Genius in Love
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Comment from RGstar
Even though I don't write them here, I have written and produced, own plays in Sweden, along with the choreography of many a show, and I tell you, I have not enough stars to give you here. These are all I have for this deserves more, for its detail and positioning of certain aspects.
It brought me back to a time I was almost overworked...even wrote the songs.
Well done Jay.
A good array of writing skills all round.
My best.
Have a great week.
RG
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Even though I don't write them here, I have written and produced, own plays in Sweden, along with the choreography of many a show, and I tell you, I have not enough stars to give you here. These are all I have for this deserves more, for its detail and positioning of certain aspects.
It brought me back to a time I was almost overworked...even wrote the songs.
Well done Jay.
A good array of writing skills all round.
My best.
Have a great week.
RG
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Bless you, RG. I'm no playwright, but the formatting is teaching me a thing or two. In future scenes the actors will develop the story-line more and the stage directions less. I'm just giddy, though, that a person of your extraordinary abilities and playwrighting background found some value in my efforts. Thank you my friend!
Comment from Judy Lawless
I know nothing about script writing, but from my view, you're doing a great job. I particularly like this scene as it focuses on the coming of puberty and the changes it will bring to Cornelius, using his imaginary new friend to guide him.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I know nothing about script writing, but from my view, you're doing a great job. I particularly like this scene as it focuses on the coming of puberty and the changes it will bring to Cornelius, using his imaginary new friend to guide him.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Bless you for the sixer, Judy. That means so much. I don't know much more about playwrighting than you, so it's a learning experience. We'll see how it's received as it progresses. Again, thank you!
Comment from bhogg
I enjoyed your post very much. Written in a script format was good for letting your reader internalize the scene. Afraid I didn't do my job, offering suggestions, etc. Your fault though...I just joined the story and let it roll. Bill
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed your post very much. Written in a script format was good for letting your reader internalize the scene. Afraid I didn't do my job, offering suggestions, etc. Your fault though...I just joined the story and let it roll. Bill
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Bill... thank you so much for your interest in the play. I hope I can sustain your interest in further scenes. That's the best compliment you can give me: "I just joined the story and let it roll."
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't usually read scripts. But knowing how well written everything you write is: I joined in and I'm glad I did. Great job and I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I don't usually read scripts. But knowing how well written everything you write is: I joined in and I'm glad I did. Great job and I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Ric. Glad to have you aboard! Thanks for the lovely stars.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I read this stage play with great interest with a view to familiarize myself with plays. Mine is one continuous process of learning to write. I have never written even a single scene of a play. I find the characters interesting. You say some are in shadows. I can visualize the set with the spotlight on two characters. Thanks to your explanations I could combine the acts. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I read this stage play with great interest with a view to familiarize myself with plays. Mine is one continuous process of learning to write. I have never written even a single scene of a play. I find the characters interesting. You say some are in shadows. I can visualize the set with the spotlight on two characters. Thanks to your explanations I could combine the acts. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Seshadri! I'm glad you enjoyed my efforts. I'm new at playwrighting myself, so it's a growing experience.
Comment from samandlancelot
Jay,
Excellent writing and descriptions throughout. You brought this scene to life in many ways. It was a satisfying, entertaining read. And it wasn't too long.
Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Jay,
Excellent writing and descriptions throughout. You brought this scene to life in many ways. It was a satisfying, entertaining read. And it wasn't too long.
Patricia
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I'm thrilled with your reward of six stars and your kindness. Thank you so very much. The second act is about a week away.
Comment from muffinmama
So far, so really good.
The story reeled me in immediately, for several reasons.
It promises a fascinating look back at the mystery and heartbreak of autism when it was still not understood.
It offers two main characters who are intriguing and one that I already want to see squirm.
Your stage directions and explanations read like regular story text, which makes the entire experience more enjoyable; the visuals are clear.
Eager to read the rest of the play!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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So far, so really good.
The story reeled me in immediately, for several reasons.
It promises a fascinating look back at the mystery and heartbreak of autism when it was still not understood.
It offers two main characters who are intriguing and one that I already want to see squirm.
Your stage directions and explanations read like regular story text, which makes the entire experience more enjoyable; the visuals are clear.
Eager to read the rest of the play!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Wow, Ryma, Thank you so much for your encouragement. I'm going to continue on with this while the interest is there. Surprising (to me) it's gathering quite a following. Scene 2 should be ready in a week or so. I'm incredibly slow at writing. My goodness, a six! You've made my day!
Comment from RetroStarfish
Very compelling characters and an interesting play. I look forward to the next act. The internal dialogue and imaginary/magical guides for an autistic boy are plausible and Cililla's name is quite clever.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Very compelling characters and an interesting play. I look forward to the next act. The internal dialogue and imaginary/magical guides for an autistic boy are plausible and Cililla's name is quite clever.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I gotta admit, I was rather proud of Cililla Queez as a character name. I'm really stoked that you enjoyed it. I'll try to dig deeper while spreading the base as the scenes progress. Stick around.
Comment from padumachitta
hi ya
good on ya for posting something here thatis outside the norm. It was a good read and I wonder how it could be set up to actually run as a play...sometimes, it would be good to have these read out...
oh ewell
I hope you are okay out thee.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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hi ya
good on ya for posting something here thatis outside the norm. It was a good read and I wonder how it could be set up to actually run as a play...sometimes, it would be good to have these read out...
oh ewell
I hope you are okay out thee.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I don't think it would be run as a play, at least the way I wrote the stage directions. To see the teacher's face, you see the classroom's backs. It would work much better as a screenplay.
I'm doing fine out Bakersfield way, Jodi. Hope you are as well!
Comment from juliaSjames
I'm really not equipped to rate your post, Jay. So perhaps I shouldn't be posting a review.
But I wanted to applaud you for choosing someone who is "different" as the protagonist. My husband's niece has a son who is on the autism spectrum. A dear boy who is clever but who has quirks, is given to meltdowns, and lacks many social skills. Fortunately the school system is better able to cope than in previous years.
I think you did a good job of depicting such a boy.
Good luck with the play, my friend.
Stay safe and healthy
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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I'm really not equipped to rate your post, Jay. So perhaps I shouldn't be posting a review.
But I wanted to applaud you for choosing someone who is "different" as the protagonist. My husband's niece has a son who is on the autism spectrum. A dear boy who is clever but who has quirks, is given to meltdowns, and lacks many social skills. Fortunately the school system is better able to cope than in previous years.
I think you did a good job of depicting such a boy.
Good luck with the play, my friend.
Stay safe and healthy
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Julia. I'm not a playwright. I'm not comfortable with the genre, not at all. I appreciate your encouragement and the information about your experience with the autism spectrum. Thank y ou again.
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Kudos to you for venturing out of your comfort zone, Jay