Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

Hi Tony,
I really enjoyed the playful and sensuous tinges in your writing.
Just enough to tantalize the senses and get the mind racing.
I'm a sucker for historical romance so I'm already intrigued.
A great balance between reality and fiction.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Very many thanks for the accolade of six stars, Shirley. Much appreciated. Glad you are enjoying the story so far and finding it well balanced. All the best, Tony

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

nicely written with excellent flow, keeping the reader intrigued and interested in what happens next. Mata Hari is a fascinating character, the real one I mean. great write, Tony............meeshu

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Meeshu. I enjoyed researching to find out a little more about Mata Hari. As you say, a fascinating character. Thanks for continuing to read my story. Glad you are enjoying it so far. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hahahaha, Tony, I like the play between the two of them, and you really had me fooled for a moment. I truly believed she had a gun pointed at his back. The sign of a good writer. I'm really looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Ulla. I think Charles might have thought it was a real gun, too, judging from his reaction! Glad you are still enjoying the story. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from krys123

Exceptional

Cheers, Tony:
>Well, Tony, if you keep on writing exceptionally well short pieces like this, then I will have to probably leave fans story because I can afford giving you sixes all the time. Chuckle!
> This is another fabulous piece of writing, Tony, is even get intricate to the smells of her perfume and a scent of her aura.
> You've woven in a romantic intensity of bit saying where she dressing his wound.
> Each behavior and and expressive descriptionw was very meticulously woven into each character that developed a bond between them.
>But this bond was playfully administered To reach each character played the part it seemed that he was a little bit more shaken and woozy from the playacting.
> I liked your title as it really reflected on this scene.
> Thank you for sharing this, Tony, take care and have a good one my dear friend.
Alx
PS: You do you own editing because it's flawless. And if you do I commend you highly.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

I certainly appreciate the stars you are showering on this story! They are doing a wealth of good for my ego! (chuckle)
I do my best to self-edit before I post a chapter, but people still find occasional nits that I've missed - obvious to a fresh set of eyes, but I think we tend to read what we thought we'd written!

reply by krys123 on 16-Aug-2018

That is so true, Tony, we see things into it. Starting to write poetry and stories about the Mendocino fires here in California. They got the fire, pretty much contained, but Damage that's already been done was immensely intense and devastatingly costly, Especially for human life.
Eight firemen lost their lives and they are still fighting. I'll be writing my 20 syllable poem about it.
> You're very welcome Tony, And I remember when you join just about three months after I joined fanstory and I thought you were great back then but now you're just tremendously over the top and still ripening.
Alx

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Tony,

I will tell you right off that I usually skip any post with the sex flag, but I was curious, because you don't typically write that way, so I thought I would try to trust you a bit, and I'm glad I did.


This was another well-written installment of your on-going story. I don't understand the reasoning behind the play-acting your leading lady did, but people are different all over. So, there you go!

I didn't see any nits and I will continue reading. Thanks!

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks. Robyn. Glad you didn't find the content too offensive! The joke that Helen played was in response to the awkward, probing questions that Charles had been asking in the previous chapter.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

Good build up to that tense scene when his knees started to buckle, then to find out it was just a joke. You have me intrigued with this story, wondering where you're going to take us. Very well written Tony, and with no word wastage,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks for your positive comments, Valda. I am delighted that you thought this chapter worth six stars!

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am looking forward to this adventure. I know it will more than worth my time to read. LOL You do a great job with descriptions. I really like these two characters. They seem like friends now. That's good.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

Thanks, Barbara. Yes, a friendship seems to be developing. I hope Charles doesn't regret it!

Comment from damommy

Excellent

It seems he is quite frightened of her. Maybe with good reason, eh? One with the adventure.

My first car was a Fiat 500 back in 1961. Now, I've dated myself.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018

He certainly doesn't seem to be too comfortable with her. She's keeping him on his toes.
Wow! A vintage car and a vintage author! What a great combination!

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Tony. Good job here. Your writing is always so clear and concise but loaded with great imagery, like this for instance:

"She steered me across into a nearby chair and left me with my head between my knees as she went to the bathroom to dampen a flannel. While I was recovering, she gently bathed my forehead and ran her fingers through my hair."

And what a classy finish: "Come on then," she said, draining my glass of vodka. "Let the adventure begin!"

Good job, Tony. Bob

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018

Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your comments. I find that I'm beginning to get inside these two characters. It could be quite a ride!

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Much enjoy your opening with the flowery scents that leads into a storm that has passed.

Aw sheesh what a wonderful showing of how tense he is. But then I guess the senses would be rather aroused after that.

Excellent chapter Tony, but Fiat's while not Lamborghinis are pretty good too. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018

Thanks for your continued reading, Gloria. Yes, Fiats are pretty good, especially round cities - but not quite what this Walter Mitty character had in mind LOL