Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "A Broiler"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from JSD
Well thank you for sharing this but I feel you go too far into the world of the abstract and surreal. Personally - and of course you must ignore me - if the writing doesn't communicate to the reader it fails. I don't feel you communicate. But many would say that about my stuff. Ah well!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Well thank you for sharing this but I feel you go too far into the world of the abstract and surreal. Personally - and of course you must ignore me - if the writing doesn't communicate to the reader it fails. I don't feel you communicate. But many would say that about my stuff. Ah well!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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I hear you, thinking over your given thoughts, feeling certain aspects were found to you as appealing, meriting this generous rate given by you: dispite. Thanking you for all. Best hopes towards your own
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ah, a corrupt system. Yet the human body is an incredible mechanism. Why the human brain alone is unfathomable in its own capacity.
Great thinking piece.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Ah, a corrupt system. Yet the human body is an incredible mechanism. Why the human brain alone is unfathomable in its own capacity.
Great thinking piece.
D
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Yes the human body is an incredible mechanism, generating our brains those needed services throughout, given to us consciousness to discern things that would corrupt those performances. Thanking you for the generous rate: and complimenting thoughts.
Comment from lancellot
Human digestion and eating practices is a good topic for writing commentary on or an essay about. This "poetry" requires mor defined and recognizable form. As is, the reading of sentences is choppy.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Human digestion and eating practices is a good topic for writing commentary on or an essay about. This "poetry" requires mor defined and recognizable form. As is, the reading of sentences is choppy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Okay! I didn't want to get professional with this, thinking a shout to watch how one eats, seeing this was a failed connection. Thanking you for your awakening viewpoints, prevailing this write statements: plus, that generous rate dispite.
Comment from Earl Corp
I had to read this twice to grasp the gist that you were referring to the digestive process in a human being. Your author's notes didn't clarify if for me.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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I had to read this twice to grasp the gist that you were referring to the digestive process in a human being. Your author's notes didn't clarify if for me.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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New write assuming pits, considering your thought pertaining footnote, thanking you dispute for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from country ranch writer
Over stuffed body seems to be ready to erupt in farting and burping to meet is goal of releasing the gasses you hold inside
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Over stuffed body seems to be ready to erupt in farting and burping to meet is goal of releasing the gasses you hold inside
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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That's about the cut if it, wanting not to grouse out the ladies being direct, trying to convey the proper pressure could improve health. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.