The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "One more time"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from heyjude
Very well done. I know I like the messages in poems
better than worrying about rhythm and perfection.
I like that message. Keep trusting God to take care
of us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Very well done. I know I like the messages in poems
better than worrying about rhythm and perfection.
I like that message. Keep trusting God to take care
of us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so very much for the comments. I appreciate them and the good luck wishes. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Carolyn;
-according to your office notes you are right that this is not a perfect poem, but it sure sends a message that is clear, distinct and readily understandable. A beautiful message that shows how faith in oneself and in the Lord can bring forth bounty of graces galore.
-Good use of enjambment
-excellent rhyming where each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line, making the rhythm flows smoothly.
-Good cadence, timing and tempo make the reading flow smoothly, clearly and easily.
-The imagery is grand and clear and exquisitely expressive and vividly descriptive.
-A great job Carolyn and thank you so much for sharing and posting this poem and may the look good Lord be with you always.
-Good luck in the contest for this is an excellent piece of writing.
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Carolyn;
-according to your office notes you are right that this is not a perfect poem, but it sure sends a message that is clear, distinct and readily understandable. A beautiful message that shows how faith in oneself and in the Lord can bring forth bounty of graces galore.
-Good use of enjambment
-excellent rhyming where each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line, making the rhythm flows smoothly.
-Good cadence, timing and tempo make the reading flow smoothly, clearly and easily.
-The imagery is grand and clear and exquisitely expressive and vividly descriptive.
-A great job Carolyn and thank you so much for sharing and posting this poem and may the look good Lord be with you always.
-Good luck in the contest for this is an excellent piece of writing.
Alex
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much Alex,
If anyone should know the perfect poem it would be you sir. I so admire your work. I appreciate that you liked the message and for the most part found the poem in good form.
:-) Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome, Carolyn and you have a pleasant evening.
Alex
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Again you are so sincerely welcome, Carolyn.
Alex
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This reminds me of the Old Man of the Sea. He thought his greatest days were done when he got his finest catch.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This reminds me of the Old Man of the Sea. He thought his greatest days were done when he got his finest catch.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Is'nt that the truth, sometimes we just have to wait upon the Lord. Thanks Tom, :-) Carolyn
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It was my pleasure
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Absolutely beautiful poem you have written here. Very good and unforced rhyme used throughout the verses. I loved reading it!
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Absolutely beautiful poem you have written here. Very good and unforced rhyme used throughout the verses. I loved reading it!
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks Sarah,
I so appreciate your affirming remarks and the fabulous bright star.
My best to you always,
Carolyn
Comment from Tatarka2
Notesandmore, you have more than achieved your goal here! I just gave away my last 6, but I kind of wish I had saved one for this poem. Not only is it a beautiful and important message, but it's perfectly and lyrically told. I commend you, and wish you the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Notesandmore, you have more than achieved your goal here! I just gave away my last 6, but I kind of wish I had saved one for this poem. Not only is it a beautiful and important message, but it's perfectly and lyrically told. I commend you, and wish you the best in this contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much Tatarka2,
I love virtual sixes and will count yours among the top. I am so glad you enjoyed this one.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think this needs to be re-classified into the poetry category - it is entered in a poetry contest after all.
I think you are right to a certain degree about being more concerned about the message in a faith piece than the form but many others are not as forgiving or understanding.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
I think this needs to be re-classified into the poetry category - it is entered in a poetry contest after all.
I think you are right to a certain degree about being more concerned about the message in a faith piece than the form but many others are not as forgiving or understanding.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks GMG for noting it was in the wrong catagorie, I had reserved a spot so it was changed with no problem and is now in the contest.
I appreciate your comments.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
OMG Carolyn, I love this poem...reminds my of the movie The Old Man of the Sea...and you are so right...we have to keep our faith...trust God knows what He is doing...so good to see you girlfriend...so very well written...with a wonderful message...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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OMG Carolyn, I love this poem...reminds my of the movie The Old Man of the Sea...and you are so right...we have to keep our faith...trust God knows what He is doing...so good to see you girlfriend...so very well written...with a wonderful message...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks dear Linda, I am so glad to have a little bit of inspiration. Haven't written much lately. Good to see you too. Wish our FS family would get a bit healthier. Have you heard from Marlene, and I know Brooke is ill.
Love you, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn, no I haven't heard anything from Maureen...there really are so many on here...it breaks my heart...it is always so good to hear from you...please take care...and I will check in...Love ya Linda xxoo
Comment from Michaelk
I was a little confused when it said fiction and ended up being a poem. Not sure if you meant to do that or if it was accidental.
As for the poem, this was a wonderful story told of the fisherman's life. How faith had gotten him through this far and faith would see him through to the end.
I found it apt that the net tore and needed mending just as he was tired and wore out.
A wonderful story told as a poem, with great rhyme and rhythm. The picture even matched perfectly the mood of the poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I was a little confused when it said fiction and ended up being a poem. Not sure if you meant to do that or if it was accidental.
As for the poem, this was a wonderful story told of the fisherman's life. How faith had gotten him through this far and faith would see him through to the end.
I found it apt that the net tore and needed mending just as he was tired and wore out.
A wonderful story told as a poem, with great rhyme and rhythm. The picture even matched perfectly the mood of the poem.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks for bringing this to my attention, as I had reserved a spot in the Faith contest it was changed to the proper category. I have no idea what happened.
Also, I appreciate your fine remarks and glad you liked the poem and the presentation.
:-) Carolyn
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No problem. Glad I could help. :)
Comment from Janet7053
Carolyn, These quatrains are narrative lines of fine art. I thought about the disciples casting their nets on the other side. then I began to see the expanded meaning that perhaps this was one of the disciples later on in his life looking back on his experiences and applying that extra measure of faith Jesus had so inspired within them.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Carolyn, These quatrains are narrative lines of fine art. I thought about the disciples casting their nets on the other side. then I began to see the expanded meaning that perhaps this was one of the disciples later on in his life looking back on his experiences and applying that extra measure of faith Jesus had so inspired within them.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks Janet7053 for the great comments and your appreciation for the reference to Gods word.
So glad you enjoyed this one.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from LIJ Red
From the CONTACT US under COMMUNITY send Tom a message and he will move your poem out of the short story line into the poetry side. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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From the CONTACT US under COMMUNITY send Tom a message and he will move your poem out of the short story line into the poetry side. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, I took care of the issue, as I had reserved a spot FS fixed it. Don't know what happened. Thanks also for the good luck wishes.
:-) Carolyn