Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Do you see what I see?"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Teri7
Amen! A very well written poem my friend. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery telling us about the kernels of corn. My husband, Tom, is into planting and taking care of our small garden. He has a bachelor degree in Agriculture. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Amen! A very well written poem my friend. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery telling us about the kernels of corn. My husband, Tom, is into planting and taking care of our small garden. He has a bachelor degree in Agriculture. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Teri thank you! I am certain that Tom sees these in fullness, we have such a precious opportunity to cultivate Peace and wisdom from Mother Earth.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest. I agree with you. Most of us don't take the time to get off the cellphone for a moment to enjoy the majestic nature.
Good poem with a great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear poetic vision..
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid."-- Atticus
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest. I agree with you. Most of us don't take the time to get off the cellphone for a moment to enjoy the majestic nature.
Good poem with a great presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear poetic vision..
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid."-- Atticus
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you good friend, as I always value your reviews and comments!
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very unique way of looking at things. his poem is a good reminder for us to take care of Mother Earth if she is going to take care of us. Interesting picture.
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A very unique way of looking at things. his poem is a good reminder for us to take care of Mother Earth if she is going to take care of us. Interesting picture.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
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Paul thank you!
Comment from mermaids
a seed is not small thing, it leads to so much and enhances our lives. I like how your words pay a tribute to nature and reminds the reader, no matter how small, even a seed can lead to greatness. Excellent poetic form and use of words.
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a seed is not small thing, it leads to so much and enhances our lives. I like how your words pay a tribute to nature and reminds the reader, no matter how small, even a seed can lead to greatness. Excellent poetic form and use of words.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
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Smiling back with thanks! 🙏
Comment from nomi338
If you are a religious man, you will know that this pattern of seed becoming productive life sustaining crops are repeated throughout time during the very life of this planet we call the Earth. This whole process began with the creation of Earth. Water evaporated from the surface of the ground and formed clouds leaving behind plants that dropped seeds. Some of the seeds were picked up by animals and deposited in various other locations. The clouds would allow rain to be released to wet the ground and the seeds which would gain enrichment from the sun, and the seeds would turn into life sustaining plants, and so on and so forth.
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If you are a religious man, you will know that this pattern of seed becoming productive life sustaining crops are repeated throughout time during the very life of this planet we call the Earth. This whole process began with the creation of Earth. Water evaporated from the surface of the ground and formed clouds leaving behind plants that dropped seeds. Some of the seeds were picked up by animals and deposited in various other locations. The clouds would allow rain to be released to wet the ground and the seeds which would gain enrichment from the sun, and the seeds would turn into life sustaining plants, and so on and so forth.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Yes brother! Thanking God for this creations daily!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is an excellent free-verse poem with lovely imagery. I hope it does well in the contest. I will never look at a kernel of corn the same again. I like how you chose a common item to make a deep point.
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This is an excellent free-verse poem with lovely imagery. I hope it does well in the contest. I will never look at a kernel of corn the same again. I like how you chose a common item to make a deep point.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Fleedleflump
I really enjoy how you've employed the free verse nature of the poem here. You go on lyrical runs - yearning barrages of words that create clear, animated imagery. This is full of the glory of nature, making the final closing line as inevitable and clear as fresh stream water. I loved this.
Mike
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I really enjoy how you've employed the free verse nature of the poem here. You go on lyrical runs - yearning barrages of words that create clear, animated imagery. This is full of the glory of nature, making the final closing line as inevitable and clear as fresh stream water. I loved this.
Mike
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Mike, I think that my strong suit in poetry is free verse and I truly value your reviews and comments, thanks much! Jim
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It is amazing when we get older and wiser, we see these things. Take a picture of a tree, turn it upside down, and what do you see? I see lungs. Everything God has created is connected. It takes time to realize that everything he created has similarities. Thank you for the great awareness. I have thought about this for years now.
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It is amazing when we get older and wiser, we see these things. Take a picture of a tree, turn it upside down, and what do you see? I see lungs. Everything God has created is connected. It takes time to realize that everything he created has similarities. Thank you for the great awareness. I have thought about this for years now.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
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I love, love your comment!
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Thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, you are right, and how important it is to have eyes to see such miracles as you have described so well. The cycles of nature are all in His hands and sustained by Him. We need to look and see. Well done. An original theme, well developed and convincing.
Wendy
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Yes, you are right, and how important it is to have eyes to see such miracles as you have described so well. The cycles of nature are all in His hands and sustained by Him. We need to look and see. Well done. An original theme, well developed and convincing.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Smiling warmly back, thanks Wendy!
Comment from Frank Malley
This good poem, "Do You See What I See," selects examples from nature to fill a poem with the ineffable beauty of nature. If one writes about it, I guess it's actually effable, but certainly never perfectly captured in words. This beauty is a thing of vast delight, and as such it should move with ease, grace, and passion; in this poem, the delivery of these three elements seems a little laborious. A little more poetry and a little less scientific detail would add some joy and lilt to this poem.
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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This good poem, "Do You See What I See," selects examples from nature to fill a poem with the ineffable beauty of nature. If one writes about it, I guess it's actually effable, but certainly never perfectly captured in words. This beauty is a thing of vast delight, and as such it should move with ease, grace, and passion; in this poem, the delivery of these three elements seems a little laborious. A little more poetry and a little less scientific detail would add some joy and lilt to this poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2022
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Frank thanks for the input, I have some time to perfect this.