Play another Day
Another random act of violence:45 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Nail biting, pulse racing excitement. Man what a ride. I am afraid that I would be very dead long before any of this would have transpired. As badly as I want to continue living, My body will not support me in a fight this dangerous and physically taxing. Great write.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Nail biting, pulse racing excitement. Man what a ride. I am afraid that I would be very dead long before any of this would have transpired. As badly as I want to continue living, My body will not support me in a fight this dangerous and physically taxing. Great write.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so very much, Nomi338, for your extra-special six-star review. I'm so honored when talented FanStory writers like you say such kind words and offer encouragement. But most of all, I'm happy that you liked it and spent your time to tell me so. I can't thank you enough. Thanks, again. Ric
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Excellence must not only be recognized, it absolutely must be encouraged. I would not have the courage to write about the things I write about absent the encouragement I received early on. Keep at it.
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Again, thank you so much! I would have given up a long time ago if it hadn't been for kind encouragement from people like you.
Comment from RodG
Ric, you have written a story about random violence that reeks with authentic ATMOSPHERE. You put me there in that alley with Zach and later slum and store. The action is well-paced and the ending believable as he eludes the killers. Great focus on sensual details throughout. Rod
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Ric, you have written a story about random violence that reeks with authentic ATMOSPHERE. You put me there in that alley with Zach and later slum and store. The action is well-paced and the ending believable as he eludes the killers. Great focus on sensual details throughout. Rod
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, RodG, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. It's always nice to get the thoughts of the talented writers who I read and enjoy.
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My pleasure.
Comment from BethShelby
This is quite a story. You certainly held my attention as this poor guy moves from one horror to another. I can't help but wonder how he came to be there, but then I wonder that about the bums I see on the streets daily. I guess any set of circumstances where your luck runs out could put one into such a position. Well done. I'm glad you let him escape.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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This is quite a story. You certainly held my attention as this poor guy moves from one horror to another. I can't help but wonder how he came to be there, but then I wonder that about the bums I see on the streets daily. I guess any set of circumstances where your luck runs out could put one into such a position. Well done. I'm glad you let him escape.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Beth Shelby, for taking time to read my wild and graphic story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I couldn't let him go through all his misfortune and not come out of it ok. LOL. Thanks, again. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from royowen
Yes, it does seem a little like that, fortunately life is still pretty sane where I live, but lawlessness and people's version of "freedom" which means they can do what they like and everyone else can free themselves You've dine a great job with this fictional interpretation of what's going on with society at the moment. Great plot, scary and well written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Yes, it does seem a little like that, fortunately life is still pretty sane where I live, but lawlessness and people's version of "freedom" which means they can do what they like and everyone else can free themselves You've dine a great job with this fictional interpretation of what's going on with society at the moment. Great plot, scary and well written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy, for your kind words and generous review. I appreciate you taking time to read my story and I'm always happy to learn what such a talented wordsmith as yourself has to say about my exaggerated and over-the-top stories. I write them to entertain myself, and just hope I'm not the only one how likes them. LOL. Thanks, again, Roy. I appreciate YOU!
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I like ?over the top? Ric.
Comment from Eunice Amero
I very good story. Only when I got to where the dead body was that was sick. Poor dog were you afraid it would carry a disease? The story played well and if would be a good Tv show. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I very good story. Only when I got to where the dead body was that was sick. Poor dog were you afraid it would carry a disease? The story played well and if would be a good Tv show. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so very much, Eunice Amero, for your extra-special six-star review. Your kind words and encouragement are what motivates me most and makes me smile. I'm so glad you liked it. You've made my week! I appreciate you!
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you are so welcome.
Comment from AJ McCall
Your description has only improved to the point where I have to read it twice Ric!!! It's nice to see a post from you finally in my notifications. I'm figuring this is a story just for fun, but man was it INTENSE! I really really LOVED the description! IT'S ON FLEEEKKK! (FYI: it means on point). Are you on summer break now? Will you be posting more soon because I think you should turn this into a series if it isn't already. And guess what? SIX STARSSSSSS!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Your description has only improved to the point where I have to read it twice Ric!!! It's nice to see a post from you finally in my notifications. I'm figuring this is a story just for fun, but man was it INTENSE! I really really LOVED the description! IT'S ON FLEEEKKK! (FYI: it means on point). Are you on summer break now? Will you be posting more soon because I think you should turn this into a series if it isn't already. And guess what? SIX STARSSSSSS!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Hi, A.J., and I hope everything is going well for you in the Lone Star state! I can't thank you enough for your wonderful six-star review. Yes, you know me so well. Just another of those stories where I'm having fun and amusing myself with something a little wild and creepy. Emphasizing another random act of violence on some old dude in an alley. So much anger and hatred in a world where "All we need is love!" An old Beatles song from the 1960s. LOL. And friends like YOU. Thanks a million, as always! You're the best!
