Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

A lovely gentle haiku, it is amazing how a few well put together words can tell volumes. Nice back ground and fonts too. Good luck for the contest Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for your review and best wishes. Portia

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I like this haiku. You chose a good subject. Your words made me feel the pain of being homeless and not have shelter from the reain.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for your rating and review. Pharp

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements splendidly. Your first two lines of concrete imagery draw the reader into a world of despair and the satori explodes those feelings wonderfully. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for such an outstanding review. Greatly appreciated. Blessings Portia

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 05-Jun-2015

My pleasure.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello author what a very visible image of the homeless
searching for shelter( when it rains) and thirst for compassion from others

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and for getting the message intended. Blessings to you Portia

reply by Gert sherwood on 05-Jun-2015

You are welcome

Gert

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

This is quite an expression specially when you put the rain with onebeing thirsty. I am sure this is what you intended.
Then it is very well done.
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Your are correct and I am glad you got the message intended. Thirsty for compassion; thanks so much for your review and rating. Blessings Portia

Comment from petalangela

Excellent

Ah yes the homeless thirst for water but more than water the thirst for well of human kindness. Alas that fountain is either dry or green and slimy with corruption
There is no shelter for the vulnerable anymore

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 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for understanding the meaning within this haiku. I appreciate your rating and review. lol Portia

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your haiku. It is in good form--syllable count correct and it does paint a picture.

This is really good. I see nothing to change.

Good job and good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for your continued support and review. Portia