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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, I'm feeling for Cody. It sounds like he won't make it and Jack doesn't want to be the reason for his death. I really liked the part where they are both teaching each other about being the most accident prone. I think it could be made a little shorter so the humor has more impact.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Oh, I'm feeling for Cody. It sounds like he won't make it and Jack doesn't want to be the reason for his death. I really liked the part where they are both teaching each other about being the most accident prone. I think it could be made a little shorter so the humor has more impact.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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THank you, Helen. I'll take a second look at that and see where to do some trimming. :) Always appreciate you!
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Oops. I meant to say, "teasing each other." The funny part for me was my hubby was probably like that as a kid - well known to the hospitals. ☺
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That's a part of either growing up pure boy or country. I was in a lot, mostly because of horses and sports injuries. lol. They loved me!
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♥☺