and not letting their guard down. The weather outside is a great addition, adding atmosphere to this intriguing context. Well done, Barbara. Looking forward to reading the next chapter. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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I like the sound of this being a little different and, already, I can see that there is an awkwardness between Tyler and Rebeka, suggesting something in their background, presumably religion, keeping them acting very properly and not letting their guard down. The weather outside is a great addition, adding atmosphere to this intriguing context. Well done, Barbara. Looking forward to reading the next chapter. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Begin Again
Sounds like you've gotten off to a great start..though Rebekah probably doesn't agree. Tyler seems fairly grounded and has taken the responsibility of raising Lily very seriously. I loved the prayer. Rebekah has her troubles with Richard possibly embezzling but also with her father. Can't wait to see how it progresses.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Sounds like you've gotten off to a great start..though Rebekah probably doesn't agree. Tyler seems fairly grounded and has taken the responsibility of raising Lily very seriously. I loved the prayer. Rebekah has her troubles with Richard possibly embezzling but also with her father. Can't wait to see how it progresses.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Yes, it gets cozier by the minute, exactly as Amber noticed and commented upon! Speaking of that, here's a spag to edit: "I think I'll go to my room. I need to call my assistance, (assistant.)
Also, this sentence seemed to be missing a word: She continued with (why?) she left town, decided to...
This was an enjoyable read. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter! xo
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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Yes, it gets cozier by the minute, exactly as Amber noticed and commented upon! Speaking of that, here's a spag to edit: "I think I'll go to my room. I need to call my assistance, (assistant.)
Also, this sentence seemed to be missing a word: She continued with (why?) she left town, decided to...
This was an enjoyable read. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter! xo
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2025
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I read that sentence over and over again with the why and couldn't figure out what was wrong with it. Thank you. I guess my brain died temporarily. LOL I appreciate the help.
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