Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an interesting style of poetry. It would, to me, take a lot of concentration to get it right, but you've done a beautiful job. It told the story well.
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This is an interesting style of poetry. It would, to me, take a lot of concentration to get it right, but you've done a beautiful job. It told the story well.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you Judy!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your Terzanelle is excellent in every respect--accurately written and vividly descriptive of the devastation of heartbreak. The flow of rain merging with the flow tears--creative, expressive imagery
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Your Terzanelle is excellent in every respect--accurately written and vividly descriptive of the devastation of heartbreak. The flow of rain merging with the flow tears--creative, expressive imagery
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Janice.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
This piece is quite a project in rhyme scheme and you have succeeded very well in both the rhyme and in managing to keep the flow and sense of the ideas.
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This piece is quite a project in rhyme scheme and you have succeeded very well in both the rhyme and in managing to keep the flow and sense of the ideas.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Nancy
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:-)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this first attempt at a Terzanelle. As far as I'm concerned you nailed it, but I am not a poet, so I may not know what I'm talking about. I liked it.
A flood of tears drops down. (drop???)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading this first attempt at a Terzanelle. As far as I'm concerned you nailed it, but I am not a poet, so I may not know what I'm talking about. I liked it.
A flood of tears drops down. (drop???)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you And ues oops...
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a happy Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. That was an interesting poetry form for this poem, I like how the rhyme scheme changes every stanza, seems quite challenging. You executed well! have a great day!
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Hello JLR a happy Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. That was an interesting poetry form for this poem, I like how the rhyme scheme changes every stanza, seems quite challenging. You executed well! have a great day!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you vey much!
Comment from robyn corum
JLR,
I have to admit, I'm not a fan of this form. I'm sorry but it seemed a little scrambled and I never could get a good grip on a pattern.
That said, I did appreciate the beautiful message conveyed here. I liked the image of tears and rain - I know we've seen and heard it often, but it is such a haunting scene.
One other note:
--> in each of the following cases, the 'her' should be lowercase.
** mixed-up, Her hopes, and dreams,
Thanks!
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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JLR,
I have to admit, I'm not a fan of this form. I'm sorry but it seemed a little scrambled and I never could get a good grip on a pattern.
That said, I did appreciate the beautiful message conveyed here. I liked the image of tears and rain - I know we've seen and heard it often, but it is such a haunting scene.
One other note:
--> in each of the following cases, the 'her' should be lowercase.
** mixed-up, Her hopes, and dreams,
Thanks!
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Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
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Thank Robyn
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. I am not a poet, so this form is new to my eyes, but I do understand the picture you have painted and the sentiment of being heart broken and jilted by someone you gave your heart. In the end are tears enough to express the pain and loss.
Good work.
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This is very nice. I am not a poet, so this form is new to my eyes, but I do understand the picture you have painted and the sentiment of being heart broken and jilted by someone you gave your heart. In the end are tears enough to express the pain and loss.
Good work.
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Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much!