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Heart Crafted Poems - 2022

Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Life's Lessons Learned"
Musings of an old man - 2022

34 total reviews 
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your poem reads well, JLR. Even if no picture has
been included, readers could imagine the scene as they
read. Your lines read smooth with great imagery. I like
the lessons Pa taught the son. Thanks for participating.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Hi Jan Humm. I used the picture your promoted. I am surprised you can?t see it.
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 26-Apr-2022
    Ih, nio. That isn't what I meant. My words are praising the use of descriptive words such that readers could see a piture in their minds if no picture had been included. I can see the picture. 😊🐈‍⬛
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 27-Apr-2022
    Make that--Oh no. I dislike the fact these replies can't be corrected.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
    Hi Jan Humm. I used the picture your promoted. I am surprised you can?t see it.
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 27-Apr-2022
    I replied yesterday. I can see your picture. I meant your words were so descriptive that a picture wasn't necessary even though there was the one from the club. Did that reply show?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
    Jan, Sorry I did not see your note back, I understand now even more grateful for your review and comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Exceptional
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I adore this free-write, you created a magical scene here of love and devotion and I felt the warmth and the connection here, magical words and well worth a six, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
    Dolly, I am most appreciative!
Comment from royowen
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We can never devalue the lives of those that have gone before us, we know that the generations that go before, have sown value into us, and of course our values and value come through those lessons taught. Beautifully written Jim, this is a great post, honouring Pa and Pa's Pa. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Hi Roy, thank you
reply by royowen on 26-Apr-2022
    Welcome Jim
Comment from lyenochka
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That's a beautiful memory. I am always impressed to read about parents spending time with their children that way. Great way to spend time to pass on wisdom from generation to generation.
I like your presentation to really make those words pop out.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from dragonpoet
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JLR,
This is a well done ekphrastic ode to your dad and grandfather. It shows the love that was between you and how nature makes it easier to take good advice. Good answer to the club picture prompt
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Joan

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Hi Joan, I trust all is well in your circle. Thank you for the kind comments.
reply by dragonpoet on 27-Apr-2022
    Yes it is,JLR. Thanks.
    My pleasure.
    Joan
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Aren't these memories wonderful? And I imagine you have shared the same words with someone else along the way.
Beautiful and poignant, you tell the story of love passed down through wise advice and time spent together as opposed to things bought.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Thank you much, Pam!
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello JLR, your writing is heartfelt, and it left me with the feeling of ahh.
Your poem reads and flows well and has good imagery within.

I especially liked:
Pa's rugged hand rests gently on my back as he
watches intently at my fishing line, stirring in
the ebb and flow of the whisper
(Good descriptive writing. I can see it..)

Beautiful photo choice. I think we all would love to live in such a place.
"Free verse is free-flow from the heart ~ LateBloomer"


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    LateBloomer, your kind review is very validating. Thank you~
reply by LateBloomer on 26-Apr-2022
    Smiles.
Comment from Lilly Flowers
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This sure makes me nostalgic for the simpler times. Children are learning horrible behavior because of social networking.

This is a lovely poem to go with that terrific image. It is very nicely written. Best regards, Lilly

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Thank you Lilly flowers ...
Comment from JoannaN
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I love the harmony between the picture and your poem. This poem brings a lot of good, pleasant memories, there is a hint of nostalgia behind these words. I can clearly imagine this scene in a real life.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Joanna, thank you for your positive review on my club poem.
Comment from Julcia
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You display a significant use of the English language. Your poem evidences
a work created by an accomplished poet. Write On ! I am new to Fan Story,
enjoy your work and would like to follow your efforts in both poetry and novels.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
    Julcia, thank you for your very validating comment and welcome to, why I hope for you, is a wonderful experience and place you will find encouragement and support in your writing endeavor.
reply by Julcia on 27-Apr-2022
    Thanks in advance.

    Julcia