Winter Nesting
Minute Poetry26 total reviews
Comment from Faith Williams
Minute poems are one of my favorite forms, and yours is particularly lovely. Perfect rhymes and rhythm evoke that wonderful lyrical feeling. I was drawn to the lines,
'my world is hushed
and life's unrushed'
and
'calm reverie'
One suggestion to consider: To me, the word 'incite' brings to mind a person stirring up the pot which seems to go against the general theme of your poem. Maybe switch it out for a different word-evoke?
Just a suggestion.
It is a wonderful entry. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Minute poems are one of my favorite forms, and yours is particularly lovely. Perfect rhymes and rhythm evoke that wonderful lyrical feeling. I was drawn to the lines,
'my world is hushed
and life's unrushed'
and
'calm reverie'
One suggestion to consider: To me, the word 'incite' brings to mind a person stirring up the pot which seems to go against the general theme of your poem. Maybe switch it out for a different word-evoke?
Just a suggestion.
It is a wonderful entry. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Hello Faith. Thank you so very much. I relooked at the word... 'incite' and agree it has a harsher meaning than I meant to convey. I really appreciate your suggestion and incorporated it into my poem. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
And there she is! I was just getting ready to pm' you to see if you were okay. Im delighted to see you back in the swing with this beautiful minute poem. Perfection, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the contest.
Sal Xoxo's
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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And there she is! I was just getting ready to pm' you to see if you were okay. Im delighted to see you back in the swing with this beautiful minute poem. Perfection, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the contest.
Sal Xoxo's
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Hello Sally. I am ok... we have had a death in the family, and I've been away. My 42 year old niece had a brain tumor and passed last Friday. I haven't felt too much like writing these past two weeks. I appreciate your concern for me. Hugs and thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a lovely poem about an idyllic winter's day. I enjoyed the idea of "the coffee's foam" being one of the "quiet sounds within [your] home. You make the entire scene so easy and appealing to visualize.
If you don't mind one suggestion, in the last verse, where you say,
their poetry
cause me to rest,
"poetry" is singular so, grammatically, it should say "causes me to rest." I understand why you can't say that, but what about, "leads [or 'lulls'] me to rest"?
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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This is a lovely poem about an idyllic winter's day. I enjoyed the idea of "the coffee's foam" being one of the "quiet sounds within [your] home. You make the entire scene so easy and appealing to visualize.
If you don't mind one suggestion, in the last verse, where you say,
their poetry
cause me to rest,
"poetry" is singular so, grammatically, it should say "causes me to rest." I understand why you can't say that, but what about, "leads [or 'lulls'] me to rest"?
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Michele. I worried over that last stanza and you have offered a perfect solution. Hugs! And thanks bunches!!
Melissa
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My pleasure, Melissa. I'm so happy I was able to help. It's such a lovely poem, and I hated to see it hindered by a simple grammatical glitch.
xoxoxo
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a lovely minute poem for the contest. Your syllable counts are perfect, and I like the rhymes you used. Your words make me want to curl up with a good book. Blessings, and best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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This is a lovely minute poem for the contest. Your syllable counts are perfect, and I like the rhymes you used. Your words make me want to curl up with a good book. Blessings, and best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you Carol... I plan to read this evening with a cup of something hot... can't be coffee or I'll be up all night... LOL. I appreciate your lovely words!!
Melissa
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Thanks, Melissa. I enjoyed your poem. Enjoy your reading. Carol
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Okay. Well done. I checked the meter, rhyme and sylllable count and you should qualify for a win-show or place. I wish you well, and thanks for sharing. Have you any interest in writing for my Sweet Sixteen contest. If anyone can meet that challenge it could be you.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Okay. Well done. I checked the meter, rhyme and sylllable count and you should qualify for a win-show or place. I wish you well, and thanks for sharing. Have you any interest in writing for my Sweet Sixteen contest. If anyone can meet that challenge it could be you.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you Tom, so much. I thought about the Sweet Sixteen, but to be honest, I am swamped here at home. My sweet niece just passed away and we have been out of state for two weeks, just got back in. So, I will have to see about it. Hugs, dear friend.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a very cosy place to me as you describe the coffee to drink and the books to ready Melissa, always perfectly metered and rhymed, I enjoyed your Minute Poem, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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This sounds like a very cosy place to me as you describe the coffee to drink and the books to ready Melissa, always perfectly metered and rhymed, I enjoyed your Minute Poem, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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thanks so much Dolly. I think I will change the photo. I found one with a fireplace :). Hugs!!
Melissa
