A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Your Touch"Assorted poems of love
29 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A lovely, touching poem, presented
in rhyming couplets that work real
well.
It's the touch of love - it can be no other.
Beautifully written, Missy.
Margaret
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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A lovely, touching poem, presented
in rhyming couplets that work real
well.
It's the touch of love - it can be no other.
Beautifully written, Missy.
Margaret
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my sweet friend :) ...Your opinion carries a lot of weight with me as your such a superb writer yourself.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written poem that clearly depicts how just being with that someone special in our lives can make the worst moments seem like they were nothing.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Well written poem that clearly depicts how just being with that someone special in our lives can make the worst moments seem like they were nothing.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Exactly, Brett. I am pleased that you used your valuable time to read and review my work. Thank you ever so much!
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Justafan - four lovely couplets expressing the comforts of true love. The touch of a hand - lovely thought and the picture enhances your poem. Nice read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Hi Justafan - four lovely couplets expressing the comforts of true love. The touch of a hand - lovely thought and the picture enhances your poem. Nice read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Dorothy, Thank you for this incredibly nice review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it :)
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
You have really gotten this romantic theme down to a science..A science of using the perfect words at just the right place..You show a lot of emotion in every thing you write..Others can learn a lot from you Lady Dixie... You inspire and that is, In my opinion, one of the best traits a person can have ...
Hugs
from TK
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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You have really gotten this romantic theme down to a science..A science of using the perfect words at just the right place..You show a lot of emotion in every thing you write..Others can learn a lot from you Lady Dixie... You inspire and that is, In my opinion, one of the best traits a person can have ...
Hugs
from TK
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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You know I think you are such an incredible poet, that for you to say my work is well done is a big bonus for me Sir Knight. Thanks for stopping by and leaving this wonderful review. xx
Always,
Missy
Comment from Jackarrie
This poem is really beautiful, the well chosen words are very touching and so romantic. The voice over is very well done, you have a sweet voice. I am delighted that I have a six for it.
well done
Mary
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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This poem is really beautiful, the well chosen words are very touching and so romantic. The voice over is very well done, you have a sweet voice. I am delighted that I have a six for it.
well done
Mary
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Mary thank you for this lovely review of my work. I am really smiling :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from mfowler
Excellent love poem, both tender and imaginable.
When my day is tough and I'm at my wits end
All it takes is a touch ... a touch of your hand.
(Like the repetition of the touch in line 2; makes it emphatic. Spag: wit's end. If you take out 'my', I think it strengthens the line. Listen to it and see what you think.)
How is it you do this with just a touch of your hand
You make all that's wrong in my world...right again.
(Need a question mark at the end of the first line. Once again this couplet sounds great.)
The poem gets together really well; a statement of love based on the sensual element of touch is perfect. Focussing on one element helps the reader appreciate the wider use you make of other touch imagery.
Going very well, Missy. Those adjustments I've suggested are a matter of choice I think.
When the tears won't stop, my soul is in knots
You come to me and I open up... you convince me it's not one big plot.
(This is a great verse. Like that 'soul in knots' metaphor. Listen to 'soul's' rather than 'soul is'. The meter is strong then.)
When all I need is a hug and a kiss
I step into your arms and into bliss.
(That second line sounds great and is really sweet)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Excellent love poem, both tender and imaginable.
When my day is tough and I'm at my wits end
All it takes is a touch ... a touch of your hand.
(Like the repetition of the touch in line 2; makes it emphatic. Spag: wit's end. If you take out 'my', I think it strengthens the line. Listen to it and see what you think.)
How is it you do this with just a touch of your hand
You make all that's wrong in my world...right again.
(Need a question mark at the end of the first line. Once again this couplet sounds great.)
The poem gets together really well; a statement of love based on the sensual element of touch is perfect. Focussing on one element helps the reader appreciate the wider use you make of other touch imagery.
Going very well, Missy. Those adjustments I've suggested are a matter of choice I think.
When the tears won't stop, my soul is in knots
You come to me and I open up... you convince me it's not one big plot.
(This is a great verse. Like that 'soul in knots' metaphor. Listen to 'soul's' rather than 'soul is'. The meter is strong then.)
When all I need is a hug and a kiss
I step into your arms and into bliss.
(That second line sounds great and is really sweet)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Did u hear my reading of it?
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When I get home I will make changes Teach :). I hope I am doing you proud. Thanks you so much.
Always,
Missy
Comment from meggie13
How romantic! It is so true there is no hurt that love can not cure. There is a special sensation in the hands. A kiss and a hug are sublime. It's so magic to be in love. You rhyme is steady until the last line yet the poem is great. The picture tells your words.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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How romantic! It is so true there is no hurt that love can not cure. There is a special sensation in the hands. A kiss and a hug are sublime. It's so magic to be in love. You rhyme is steady until the last line yet the poem is great. The picture tells your words.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thanks Mom... Did you hear me reading it?
Either way... I am happy you liked it!!
Always,
Missy
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No, how come miss it? I am going back to listen to it. Love ,Mom
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Yes, Dear I heard it , you sound great.
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No, how come miss it? I am going back to listen to it. Love ,Mom
Comment from cmowen87
I loved your work. I am glad that your character has that person to open up with. That one person that understands you completely. That person is my mom. She knows me so well that she can just look at me and tell what I am feeling. My husband is still working on it lol. Great job
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I loved your work. I am glad that your character has that person to open up with. That one person that understands you completely. That person is my mom. She knows me so well that she can just look at me and tell what I am feeling. My husband is still working on it lol. Great job
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Oh, I'm glad you have your Mom... Mine has been gone 30 years 😢. I want to thank you now for the sweet review.
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
I wish I had a six for this. This is lovely writing. It flows so well. I love that it is unisex. It could be for a lover, a mom, a dad, a favorite uncle. Definitely works.
Kudos on a great job.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I wish I had a six for this. This is lovely writing. It flows so well. I love that it is unisex. It could be for a lover, a mom, a dad, a favorite uncle. Definitely works.
Kudos on a great job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Oh thanks a bunch hon for all the great support you give me. It means a alot to me Darlene :)
Always,
Missy
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Right back atcha kiddo
Comment from Megalips
Really nice and I love that you did the audio...so nice to hear your voice and, also good to hear the meter just the way you intended. The rhyme is great and the way you approach the theme is great... it all comes together beautifully in the last line!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Really nice and I love that you did the audio...so nice to hear your voice and, also good to hear the meter just the way you intended. The rhyme is great and the way you approach the theme is great... it all comes together beautifully in the last line!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thanks hon for the very encouraging review :).
My first time with voice... Boy what a pain.. Lol
Always,
Missy