Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I really enjoyed this 'Thriller' scarecrow in his horror scene, complete with accompanying videos. It's full of haunting imagery and seems to comply fully with the contest brief. The repeating lines provide emphasis and cohesion and is a good device. Frankly ( excuse the partial pun) there are some bumps in the rhythm and one repeated line, in particular, might need a slight tweak. Suggestion only - "He's stuffed with straw, bedecked and frayed in shirt and weathered pants." But this is a strong contender and I wish you the best of luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Thanks Debbie, you helped me with a spot I was not comfortable with last night when I posted, but hearing someone else who felt the same way prompted me to change that line to, "His head will turn to give a wicked smile and evil glance." What do you think? And thanks so very much!

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 10-Nov-2024

Yes, I like that:)

Comment from Tim Margetts

Excellent

I like the link in to Michael Jackson's Thriller, He matches that songs vibe nicely.
I wouldn't want to meet him on a dark night.
Good Luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Hi Tim, you know me as mostly a poet but this prompt was a little unusual for me too while trying to keep it straight all the different lines that needed to be repeated. While I was editing and changing it, I had to make sure I did the one that I repeated too. So it was quite the challenge. But it was fun too. Thanks so much for your kind comments.

Comment from ESOSTINE

Exceptional

That looks like an AI powered scarecrow there. Yet it is surprising why it could not scare the crows dancing around him. I enjoyed the rhythmic flow of the poem. Well penned, and a perfect matching image.Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Hi Esostine, you know me as mostly a poet but this prompt was a little unusual for me too while trying to keep it straight all the different lines that needed to be repeated. While I was editing and changing it, I had to make sure I did the one that I repeated too. So it was quite the challenge. But it was fun too. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments and the generous six stars.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This pantoum, Cornfield Frankenstein, has the proper formatting and introduces a farmyard frightener which "stalks" the night and makes a crow turn pale.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Hi Bill, you know me as mostly a poet but this prompt was a little unusual for me too while trying to keep it straight all the different lines that needed to be repeated. While I was editing and changing it, I had to make sure I did the one that I repeated too. So it was quite the challenge. But it was fun too. Thanks so much for your kind comments.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This is an excellent pantoum, you've done all the right things in the writing of this pantoum, you've captured the repetitiveness of this poetic form, it's a great and outstanding job you've done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Well Roy, you know me as mostly a poet but this prompt was a little unusual for me too while trying to keep it straight all the different lines that needed to be repeated. While I was editing and changing it, I had to make sure I did the one that I repeated too. So it was quite the challenge. But it was fun too. Thanks so much for your kind comments.

reply by royowen on 10-Nov-2024

Yep I understand, it requires concentration too, well done

Comment from CM Pickard

Excellent

What a challenge, repeated lines, a set rhyme scheme and trying to make sure everything not only makes sense but works well. This is not just a great effort but an excellent poem.

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024

Hi CM, I have noticed that you are new here. I welcome you and hope you'll be happy here. Thank you for the kind review.