Willing Hearts
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Comment from estory
This chapter is heavy on dialogue, it is pretty realistic, true to the characters. In it, we see Sami and Noah moving through the different things they dislike about each other to an acceptance of them and a mutual agreement to change things in themselves. It is an articulation of what every couple has to go through to make a successful relationship. You have to compromise. estory
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This chapter is heavy on dialogue, it is pretty realistic, true to the characters. In it, we see Sami and Noah moving through the different things they dislike about each other to an acceptance of them and a mutual agreement to change things in themselves. It is an articulation of what every couple has to go through to make a successful relationship. You have to compromise. estory
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Compromise is the key to any good relationship.
Comment from judiverse
I think there is a big moment yet to come, having to do with what Noah was working when he told Sami he didn't want to get her hopes up. I don't know about all that touchy-feely stuff about what everyone's experience has been like while Sami has been in protective custody. It sounds like something Sami would think of, however. Recalling the encounter with the longhorn steer was funny. That certainly would have been an unforgettable sight. I've been thinking about this, and I think in future it might be a good idea for you to give a brief recap of what's happened previously instead of using the last part of the chapter. Great characterization. judi
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I think there is a big moment yet to come, having to do with what Noah was working when he told Sami he didn't want to get her hopes up. I don't know about all that touchy-feely stuff about what everyone's experience has been like while Sami has been in protective custody. It sounds like something Sami would think of, however. Recalling the encounter with the longhorn steer was funny. That certainly would have been an unforgettable sight. I've been thinking about this, and I think in future it might be a good idea for you to give a brief recap of what's happened previously instead of using the last part of the chapter. Great characterization. judi
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I will consider your suggestion. Thank you for the kind support.
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That was just a thought for your next book. Maybe giving a summary of what happened would be more helpful that giving the last part. judi
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This is a great chapter. I am a little challenged, since I am just coming into the middle of the book. You capture your audience with the descriptions of the surrounding.
Your dialogue is perfect. It's almost like your readers are there and part of the conversation.
Great job.
Cecilia
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Carol,
This is a great chapter. I am a little challenged, since I am just coming into the middle of the book. You capture your audience with the descriptions of the surrounding.
Your dialogue is perfect. It's almost like your readers are there and part of the conversation.
Great job.
Cecilia
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This novel is more than 3/4's complete, so it's more than half finished. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I hope to see you again.
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You're welcome and I enjoyed reading this chapter. I will be back.
Cecilia
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well, tomorrow is the big day. Freedom for Sami, but will it be? We will be finding out soon enough. Another excellent chapter, Barbara.
There are a couple of questions, I hope you don't mind.
1) - I've never heard anyone swallow loudly, yet you say Sami did. I did try to do it myself! Lol.
2) - This is something I've wanted to mention before now, but you have this particular saying cropping up a lot. Twice in this chapter, and others. You have her... smile lit the room... and her.... eyes lit the room.
I hope you didn't mind me mentioning them. Perhaps just, her eyes shone...
Other than that, it's such a lovely story. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Well, tomorrow is the big day. Freedom for Sami, but will it be? We will be finding out soon enough. Another excellent chapter, Barbara.
There are a couple of questions, I hope you don't mind.
1) - I've never heard anyone swallow loudly, yet you say Sami did. I did try to do it myself! Lol.
2) - This is something I've wanted to mention before now, but you have this particular saying cropping up a lot. Twice in this chapter, and others. You have her... smile lit the room... and her.... eyes lit the room.
I hope you didn't mind me mentioning them. Perhaps just, her eyes shone...
Other than that, it's such a lovely story. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I will consider the eyed shone. I see what you're saying. I did swallow loudly to mean it was loud enough others could hear it as opposed to a silent swallow. I'll think about it too. I appreciate the suggestions.
Comment from Begin Again
This is a very warm, touchy-feely chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed it very much. It's nice to see people open up and show how much others mean to them. They've been through a lot of drama and were able to make strong bonds with each other. Nice job!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This is a very warm, touchy-feely chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed it very much. It's nice to see people open up and show how much others mean to them. They've been through a lot of drama and were able to make strong bonds with each other. Nice job!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.