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Wedding Chronicles #2

Burt and Ali

27 total reviews 
Comment from WalkerMan
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

One never knows what a chance meeting can eventually lead to. Yet, how much joy in life can be missed by not revealing what is in your heart before the moment passes? You bring this to life vividly in this story, which, while fiction here, may be near reality for many.

From setting details to dialog, it is all plausible, and tugs at the heart of anyone with even a remote connection to love lost over failure to hold onto it before it could slip away.

Yes, Providence sometimes sets things right in the last few moments, but not always; so such rare occurrences are precious:
... I'm sure you'll enjoy "Strangers on a Train."

"Till There Was You" has ideal lyrics for this story.

Superb, and aptly illustrated as a flashback to their fun in the park.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Dear Mike, thank you so much. I remember this period of time so vividly, and just had to sculpt a love story around it. "Till There Was You," is my all time favorite 'Fab Four' song. I feel that way about Jackson. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and I so appreciate the wonderful review and stars!
    Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal :))
reply by WalkerMan on 28-Sep-2020
    You are most welcome, Sal. You have a way with these stories that everyone loves. This will be another great book someday. -- Mike
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Sal.

This one hit right in the solar plexus because of the time frame. I was drafted in '67.

The story of lost love is such a sad refrain. This story is quite sad and combined with the nostalgic memories of the music, brings back memories. This is a heart wrenching story. It is well written with many detailed descriptions of that day.

Z Pal

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful review and generous comments, dear Z. I?m glad this stirred good memories. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sally XOs
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 01-Oct-2020
    You're welcome. Sal.

    Pal. Z 💤
Comment from Tina Crute
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I got chills when I read the note from Alice! I laughed several times through this because you have a comic edge at times and I love it. you see the funny in life. I laughed at...too jiggly...and...butt hanging out of a nightie,lol. You are doing what you are meant to be doing, Miss Sally, and we are all the better for it. you "see" things we don't, I would garner to say. You see deep in the heart of emotion and relationships.
Your story deserves a six!
Tina

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Dear Tina, I?m deeply honored and blessed by this review and star blast! Thank you so much! I?m delighted that you enjoyed this. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sally XOs...xo....
reply by Tina Crute on 01-Oct-2020
    I'm delighted that you're delighted that I was delighted by your poem! You deserve it, sweet Sally!
    I wish you all the best in all you do!
    Tina
Comment from Cindy Warren
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Too bad they lost touch. I guess some things just aren't meant to be at the time. And who knows about the future. People do recover from stage four cancer. It's rare, but it happens.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful review and kind encouragement. My brother had an aggressive cancer similar to this. He learned not to waste his final days. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs....
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Lovely story--wish it were true. Cheers. LIZ (I love the song--first heard it in the play Music Man, recently heard the Beatles perform--the song has a fascinating history!) Fine work. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    It is based on a true story. Most of love stories are. Thank you for the lovely review and kind comments, dear Liz. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal xos...
Comment from fm wright
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

The photo and the videos really set off the story. I love the way you started it and the way you ended it. It flowed beautifully throughout and really touched my heart.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the marvelous review and generous stars, dear Faye. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this and the chosen music. These two songs are so romantic to me.
    Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your week. Sal XOs.....xo.....
reply by fm wright on 29-Sep-2020
    May the rest of your week be blessed, Sally, my friend. You are truly gifted at writing love stories.
    Faye
Comment from royowen
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I remember that song very well, I am a boy, also from Liverpool, and am just as sentimental as anything, so these songs and these sentimental stories capture me, you've got another Merseyside invasion dear girl, beautifully written my friend, loved it, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the beautiful review and generous stars, dear Roy. I?m delighted you enjoyed this and hopefully it stirred sweet memories for you. You?re a blessing to me! Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs...
reply by royowen on 01-Oct-2020
    Well done Sally
Comment from Ulla
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Here goes my last six. I loved this story, and I do hope you've got more to come. It's so very well written and so very poignant, as well. A joy to read. He ended up as a very happy man. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Ah, I am so honored. I know how precious those sixes are. I appreciate the wonderful review and generous stars. Thank you, dear Ulla. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs...xo...
Comment from Sankey
Exceptional
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Whaty a precious story. Such a wonderful read and glad I caught it. Keep these coming. Just one terrible spag for today! Boy! What a spag! E[s](x)qui(si)te joy filled my heart a

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the delightful review and for catching that. I put it through FanStory edit... twice. I appreciate the catch and those good eyes. I'm honored and blessed once again.

    My voice over text saves misspelled words for some reason. I wish it wouldn't. It drives me crazy.
    Sending you my best to you both today as always,
    Sal XOs...xo...
reply by Sankey on 27-Sep-2020
    Is it the Dragon Speak programme? O had that for a long time here in Australia if you spoke with a Southern Drawl from your country it often picked up better than Aussie English. Byt the way I forgot to say I loved that old song "Till There Was You"
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Know, just voice over test on my iPad Pro. Has an attitude though. I adore that song. My favorite from the early years of The Beatles. Blessings and thanks again!!
    Sal XOs......
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This is a vivid image. I like thefollow through. It mkes the action like a movie in the reader's head: "Not long after that, our train came to a screeching halt. Everything on our table flew past me, along with Ali. I caught her by the waist and pulled her to me, cradling her in my arms." It's a bit like watching the domino effect. It also serves as a metahor for the relationship. Do I detect a foreshadowing? "Volunteers come by the patient's rooms regularly to deliver books and offer to read aloud." There had to be a way to reunite them. This was lovely.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the marvelous review and generous stars. It is so appreciated, dear Liz. Sending you my best today as always,
    Sal XOs.....