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Aww, you're welcome, Ric! I love reading your creepy, wild but interesting stories anytime. And thanks for being concerned; I'm fine but I am getting loads of rain. (Yeah, in the summertime.) But all's good. My reviews always turn into a conversation when it comes to YOU! LOL. YOU deserved the stars! :)
Comment from muffinmama
I'm so glad that this story was not longer because I stopped breathing at the first taunt by the gunmen and only took a deep breath when Zack made it onto the train.
The tension and drama are superb.
This is such a powerful description: "Time honored in segments, it begins with an instant and reaches to eternity. Stuck in a trance-like panic and scared to move, those segments can seem to last, disproportionately, forever."
It's impossible to unsee the following image: "Exhibiting the grace of a wobbling ballerina in leg braces,..."
The use of the particular verb in the following is so apt "...he carefully coaxed his aching body to climb inside."
Excellent writing, brilliant, vivid images. I still can't catch my breath!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I'm so glad that this story was not longer because I stopped breathing at the first taunt by the gunmen and only took a deep breath when Zack made it onto the train.
The tension and drama are superb.
This is such a powerful description: "Time honored in segments, it begins with an instant and reaches to eternity. Stuck in a trance-like panic and scared to move, those segments can seem to last, disproportionately, forever."
It's impossible to unsee the following image: "Exhibiting the grace of a wobbling ballerina in leg braces,..."
The use of the particular verb in the following is so apt "...he carefully coaxed his aching body to climb inside."
Excellent writing, brilliant, vivid images. I still can't catch my breath!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, muffinmama, for your extra-special six-stars along with the kind words and encouraging review. I can't thank you enough for making my week, but most of all, I'm glad you liked my story. If it weren't for reviews and nice people like you, I would have given up writing a long time ago. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Ben Colder
The plot is so much like an everyday happening in this crazy world. You did well with descriptive movement. Yes, and the train tolls on. Thanks, Ric, for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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The plot is so much like an everyday happening in this crazy world. You did well with descriptive movement. Yes, and the train tolls on. Thanks, Ric, for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Ben Colder, my friend, for your kind words and encouraging review. I'm so happy to see your review pop up as you've always been one of my FanStory favorites to read. And most of all, an outstanding person of faith whose character always shines and motivates. Hope you are doing well!
Comment from Sanku
Being at the wrong place at the wrong time happens sometimes.Zack is very focussed and that helped him to escape into the moving train.Your descrptions are fantatic and i felt i was watching a movie scene.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Being at the wrong place at the wrong time happens sometimes.Zack is very focussed and that helped him to escape into the moving train.Your descrptions are fantatic and i felt i was watching a movie scene.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Sanku, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Dilettante junior
Hi Ric,
I was so happy to wake up to your new work notification this morning. I wish I could see that more often. You should definitely write and post more my friend!
This is a brilliant action packed sequence that bears a vivid description of each and every move and sentiment of Zach. It feels like a video game where Zach moves from one level to the next. Absolute graphic 3D portrayal of adventures that keeps the reader on his toes. Love the cliff hanger at the end! A delightful adrenaline rush!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Hi Ric,
I was so happy to wake up to your new work notification this morning. I wish I could see that more often. You should definitely write and post more my friend!
This is a brilliant action packed sequence that bears a vivid description of each and every move and sentiment of Zach. It feels like a video game where Zach moves from one level to the next. Absolute graphic 3D portrayal of adventures that keeps the reader on his toes. Love the cliff hanger at the end! A delightful adrenaline rush!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, DJ, for your kind words and encouraging review. This is just another senseless case of random violence. Attacking Zack and the others for no apparent reason. But luckily, this time the victim got away to live another day. I appreciate YOU and your generous review!
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Lovely write my dear. Would love to read more. I appreciate YOU too :)