Willing Hearts
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Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I guess I did not look at Chen's name until now. I thought he was oriental, but not with that handle. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I guess I did not look at Chen's name until now. I thought he was oriental, but not with that handle. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was sobering in the fact that this stuff really goes on. It scares me when I see young girls running around alone. Usually, they are so into their own worlds that they don't pay attention. The world is a different place now, I guess. I like that Sami and Noah are finally communicating. Great chapter. Now we wait for the dance. Will it happen or be canceled? Gretchen
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This was sobering in the fact that this stuff really goes on. It scares me when I see young girls running around alone. Usually, they are so into their own worlds that they don't pay attention. The world is a different place now, I guess. I like that Sami and Noah are finally communicating. Great chapter. Now we wait for the dance. Will it happen or be canceled? Gretchen
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Noah and Sami will backslide some before they finally get it together.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I know I've probably said this a dozen times since you started this story, but I just can't get over you of all people writing this story. But it's great and you're doing a wonderful job. It's like Pulitzer Prize winning writer Sam Shepard used to tell me, the different between a good writer and a great writer is you have to put yourself out there and be willing to tell the whole truth, completely, the good, the bad, and the ugly. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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I know I've probably said this a dozen times since you started this story, but I just can't get over you of all people writing this story. But it's great and you're doing a wonderful job. It's like Pulitzer Prize winning writer Sam Shepard used to tell me, the different between a good writer and a great writer is you have to put yourself out there and be willing to tell the whole truth, completely, the good, the bad, and the ugly. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you, you're so sweet. I honestly pray I don't disappoint you with this story.
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It's impossible for you to disappoint me with anything you write. You put yourself out there and aren't afraid to get outside your comfort zone. What else can any fan ask for? Your writing is always a pleasure, my dear. :-)
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HUGS!!!!
Comment from judiverse
Lots of developments in the story. Sami had a good idea about warning the girls about going to the teen dance. Men have been overheard talk of kidnapping some girls at the event. If her call prevents that, it'll be a good thing. She's becoming more comfortable around Noah, but it's taking time for them to trust one another. The armed convenience store robbers on the loose adds an interesting element. I hope there won't be any problem with Bob's trip to the grocery store. Great details about life in protective custody. Really holds reader's attention. judi
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Lots of developments in the story. Sami had a good idea about warning the girls about going to the teen dance. Men have been overheard talk of kidnapping some girls at the event. If her call prevents that, it'll be a good thing. She's becoming more comfortable around Noah, but it's taking time for them to trust one another. The armed convenience store robbers on the loose adds an interesting element. I hope there won't be any problem with Bob's trip to the grocery store. Great details about life in protective custody. Really holds reader's attention. judi
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Sami does have some good ideas.
Comment from jim vecchio
Your writing is always six-worthy. Glad I had one left! There was a lot of great writing today. Your story is unfolding beautifully. This is just a thought of mine. I was on a high-profile case as a jury member once. One of the thing the people did was hide drugs in the outside shingles of a convenience store. I wonder if the epidemic of convenience store robberies is an attempt to cover up such drug smuggling..
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Your writing is always six-worthy. Glad I had one left! There was a lot of great writing today. Your story is unfolding beautifully. This is just a thought of mine. I was on a high-profile case as a jury member once. One of the thing the people did was hide drugs in the outside shingles of a convenience store. I wonder if the epidemic of convenience store robberies is an attempt to cover up such drug smuggling..
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Hmm, I'll remember that. This isn't about drug smuggling but the one I'm writing is. I can use that little fact. Thank you for the information and the kind review.
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Thank you for this exciting work!
Comment from nomi338
Ooh, it's about to get dicey. Your critics may get a bang out of the upcoming and highly anticipated action. You are doing a fine job of story crafting and I pray to God that you do not let the comments of a few outweigh the confidence of your fanbase influence you into becoming someone else. Please keep doing what you have been doing for a decent amount of time.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Ooh, it's about to get dicey. Your critics may get a bang out of the upcoming and highly anticipated action. You are doing a fine job of story crafting and I pray to God that you do not let the comments of a few outweigh the confidence of your fanbase influence you into becoming someone else. Please keep doing what you have been doing for a decent amount of time.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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I can only do me, but my critics do weigh on my heart. Thank you for your wonderful support.
Comment from lancellot
The editing looks good to me, and the chapter is filled with concerned people, helpful characters and talking. Not questioning your romance formula, but it does seem heavy on the talking and slow unconventional supporting love affair. But if your fans enjoy this form, then please continue.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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The editing looks good to me, and the chapter is filled with concerned people, helpful characters and talking. Not questioning your romance formula, but it does seem heavy on the talking and slow unconventional supporting love affair. But if your fans enjoy this form, then please continue.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Yes, my fans, and not only on FanStory, enjoy it as does my publisher. My novel about Katherine and Gabriel is selling. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
It's always easier to see the errors in others' writing, after all you KNOW what you wrote, so editing is hard, as you read what should be there not what actually is.
get passed it > get past it
Angela as two young kids > Angela has two young kids
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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It's always easier to see the errors in others' writing, after all you KNOW what you wrote, so editing is hard, as you read what should be there not what actually is.
get passed it > get past it
Angela as two young kids > Angela has two young kids
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help.
Comment from BethShelby
It sounds like things may be about to become active soon. With men on the loose hiding out in the area and with a dance about to be canceled, I wonder if the men wanted to have their plans overheard in the bar. You stories are always fun to read.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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It sounds like things may be about to become active soon. With men on the loose hiding out in the area and with a dance about to be canceled, I wonder if the men wanted to have their plans overheard in the bar. You stories are always fun to read.
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Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, a great new chapter. Everything seems to be happening to Sami at the same time in this chapter and from different directions. Noah and Sami also appear to have more of an understanding of each other. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Hi Barbara, a great new chapter. Everything seems to be happening to Sami at the same time in this chapter and from different directions. Noah and Sami also appear to have more of an understanding of each other. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.