Willing Hearts
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Comment from Sankey
Another great story from you. Always interesting reading. Keep up the good work. Just one teeny weeny spag, this time around. "I don't expect you to[o],"
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Another great story from you. Always interesting reading. Keep up the good work. Just one teeny weeny spag, this time around. "I don't expect you to[o],"
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
I laughed so hard that you knew the term 'hoochie -momma'
This is a great story. Very interesting and good characters. I think you are into something here!
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By the way did you see the new FS contest about writing a full book on one month? This would have been perfect for that. Bad timing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I laughed so hard that you knew the term 'hoochie -momma'
This is a great story. Very interesting and good characters. I think you are into something here!
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By the way did you see the new FS contest about writing a full book on one month? This would have been perfect for that. Bad timing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I doubt I ever enter another contest. LOL This was in first chapter contest, and we haven't heard from it yet. Contests aren't my thing.
Comment from tfawcus
I love some of these American idioms! "Like a hoochie-mamma"! Classic!
"I don't either. Any ideas?" asked Jose. (Me neither) Just a suggestion.
That girl, Sami, is a real character. I'm just loving the way you portray her. This story is a real humdinger! Hanging out for more!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I love some of these American idioms! "Like a hoochie-mamma"! Classic!
"I don't either. Any ideas?" asked Jose. (Me neither) Just a suggestion.
That girl, Sami, is a real character. I'm just loving the way you portray her. This story is a real humdinger! Hanging out for more!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I made the correction.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I can just see Sami in her crusade to help the underdog. Not everybody does that. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I can just see Sami in her crusade to help the underdog. Not everybody does that. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Thesis
Good Chapter, Barbara. I like how Noah and the team are trying to protect Sami, even though she is not following their instructions. You've introduced the pimp, who seems to be quite the character to deal with. Things sound like they are going to get ugly before they get better. Waiting until the next chapter to find out.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Good Chapter, Barbara. I like how Noah and the team are trying to protect Sami, even though she is not following their instructions. You've introduced the pimp, who seems to be quite the character to deal with. Things sound like they are going to get ugly before they get better. Waiting until the next chapter to find out.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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They do get ugly before they get better. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The scenes in this chapter are disturbing but I'm sure this kind of action happens when there are prostitutes around. Sami is sure to take chances. Sure hope she'll be alright.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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The scenes in this chapter are disturbing but I'm sure this kind of action happens when there are prostitutes around. Sami is sure to take chances. Sure hope she'll be alright.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
Hope you can keep up with your schedule! I'm afraid to tie myself down to a chapter schedule yet. For some reason, I couldn't get past the picture (only kidding!). I was wondering for a moment about Noh. I'm surprised I didn't use his act at college with all my crazy behavior! Once I told a girl I was making a movie and wanted her phone number to contact her. She gave it to me. No, I didn't call her! Thank God I straightened out through the years!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hope you can keep up with your schedule! I'm afraid to tie myself down to a chapter schedule yet. For some reason, I couldn't get past the picture (only kidding!). I was wondering for a moment about Noh. I'm surprised I didn't use his act at college with all my crazy behavior! Once I told a girl I was making a movie and wanted her phone number to contact her. She gave it to me. No, I didn't call her! Thank God I straightened out through the years!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. LOL
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Thank you for your always admirable writing!
Comment from judiverse
I'd tell Sami to leave it up to the professionals. Better to have a policewoman go undercover to get to the working girls. She'd be able to handle the situation. Sami is determined to get information from the working girls, but they're afraid to talk. She's determined to find her missing friend. She hasn't gotten the information she wanted, but she just attracts the johns and has to be rescued. Big T is certainly a big toughie. Sami is only going to get into more trouble. Her family is worried about her, too. The Homeland Security team has a challenge to keep her out of harm's way. This sounds very realistic, Great characters. judi
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I'd tell Sami to leave it up to the professionals. Better to have a policewoman go undercover to get to the working girls. She'd be able to handle the situation. Sami is determined to get information from the working girls, but they're afraid to talk. She's determined to find her missing friend. She hasn't gotten the information she wanted, but she just attracts the johns and has to be rescued. Big T is certainly a big toughie. Sami is only going to get into more trouble. Her family is worried about her, too. The Homeland Security team has a challenge to keep her out of harm's way. This sounds very realistic, Great characters. judi
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Police don't believe the girls were kidnapped. They are doing anything. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Things just got real. Sami is playing a desperate game, so far no one has been able to impress on her the danger s associated with what she is doing. I believe Big T, just delivered the wake up call.. This is very good. You have successfully created a sense of the grippingly suspenseful situation that Sami and the crew are facing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Things just got real. Sami is playing a desperate game, so far no one has been able to impress on her the danger s associated with what she is doing. I believe Big T, just delivered the wake up call.. This is very good. You have successfully created a sense of the grippingly suspenseful situation that Sami and the crew are facing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Sami will still have another problem. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
It looks like Sami has signed up for more than she should have, but then, she seems like she's going into the breach. Acting the role with Noah, they are being watched, but when the pimp shows up, he helps himself to the Money, saying he'll try her out, dangerous stuff, this inside man business, well done Barbara, a new path for you, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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It looks like Sami has signed up for more than she should have, but then, she seems like she's going into the breach. Acting the role with Noah, they are being watched, but when the pimp shows up, he helps himself to the Money, saying he'll try her out, dangerous stuff, this inside man business, well done Barbara, a new path for you, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the support. Yes, Sami will get herself into trouble.
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I?m sure