A Fly on the Wall
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "On...Elevator Etiquette"A journal musings and assessments about situations
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Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I thought for sure one of the Jims was going to be related to your "septuagenarian elevator mate."
Para 1, 12th sentence: I THINK (forbid me, soon) should be (forbid me soon,) comma placement.
Para 13, 2nd sentence: SUGGEST removing comma after (days)
That handsome older man is crazy. I would love a beautiful woman to tell me I smell SO GOOD. I like your conversation on the second ride with that guy though.
I thought you exhibited perfectly fine elevator etiquette.
Nice story well told and very intriguingly interesting.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I thought for sure one of the Jims was going to be related to your "septuagenarian elevator mate."
Para 1, 12th sentence: I THINK (forbid me, soon) should be (forbid me soon,) comma placement.
Para 13, 2nd sentence: SUGGEST removing comma after (days)
That handsome older man is crazy. I would love a beautiful woman to tell me I smell SO GOOD. I like your conversation on the second ride with that guy though.
I thought you exhibited perfectly fine elevator etiquette.
Nice story well told and very intriguingly interesting.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Karenina and I were just talking about this...and, actually, so were WriteRightWriter on another space. East Coast people are way more reserved when it comes to chatter with strangers. But, oddly, I've only ever lived on the East Coast, so I don't get why it just hasn't ever 'clicked' for me! Oh well, I'm no longer in a high-rise, so I should be okay!
Thanks for the help with the comma placement. I'll get to it after I'm done replying to today's reviewers.
Comment from jessizero
This was a very amusing story! It's funny that your loved ones have banned you from taking the elevator. I find your elevator etiquette very funny. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This was a very amusing story! It's funny that your loved ones have banned you from taking the elevator. I find your elevator etiquette very funny. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes to you!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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...or LACK of elevator etiquette...
Either way, thanks for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Dang, Rach, who knew you were writing a chapter book along with all your other endeavors. I think the main character in this chapter has your personality. I am unsure if this is the beginning of the book or a chapter in an ongoing book. The text read clearly, and the plot made sense. What other tricks or surprises do you have going on?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Dang, Rach, who knew you were writing a chapter book along with all your other endeavors. I think the main character in this chapter has your personality. I am unsure if this is the beginning of the book or a chapter in an ongoing book. The text read clearly, and the plot made sense. What other tricks or surprises do you have going on?
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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These are all vignettes from my own life, things I have noticed or observed or drawn conclusions about. It's like my Key of Life book in that you don't have to follow it from the beginning. You can just start anywhere, read a chapter, then skip around or read straight through.
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It reminded me of your book. Are these short stories in your book too? No wonder the character sounded like you! LOL
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Ha! Exactly. It's non-fiction.
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Great! I will be reading them.
Comment from SLMorrical
I enjoyed reading this. The title caught my eye, and finding out it is from a book called a fly on the wall, I had to read it. I am glad I did. It was an enjoyable read. You are a great writer. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed reading this. The title caught my eye, and finding out it is from a book called a fly on the wall, I had to read it. I am glad I did. It was an enjoyable read. You are a great writer. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Well you sweetie reviewer, you!! Thank you VERY much for these validating, encouraging words. SO very appreciated. xo
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! You are so funny! And I'm sure you could still run a marathon if you wanted to so five flights of stairs would be doo-dah. I don't think it's only teachers who are prone to make elevator conversation. After all, they teach you the "elevator speech" in career seeking workshops. The elevator can be a perfect place to plan a short story - in person, apparently!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Lol! You are so funny! And I'm sure you could still run a marathon if you wanted to so five flights of stairs would be doo-dah. I don't think it's only teachers who are prone to make elevator conversation. After all, they teach you the "elevator speech" in career seeking workshops. The elevator can be a perfect place to plan a short story - in person, apparently!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Who would ever have guessed such a thing possible?!! Love this review, Helen; thank you! xo
Comment from Ulla
I can sort of understand why you've been banned from using the lift/elevator. I wouldn't use it anyway as I'm somewhat claustrophobic. But that's beside the point. I could identify with this. I tend to speak too much as well. Lol. Great write, Rachelle. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I can sort of understand why you've been banned from using the lift/elevator. I wouldn't use it anyway as I'm somewhat claustrophobic. But that's beside the point. I could identify with this. I tend to speak too much as well. Lol. Great write, Rachelle. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I'm almost thinking it's a writer thing as much as it is a teacher thing. And when the teacher is also a writer? Watch out!! Thanks for the nice review, Ulla. xo
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Indeed! We hate sanctimony.
I always announce a certain elevator condition occurring in my stomach, immediately followed by a pitch perfect rumbling and heaving sound. Works every time, reaction-wise. My wife, though, is beginning to tire of it.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Indeed! We hate sanctimony.
I always announce a certain elevator condition occurring in my stomach, immediately followed by a pitch perfect rumbling and heaving sound. Works every time, reaction-wise. My wife, though, is beginning to tire of it.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Hahahaha. She probably laughs about it when you're not around, Wayne...
Comment from LJbutterfly
This was hilarious and so well written I could envision each elevator visitor. I dislike talking to strangers on an elevator, but you can't keep me quiet in the supermarket line, hotel lobby, or other public open spaces. This is a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This was hilarious and so well written I could envision each elevator visitor. I dislike talking to strangers on an elevator, but you can't keep me quiet in the supermarket line, hotel lobby, or other public open spaces. This is a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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You are the theme-and-variation model of me, I'm thinking, Ljbutterfly!! Thank you for this warm and validating review!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Okay, you have this listed as fiction. Is it fiction? If not, I want to know what the guy in the elevator smelled like (Old Spice or Polo Black?) Is the Doorman Degrees System measured by JIMperature? Also, with the lady in the sweats... you were just a victim of circumspants.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Okay, you have this listed as fiction. Is it fiction? If not, I want to know what the guy in the elevator smelled like (Old Spice or Polo Black?) Is the Doorman Degrees System measured by JIMperature? Also, with the lady in the sweats... you were just a victim of circumspants.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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That does it, Buddy; you go to the Time Out Chair until I tell you others. So. Bad. SO bad!!
Comment from GWHARGIS
My kids allow me 2 questions per day. They say I'm too nosy. But how can I learn anything with out asking questions. Lol. This was hilarious. I loved how your nervous admission to the business man made things even more uncomfortable. You have a knack for those everyday moments that are hysterical and relatable.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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My kids allow me 2 questions per day. They say I'm too nosy. But how can I learn anything with out asking questions. Lol. This was hilarious. I loved how your nervous admission to the business man made things even more uncomfortable. You have a knack for those everyday moments that are hysterical and relatable.
Gretchen
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Wow. Thank you! This is such a nice complement. I appreciate it very much. xoxo