Say WHAT? No RHYME???
A lament upon the nature of blank verse26 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
"We will sneak some rhyme internally,"Author exclaims about iambic pentameter Shakespere wrote. Indeed many find this scheme difficult to achieve. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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"We will sneak some rhyme internally,"Author exclaims about iambic pentameter Shakespere wrote. Indeed many find this scheme difficult to achieve. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Not so hard, LJ - you'll often find it as a natural speech rhythm, and very musical. Thx so much for reading, my dear!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Deniz22
Your intellectual powers combined with your vast knowledge of all things literary, expressed by your flawless vocabulary, cause me at first to be numb, and then to realize I am dumb.
NUMB da DUMB
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Your intellectual powers combined with your vast knowledge of all things literary, expressed by your flawless vocabulary, cause me at first to be numb, and then to realize I am dumb.
NUMB da DUMB
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Well THERE YOU ARE!! Still ALIVE AND KICKING and funny as hell, Den??? How ARE you?? I've been away writing other stuff for a while now, but rather miss your hairy-toed presence! (And thank you for your sweet sixer!)
Blessings to you!
:)Sharyn
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"hairy-toed"? That's a low insult. and by the way, there's nothing funny about Hell. Welcome back!
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
My dear, methinks you are too clever by half. . .at least half an iamb that is. I love your little joust at perfection and agree, Shakespeare himself broke the rules from time to time. To good effect, I might add. But I suppose you must learn the strict construction in any art before wandering off into your own sublime creations. This was a wonderful addition to my morning coffee routine. - Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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My dear, methinks you are too clever by half. . .at least half an iamb that is. I love your little joust at perfection and agree, Shakespeare himself broke the rules from time to time. To good effect, I might add. But I suppose you must learn the strict construction in any art before wandering off into your own sublime creations. This was a wonderful addition to my morning coffee routine. - Wendy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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"Aloha" Wendy - so glad to join you for morning coffee, and delighted to see that you're actively on the site as I always enjoy your writing!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Visionary1234 . Your title made me want to read this and what a fun poem tongue in cheek but still quite strict in meter LOL ( yes I like to count Ha Ha.) It is funny how many people get caught up in the Da Dums but it does make sense and often the meter is what makes the poem worth reading. Yet saome free verse is really good also as long at the content makes sense to the reader and not just esoteric to the writer that is unable to be interpreted . your poem is a clever piece and I enjoyed the fun aspect Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Hi Visionary1234 . Your title made me want to read this and what a fun poem tongue in cheek but still quite strict in meter LOL ( yes I like to count Ha Ha.) It is funny how many people get caught up in the Da Dums but it does make sense and often the meter is what makes the poem worth reading. Yet saome free verse is really good also as long at the content makes sense to the reader and not just esoteric to the writer that is unable to be interpreted . your poem is a clever piece and I enjoyed the fun aspect Cheers Christine
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much Chrissy. Actually I LOVE free verse most of all - but enjoy formal metrical poetry if it is unique and interesting!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fun poem to start off the meter bleaters club. When we cannot have fun in what we do, we should stop doing it when it becomes a strain.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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A very well-written fun poem to start off the meter bleaters club. When we cannot have fun in what we do, we should stop doing it when it becomes a strain.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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You are so right, Sandra. Some people forget the 'fun' which is to be had, even in something as supposedly 'serious' as iambic pentameter! Did you know that RAP MUSIC is based on iambic pentameter???
:)Sharyn
Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for sharing your fun with blank verse, both internal and end rhyme and rhythm. I am glad you were inspired by the Meter Bleaters Club to create these "cheeky variations". Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for sharing your fun with blank verse, both internal and end rhyme and rhythm. I am glad you were inspired by the Meter Bleaters Club to create these "cheeky variations". Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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"Aloha" Joan - I actually LOVE writing blank verse, believe it or not. Just can't stand the posturing surrounding the purity of iambic pentameter when Shakespeare himself gave us tons of variations! :):):) Thanks for reading & enjoying!
:)Sharyn
Comment from catch22
Hi Sharyn, what a great little poem, although I did catch an end rhyme of within and sin--so it may not be a strict blank verse poem. That is precisely the point about the form being flexible to some extent as long as the spirit is maintained--and the message remains intact. Excellent use of poetic sound devices and clever punctuation choices as well. A very skillful write.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Hi Sharyn, what a great little poem, although I did catch an end rhyme of within and sin--so it may not be a strict blank verse poem. That is precisely the point about the form being flexible to some extent as long as the spirit is maintained--and the message remains intact. Excellent use of poetic sound devices and clever punctuation choices as well. A very skillful write.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Oh ya think? is that the ONLY one??? :):):) I can't resist being a little cheeky about something that is regarded with such solemnity ... and, as I said to Joan (above) Shakespeare didn't hesitate to bend his own rules to fit his own desires. You rarely see it used for comedy though, so I thought the challenge irresistible. Bless you for your lovely sixer catch!
:)Sharyn
Comment from GregoryCody
I Love this. Really. Your flow is so unique. Stop start feel. AND I enjoyed the subject matter. I loathe DA DUM as you know haha. And your close was Great. But yes, the subject was fun to read about. I don't know blank verse. Formal is so hard.
Thes are some that stood out to me
Strict unvaried order
Love Accidental rhyme
Assonance confused
GREAT JOB
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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I Love this. Really. Your flow is so unique. Stop start feel. AND I enjoyed the subject matter. I loathe DA DUM as you know haha. And your close was Great. But yes, the subject was fun to read about. I don't know blank verse. Formal is so hard.
Thes are some that stood out to me
Strict unvaried order
Love Accidental rhyme
Assonance confused
GREAT JOB
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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No it isn't dear - it really IS da dum da dum da dum da dum da dum with no rhyming ... but you can easily fiddle the meter and play with assonance ... Bless you for your lovely sixer! I was feeling distinctly down last night, so it helped to be a little cheeky and find distraction. I'll e mail you! Love your new cutie!!!
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WAIT. WOWWWW. Hahaha I didn't even catch the meter! Mind blown. This is Really good. I went back to read. I cannot do this. You made it look easy. Ugh I seriously have no idea.
Comment from Sasha
I love all the new clubs that are popping up. I haven't had a chance to check them all out but when I get a few free minutes I plan to do just that. This was a fun poem and you mentioned all the parts of poetry that confuse and baffle me. I get lost with all the rules and never seem to understand most of them. Maybe taking a class would help. Nice work with this one, I got a real kick out of it too.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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I love all the new clubs that are popping up. I haven't had a chance to check them all out but when I get a few free minutes I plan to do just that. This was a fun poem and you mentioned all the parts of poetry that confuse and baffle me. I get lost with all the rules and never seem to understand most of them. Maybe taking a class would help. Nice work with this one, I got a real kick out of it too.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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I haven't been on FS for a long, long time Sascha (? do I have the spelling right?) - so it was fun to see something new. And the clubs seem to have interesting prompts, I notice. Pantygynt's offering a basic poetic meter class, and he's really good! Go for it! Be mystified no longer! And thank you for popping in and reading this little fluff piece. :)Sharyn
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
Thank you for sharing this poem which you wrote in response to the challenge. Your explanations actually helped me to understand some of the things that have seemed beyond my comprehension.
Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
Thank you for sharing this poem which you wrote in response to the challenge. Your explanations actually helped me to understand some of the things that have seemed beyond my comprehension.
Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for popping in, Patty. We take ourselves way too seriously sometimes, I think! :)Sharyn