The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from Diana L Crawford
I'm loving this! What an awesome beginning to this fantasy story! I'm so going to love this! It has already captured me. Very cool start with the shed disappearing and then reappearing! Can't wait to read more!! xoxo
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I'm loving this! What an awesome beginning to this fantasy story! I'm so going to love this! It has already captured me. Very cool start with the shed disappearing and then reappearing! Can't wait to read more!! xoxo
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Be sure not to miss chapter one (this is chapter two) -- I'm so glad to have you on board! Nicholas has some fun stories to tell...! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This chapter is filled with great imagery, YM. I could easily 'see' the inside of the shed and all the events as the story unfolded. It seems Constantine has taken a liking to Nicholas. I like the magical inferences of this story and believe there will be many tangents to explore. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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This chapter is filled with great imagery, YM. I could easily 'see' the inside of the shed and all the events as the story unfolded. It seems Constantine has taken a liking to Nicholas. I like the magical inferences of this story and believe there will be many tangents to explore. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Aaaaaah, now the official 'Groundskeeper'..... according to the shed! ;) LOL!! ;) Wish I could have such a job, yeah?! :) I really did have fun with this... hang on for tangents! ;) Thanx, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from May 1
Haha, I love the first paragraph it's so adorably strange, it's awesome. Haha, I think Constantine dancing must have been such a fun sight to behold. I feel like Nicholas and I are equally confused by what it all means. I am so curious about what would happen next.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Haha, I love the first paragraph it's so adorably strange, it's awesome. Haha, I think Constantine dancing must have been such a fun sight to behold. I feel like Nicholas and I are equally confused by what it all means. I am so curious about what would happen next.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Aaaaaah, now the official 'Groundskeeper'..... according to the shed! ;) LOL!! ;) Wish I could have such a job, yeah?! :) Thanx, my friend! ;) Yvette
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Yes, that would be one cool job. :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Again, a well written chapter.
The story of the new groundskeeper and Constantine is continuing to be interesting.
Well done, bring on more.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Again, a well written chapter.
The story of the new groundskeeper and Constantine is continuing to be interesting.
Well done, bring on more.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2020
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Aaaaaah, now the official 'Groundskeeper' according to the shed! ;) Wish I could have such a job, yeah?! :) Thanx, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Melonie Kirchoff
Cute chapter! I love Constantine and Rosalind already and can tell that it is going to be a wonderful story. I love how quickly the chapters can be read. Great work!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Cute chapter! I love Constantine and Rosalind already and can tell that it is going to be a wonderful story. I love how quickly the chapters can be read. Great work!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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So glad you're enjoying this 'young people' story, ma'am -- it's been fun to create! ;) :) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent writing that is very creative and leaves the reader wanting to read the next chapter. You have quite a vivid imagination. thanks for sharing it.
Bill
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Excellent writing that is very creative and leaves the reader wanting to read the next chapter. You have quite a vivid imagination. thanks for sharing it.
Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanx so much, Bill -- I'm so glad you're enjoying this story. :) I've written it for young people to read 'with' their parents to hopefully have something to discuss at the dinner table without phones there!! ;) :) LOL! ;) Your support means a lot -- thanx! ;) )Yvette
Comment from juliaSjames
The description of the shed is fantastic in all senses of the word. I hadn't realized that the rosebush is a character. That's cool.
Constantine has high expectations of Nicholas.
The end is a great hook. Readers can't wait to continue the story.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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The description of the shed is fantastic in all senses of the word. I hadn't realized that the rosebush is a character. That's cool.
Constantine has high expectations of Nicholas.
The end is a great hook. Readers can't wait to continue the story.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Thanx again, Julia.... and, oh yeah, Rosa is one of those from the very first that's 'a little bit of both'! ;) :) Thanx again, ma'am! ;) Yvette
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I love the thought that your writing story about gardens. Gardens show the beauty from flowers and their surroundings. For instance, rocks, archways and wood carvings. Great story.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I love the thought that your writing story about gardens. Gardens show the beauty from flowers and their surroundings. For instance, rocks, archways and wood carvings. Great story.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your review, Rosemary -- much appreciated! ;) ;)
Comment from F. Wehr3
That was a fun little jaunt, Yvette. I'll have to catch up on the parts before this one. Good descriptive work and I enjoyed the characters.
I stumbled on one sentence. Part of me wants it to be in past tense like the rest.--Intriguingly, I couldn't see the back wall because the light faded before that... -- Intriguingly, the light dimmed along the back wall and kept whatever lay there hidden from my view.-- It gives it the same bit of mystery. At least, that's I thought you were going for, lol.
One more tinsy, winsy little thing. I never known a boy to put his hands on his hips so much, a girl, yes. Maybe he's gender fluid? Lol, I don't know. Just food for thought.
I enjoy your work, Yvette, and look forward to more of it.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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That was a fun little jaunt, Yvette. I'll have to catch up on the parts before this one. Good descriptive work and I enjoyed the characters.
I stumbled on one sentence. Part of me wants it to be in past tense like the rest.--Intriguingly, I couldn't see the back wall because the light faded before that... -- Intriguingly, the light dimmed along the back wall and kept whatever lay there hidden from my view.-- It gives it the same bit of mystery. At least, that's I thought you were going for, lol.
One more tinsy, winsy little thing. I never known a boy to put his hands on his hips so much, a girl, yes. Maybe he's gender fluid? Lol, I don't know. Just food for thought.
I enjoy your work, Yvette, and look forward to more of it.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the pointers, Russell -- always appreciated. ;) ;) Welcome back and have a great week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Given the highly unclear narrative, I have absolutely no idea what is going on in this chapter. And the language seems forced and stilted. Sorry, I really tried to enjoy--and figure out what was going on--but this seemed impossible. The only thing I gather, is some sort of magical event "might" be occurring? Also, the I can't place Constantine's dialect. It appears as though you attempted to make this a period piece of some sort with his "ye," but I don't know which period in history. The narrative does nothing to inform me of this period. So all in all, the words seem completely nonsensical. Really not sure what others were seeing in the chapter to cause it to be at the top of the voting booth, but perhaps I'm simply missing something . . . or maybe the voters are all your friends? Who knows.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Given the highly unclear narrative, I have absolutely no idea what is going on in this chapter. And the language seems forced and stilted. Sorry, I really tried to enjoy--and figure out what was going on--but this seemed impossible. The only thing I gather, is some sort of magical event "might" be occurring? Also, the I can't place Constantine's dialect. It appears as though you attempted to make this a period piece of some sort with his "ye," but I don't know which period in history. The narrative does nothing to inform me of this period. So all in all, the words seem completely nonsensical. Really not sure what others were seeing in the chapter to cause it to be at the top of the voting booth, but perhaps I'm simply missing something . . . or maybe the voters are all your friends? Who knows.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2019
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Huh. I have to figure out how to respond with no response. I want to do this, too. Haven't figured it out yet. I always find that I have to enter a response in the dialogue box to be able to respond. Hope I can figure out the no response thing someday.
