Tightrope
Walking a fine line.24 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
I absolutely love your faith poem. It's lean, clear language make it a powerful poem, and the metaphor of stretching over the abyss is most apt to illustrate trust.
Wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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I absolutely love your faith poem. It's lean, clear language make it a powerful poem, and the metaphor of stretching over the abyss is most apt to illustrate trust.
Wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thanks for your comments here Gloria. I had the notion of the tightrope for a while, then yesterday it came together fully formed.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written faith poem. We sometimes have to walk on dangerous ground and when we do not have enough faith to get through, we will not be able to make it.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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A very well-written faith poem. We sometimes have to walk on dangerous ground and when we do not have enough faith to get through, we will not be able to make it.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thanks for your review. We have to stay balanced in life... the Lord will hold us steady.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- really like this one, ma'am! :) Such a bold statement of putting faith in only One and not looking back at the rest.... if that were more the focus, I daresay we'd have a lot less issues in the world... :) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Wow -- really like this one, ma'am! :) Such a bold statement of putting faith in only One and not looking back at the rest.... if that were more the focus, I daresay we'd have a lot less issues in the world... :) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :) :) Yvette
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Keeping our balance and not looking back regretfully, or down fearfully are difficult at times. Thanks for your generous review Yvette.
Comment from Dawn Munro
You have already taken my last six this week, but this is another poem I truly believe is profoundly moving and worthy of an outstanding rating. There is quite obviously no need for me to explain why -- your writing is masterful.
Best of luck with the judges.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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You have already taken my last six this week, but this is another poem I truly believe is profoundly moving and worthy of an outstanding rating. There is quite obviously no need for me to explain why -- your writing is masterful.
Best of luck with the judges.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Gosh, your praise is so welcome. Thank you very much for reviewing.
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You're very welcome -- most deserved. :)
Comment from poetwatch
Keep on walking straight cause what is in the past you already passed it. The present is here the future is over the horizon, LisaMay. This is a good entry for the Faith Poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing your love and faith. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Keep on walking straight cause what is in the past you already passed it. The present is here the future is over the horizon, LisaMay. This is a good entry for the Faith Poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing your love and faith. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you for these warm comments. We try to keep our balance in life, but it is too easy to look back in regret or look down in fear and get the wobbles.
Comment from Sally Law
Yes, it does feel like a small role at times in our faith, doesn't it? My feels extremely tight and narrow right now and I can surely relate to this. Great theme and photo art to go with your fine write.
All my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Yes, it does feel like a small role at times in our faith, doesn't it? My feels extremely tight and narrow right now and I can surely relate to this. Great theme and photo art to go with your fine write.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thanks Sally... we have to find our balance with God's help as best we can.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like the analogy of your walk with Faith as walking a tightrope equipped with a balancing pole. I like the alliteration of the phrase, "hums hymns of hope." The phrase, of "a soul vibration" works well with the reference to your kind of music. The whole poem is well put together, with a resounding end of saying you are "guided by your hand." It is not too preachy and talks of your individual dealings with life. Well written, with a nice picture of a person walking on a tight rope, with vivid colors behind. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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I like the analogy of your walk with Faith as walking a tightrope equipped with a balancing pole. I like the alliteration of the phrase, "hums hymns of hope." The phrase, of "a soul vibration" works well with the reference to your kind of music. The whole poem is well put together, with a resounding end of saying you are "guided by your hand." It is not too preachy and talks of your individual dealings with life. Well written, with a nice picture of a person walking on a tight rope, with vivid colors behind. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thanks for your comments Jesse. I was thinking to write in the last line 'guided by God's hand' but as you point out, my poem doesn't sound too preachy and sometimes that blocks it for some people. The intention is there anyway. Whose hand would it be otherwise?
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The intention is there, yet I like how it is open to those with other faiths who will still be able to relate with your words.
Jesse
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Yes that's right, saying God pins it down too much.
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Thank you for allowing for diversity.
Jesse
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Lack of respect for diversity is the major problem in the world today. Live and let live could be my motto.
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Well said.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a beautifully written poem. The presentation is also great.
I like the content and the alliteration in the fourth line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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This is a beautifully written poem. The presentation is also great.
I like the content and the alliteration in the fourth line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thanks Maria. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Dark clouds of doubt fade beneath your steady feet, at dire faith in God, no question of looking back or down, you move to reach destination, guided by God; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Dark clouds of doubt fade beneath your steady feet, at dire faith in God, no question of looking back or down, you move to reach destination, guided by God; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Write to inspire -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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God helps me keep balance. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Your picture is one the thing that has frightened me--don't know how tight-walkers have the nerve to do it, and yet it works so well for your poem. "I won't look down. I won't look back" are inspiring words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Your picture is one the thing that has frightened me--don't know how tight-walkers have the nerve to do it, and yet it works so well for your poem. "I won't look down. I won't look back" are inspiring words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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I have a head for heights but tightrope walking is beyond belief to me, it looks impossible but clearly isn't.
Thanks for your review.
