Christine's Poems
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Comment from fimarie78
It was nice to read a happy, upbeat poem for a change. Rhyming couplets and a consistent rhythm gave it a nice, bright feel and it was interesting to read your insights on life in Australia.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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It was nice to read a happy, upbeat poem for a change. Rhyming couplets and a consistent rhythm gave it a nice, bright feel and it was interesting to read your insights on life in Australia.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2017
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Hi fimarie, Yes I am pleased to be able to share an up bear poem and being a patriotic Australian what better way to celebrate our Australia day with a light hearted look at ourselves. Thanks so much for your review and have a great day Cheers Christine
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahahaha! Well stone the flamin' crows mate. She's a real good sort that Chrissy sheila! Bloody hell mate what a bewdy this bloke was. I'm gunner run out and tell the cheese and kisses to come and have a butchers hook at this bugger! Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Hahahahaha! Well stone the flamin' crows mate. She's a real good sort that Chrissy sheila! Bloody hell mate what a bewdy this bloke was. I'm gunner run out and tell the cheese and kisses to come and have a butchers hook at this bugger! Cheers Fez
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much Fez I'm glad you liked this I hoped it sums us up reasonably well ha ha and a six also beauty mate had fun with this one I wonder what the rest of the world thinks of us lol having a ball on Fanstory see Yu Cheers Christine 😀😃
Comment from mfowler
If Paul Hogan didn't give the Yanks a good look at the Ocker Down Under, your poem will make up for it. LOL
You've done a great job mimicking Dorothea McKellar's great standard, the rhythm spot on. (That poem was written only 30 kms from here in Gawler, SA.) I think your portrayal of life in Oz is very funny and in lots of ways quite true. You've thrown in some great bogan looks, but who cares when you can have a Barbie and a beer under the sun with the flies and your mates. Loved these bits in particular:
I love his thongs and singlet too, and stubbie shorts you see,
His beer gut proudly hanging out, he is the one for me.
I love the Aussie rules we play, that's football, not ping pong,
And how the crowds call out real loud, if the umpie gets it wrong.
I love our patriotic style, the anthem that is sung,
'Advance Australia Fair' I think, don't know the words, just hum.
Couple of SPAGS on your barbie:
His ruggard well built body, and face with all it's charms.
His (rugged) well built body, and face with all (its) charms.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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If Paul Hogan didn't give the Yanks a good look at the Ocker Down Under, your poem will make up for it. LOL
You've done a great job mimicking Dorothea McKellar's great standard, the rhythm spot on. (That poem was written only 30 kms from here in Gawler, SA.) I think your portrayal of life in Oz is very funny and in lots of ways quite true. You've thrown in some great bogan looks, but who cares when you can have a Barbie and a beer under the sun with the flies and your mates. Loved these bits in particular:
I love his thongs and singlet too, and stubbie shorts you see,
His beer gut proudly hanging out, he is the one for me.
I love the Aussie rules we play, that's football, not ping pong,
And how the crowds call out real loud, if the umpie gets it wrong.
I love our patriotic style, the anthem that is sung,
'Advance Australia Fair' I think, don't know the words, just hum.
Couple of SPAGS on your barbie:
His ruggard well built body, and face with all it's charms.
His (rugged) well built body, and face with all (its) charms.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thanks mfowler for stopping by to have a look and giving me some great feedback loved you comments. And will corrects SPAGS appreciate your review Cheers Christine😃
Comment from patcelaw
I have always want to visit Australia, but never had the chance, now I am too old to make that long a trip, so I will visit your land through the poems and writings, you and your fellow Aussies write and share here. Patricia
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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I have always want to visit Australia, but never had the chance, now I am too old to make that long a trip, so I will visit your land through the poems and writings, you and your fellow Aussies write and share here. Patricia
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thank you pat law ,I' glad you liked my poem and yes Australia is A lovely country but we try not to take ourselves too seriously hence the style I write Maybe oneday you may visit never too old cheers Christine
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I will be 77 years young on June 7th, as will my twin brother.
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Fanastic
Comment from inside echo
What a truly patriotic poem. It screams dedication and a real love for country. I liked how you used a verse to cover Aussie's best, from the genders, to sports, to food, to love of country. It reads easily and flows very well. I has great rhyme. It is also lite and a pleasure to read. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
echo
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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What a truly patriotic poem. It screams dedication and a real love for country. I liked how you used a verse to cover Aussie's best, from the genders, to sports, to food, to love of country. It reads easily and flows very well. I has great rhyme. It is also lite and a pleasure to read. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
echo
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thank you inside echo I I feel lucky to live in Australia and yes like all patriots I find our ways amusing but easily recognised and easy to write about I like rhyme the best it lends itself to create and use the words available Cheers Christine
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You are welcome. Australia is one of those places that is on our bucket list to visit. Your accent alone is oooooooo so sexy.
echo
Comment from jaded831
Interesting, your poem flowed nicely, and I agree it kinda has a melody to it. I never read the original, so I can't compare, but I do know what I like. I so enjoyed reading your excellent poem
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reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Interesting, your poem flowed nicely, and I agree it kinda has a melody to it. I never read the original, so I can't compare, but I do know what I like. I so enjoyed reading your excellent poem
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Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thank you so much I have only recently found this site so still learning the ropes and look forward to sharing both posting and reading others work also CheersChristine
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Welcome.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Poem depicts how much the author likes Aussies and their way of life. Talks about Aussie men, women, food, and rugby. So author must be Australian.
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reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Poem depicts how much the author likes Aussies and their way of life. Talks about Aussie men, women, food, and rugby. So author must be Australian.
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Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Hi Brett yes I am an Aussie and the poem is quite reflective and a little bit making fun of us. but just so you are aware the football code here is 'Aussie rules ' although rugby is played in some states we are ver much Aussie rules tragics the season has started already and will finish in Sept I barrack for Richmond .
cheers Christine