The Vice of Age
Blank verse43 total reviews
Comment from Sallyo
I love blank verse... and this piece is entirely apposite. Trying to leave a footprint without notoriety isn't easy, so I suppose we just have to do the best we can and not have too many regrets. Your piece is impressive, as one would expect from you.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I love blank verse... and this piece is entirely apposite. Trying to leave a footprint without notoriety isn't easy, so I suppose we just have to do the best we can and not have too many regrets. Your piece is impressive, as one would expect from you.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review and kind comments, Sally, not to mention the award of a sixth star. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Amelie Johns
Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem Tony. I think my abacus would be giant size with missing beads all over the place, lol. This is a thought provoking poem that makes you think about life and existence. I like your choice of artwork too. A young girl starting out in life, not a regretful thought and no missing beads.
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem Tony. I think my abacus would be giant size with missing beads all over the place, lol. This is a thought provoking poem that makes you think about life and existence. I like your choice of artwork too. A young girl starting out in life, not a regretful thought and no missing beads.
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Amelie. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Thank you very much for your review, Amelie. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great descriptive words in this blank verse poem. Of course, to be honest, I have no clue what a blank verse poem is. That being said, I did enjoy reading. There's a great message with this poem about regrets and the end of life. There's a lot in the middle.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Great descriptive words in this blank verse poem. Of course, to be honest, I have no clue what a blank verse poem is. That being said, I did enjoy reading. There's a great message with this poem about regrets and the end of life. There's a lot in the middle.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Barbara. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Thank you very much for your review, Barbara. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Daniel Milton Taylor
Thank you for this poetic rendering on Age. Although it's Blank Verse, it's surely not Blank. It speaks volumes about life in general and pushes you to specifically think about your own. I'm into my 66th year of my summation and thank God for all the love that's been intertwined in those years. I also Thank you for the education. I don't remember or haven't heard some of those rhythmic terms so it's gonna be fun looking for the examples in your poem. God bless, Daniel
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you for this poetic rendering on Age. Although it's Blank Verse, it's surely not Blank. It speaks volumes about life in general and pushes you to specifically think about your own. I'm into my 66th year of my summation and thank God for all the love that's been intertwined in those years. I also Thank you for the education. I don't remember or haven't heard some of those rhythmic terms so it's gonna be fun looking for the examples in your poem. God bless, Daniel
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Daniel. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Thank you very much for your review, Daniel. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
A great piece. I really liked it. The language is contemporary, very conversational, very personal. The imagery especially at the opening, is attention grabbing, unique. I liked that "Counting off regrets on an abacus of might have beens". You paint a wonderful, poignant portrait of a life, summed up in an epitaph. It really makes you think of those unsung heros of the world, the faces on the buses on people we never get to know, the hopes and dreams that go unsaid. In between the lines here is that life. This is top quality, it belongs in a magazine. estory
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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A great piece. I really liked it. The language is contemporary, very conversational, very personal. The imagery especially at the opening, is attention grabbing, unique. I liked that "Counting off regrets on an abacus of might have beens". You paint a wonderful, poignant portrait of a life, summed up in an epitaph. It really makes you think of those unsung heros of the world, the faces on the buses on people we never get to know, the hopes and dreams that go unsaid. In between the lines here is that life. This is top quality, it belongs in a magazine. estory
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thanks very much, estory, for these very kind words and accompanying sixth star. I haven't been writing much poetry recently and appreciate the encouragement. All good wishes, Tony
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You haven't lost your touch. As a matter of fact, I think this is one of your best pieces. estory
Comment from Teri7
Tony, This is a very interesting and well written blank verse you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Tony, This is a very interesting and well written blank verse you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Teri. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Thank you very much for your review, Teri. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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You are so welcome Tony!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Love your authors notes! I tell writers I work with all the time to switch it up. Don't be afraid. Try new things. And sometimes just write it as you feel it and want to convey it. This beautifully captures the bittersweet process of looking back on a life--counting regrets, missteps, and the small moments that might not add up to much but somehow mean everything. The "abacus of might-have-beens" is such a vivid way to describe how we hold on to past choices, even as memories fade or get "conveniently mislaid." I love how the ending brings a comforting realization: despite everything, love defines a life. That simple truth lands with a soft but powerful impact, leaving a feeling of peace. It's a thought-provoking and heartfelt piece.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Love your authors notes! I tell writers I work with all the time to switch it up. Don't be afraid. Try new things. And sometimes just write it as you feel it and want to convey it. This beautifully captures the bittersweet process of looking back on a life--counting regrets, missteps, and the small moments that might not add up to much but somehow mean everything. The "abacus of might-have-beens" is such a vivid way to describe how we hold on to past choices, even as memories fade or get "conveniently mislaid." I love how the ending brings a comforting realization: despite everything, love defines a life. That simple truth lands with a soft but powerful impact, leaving a feeling of peace. It's a thought-provoking and heartfelt piece.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for this thoughtful review, Patty. Very much appreciated. I'm delighted the poem resonated with you. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Barry Penfold
This is something quite different to me. Thanks for the notes and thanks for sharing. I like the commencing lines of the poem despite the sombre tone.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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This is something quite different to me. Thanks for the notes and thanks for sharing. I like the commencing lines of the poem despite the sombre tone.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Barry. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Thank you very much for your review, Barry. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Nicki.B
I'm alarmed as I don't know what any of these are....quote - It's not unusual to find trochaic and pyrrhic substitutions, caesuras, enjambment and feminine endings-
I'm only writing with a few months so these terms are new!
I love this poem, how reads so easily off the tongue with lovely flow....and the message and content is gets one deep into thought about life! Well done on all accounts. Guessing you are a teacher or by reading this a professional writer!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I'm alarmed as I don't know what any of these are....quote - It's not unusual to find trochaic and pyrrhic substitutions, caesuras, enjambment and feminine endings-
I'm only writing with a few months so these terms are new!
I love this poem, how reads so easily off the tongue with lovely flow....and the message and content is gets one deep into thought about life! Well done on all accounts. Guessing you are a teacher or by reading this a professional writer!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thanks very much for your review, Nicki. The poetic jargon is less important than the way a poem sounds, although knowledge of techniques can help in that regard. I'm certainly not a professional writer, but yes - I was a primary school teacher for a number of years. All good wishes, Tony
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Thanks very much for your review, Nicki. The poetic jargon is less important than the way a poem sounds, although knowledge of techniques can help in that regard. I'm certainly not a professional writer, but yes - I was a primary school teacher for a number of years. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Natureschild
Hi Tony, This is a beautifully crafted poem. It evokes notes of old age and regrets through powerful metaphor: "abacus of might-have-beens" which I found very effective. My favourite lines are "missing beads" that are "conveniently mislaid" . This reminds me of my own failing memory.
Well done. - Terry
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Hi Tony, This is a beautifully crafted poem. It evokes notes of old age and regrets through powerful metaphor: "abacus of might-have-beens" which I found very effective. My favourite lines are "missing beads" that are "conveniently mislaid" . This reminds me of my own failing memory.
Well done. - Terry
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much for your review, Terry. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony