The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 84 "Salmon's Journey"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
Yes, this is a sad but true story. The epic journey of the salmon ro struggle to return to the spawning place to lay the next generation of eggs. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Yes, this is a sad but true story. The epic journey of the salmon ro struggle to return to the spawning place to lay the next generation of eggs. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thanks Tom,
It is amazing how they know just when to start the journey. God is so good in His creation. So many lessons are there for us from such simple and natural occurrences.
I appreciate your fine comments.
:-) Carolyn
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It is indeed wonderful
Comment from krys123
Carolyn;
+ near and notable alliteration's:/"beset by bears"/"spring the same"/
+ Imagery is very distinct and clear and very demonstratively expressive and vividly descriptive and most importantly all of the short verses are interconnected with the same concept.
+ Rhyming is found in it is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line which is important because it is helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythms movement, timing, and cadence all were helpful in making the reading of the poem clear, fluid and very easy.
+ Poetic assessment summary: my enjoyment of these verses was such that I found these verses very impressively written and each one continued to support the concept and topic of salmon going upstream and supporting the eagerness to fertilize no matter what the cost.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Carolyn;
+ near and notable alliteration's:/"beset by bears"/"spring the same"/
+ Imagery is very distinct and clear and very demonstratively expressive and vividly descriptive and most importantly all of the short verses are interconnected with the same concept.
+ Rhyming is found in it is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line which is important because it is helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythms movement, timing, and cadence all were helpful in making the reading of the poem clear, fluid and very easy.
+ Poetic assessment summary: my enjoyment of these verses was such that I found these verses very impressively written and each one continued to support the concept and topic of salmon going upstream and supporting the eagerness to fertilize no matter what the cost.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you dear Alex for this wonderful review of the Salmon's Journey. Your comments are always appreciated.
:-) Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome.
Alex
Comment from royowen
Jesus Himself pointed out that unless death occurs new life can't be generated, like for us in John 5:24, unless a seed falls to the ground, It cannot regenerate, like the the symbolic death of the salmon, has this incredible urge to forge against the odds to spawn upstream feeding a few bears and fishermen on the way, returning to the place of its birth. Well done, there's more than just a fishy tale in this living metaphor Caroline, my sister, well done, well written, blessings, Roy.
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Jesus Himself pointed out that unless death occurs new life can't be generated, like for us in John 5:24, unless a seed falls to the ground, It cannot regenerate, like the the symbolic death of the salmon, has this incredible urge to forge against the odds to spawn upstream feeding a few bears and fishermen on the way, returning to the place of its birth. Well done, there's more than just a fishy tale in this living metaphor Caroline, my sister, well done, well written, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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I love your comments.... Fishy tale in a living metaphor.
Thanks Roy, for this outstanding review and scripture reference.
(BTW- how far are you from Vanuatu Islands?)
Take care, tell Elaine hello,
Love, Carolyn
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For us, Caroline, about 3500 miles, we're South Australia, Adelaide, it's closest to North Queensland, we never get cyclones, some storms. And we took up an offering for the victims, it's tropical, like North Queensland, blessings, my dear friend, Roy.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed this. It reminds me of not giving up when things get you down. The image is perfect. The short lines flow well.
I would change something about the title. There is an apostrophe after the word Salmon'. Should there also be a s as in Salmon's Journey?
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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I enjoyed this. It reminds me of not giving up when things get you down. The image is perfect. The short lines flow well.
I would change something about the title. There is an apostrophe after the word Salmon'. Should there also be a s as in Salmon's Journey?
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Hi there and thanks, I had caught the missing 's' , but I think you so much for your through edit. That means a lot to me. I am also happy you enjoyed this one.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
good use of abcb rhyme with very clever proximate pairings like witness/test
good alliteration like in beset by bears and species to save
excellent use of enjambment
good consonance when read aloud
great descriptive detail
and I love the message :-) Brooke
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good use of abcb rhyme with very clever proximate pairings like witness/test
good alliteration like in beset by bears and species to save
excellent use of enjambment
good consonance when read aloud
great descriptive detail
and I love the message :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much Brooke , I am glad you liked this one. I appreciate the affirming review.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from misscookie
I like the photo you choose for your poem.
It is a beautiful place.
You captured my attention from the start. Your words are so true specially your authors note.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
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I like the photo you choose for your poem.
It is a beautiful place.
You captured my attention from the start. Your words are so true specially your authors note.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thanks Cookie,
I'm glad you like this one and I appreciate your fine comments..
:-) Carolyn
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you're very welcome, yes this was great write.
Cookie
Comment from angelface2
Neat poem, Carolyn. I love salmon. smoked is okay, but can't salmon, I make salmon soup with. I love that. This is what salmon do, okay. I've never seen them make the trip, but sometimes wonder at their leap. they must have strong tails!! XX Miss Sally
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Neat poem, Carolyn. I love salmon. smoked is okay, but can't salmon, I make salmon soup with. I love that. This is what salmon do, okay. I've never seen them make the trip, but sometimes wonder at their leap. they must have strong tails!! XX Miss Sally
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Hi Miss Sally,
You have my attention with Salmon soup. I have never had that, would you care to share the recipe. You could do it the form of a short story then others could share as well.
Thank you so much for this great review and generous rating.
:-) Carolyn
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Salmon soup is made with canned salmon. I use the pink salmon. One can of salmon and 1/2 gallon of milk is all it takes. You can add some butter if you want. I love it with lots of crackers. Try it sometime and let me know what you think. Miss Sally
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Sounds easy enough, I'll have to try it. Thanks for sharing :-)
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Carolyn...
Interesting how it goes, but I never 'think' about the salmon dying at the end of their journey. Good point made in you poem. Love the artwork---so contemporary against the age-old run of the salmon.
Good job.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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Hi, Carolyn...
Interesting how it goes, but I never 'think' about the salmon dying at the end of their journey. Good point made in you poem. Love the artwork---so contemporary against the age-old run of the salmon.
Good job.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
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Thanks Jax,
Fan art is a funny thing. I had written the poem and then found this, salmon, bear and fisherman, all in one picture. How lucky can you get?
So glad you enjoyed this one, thanks for the comments. Glad you liked it.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
They are amazing, aren't they. I often wonder why they do it, it is hard work jumping upstream, and then lay their eggs and die. Such a shame. Excellent poem, and a real pleasure to read. :) Sandra.
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They are amazing, aren't they. I often wonder why they do it, it is hard work jumping upstream, and then lay their eggs and die. Such a shame. Excellent poem, and a real pleasure to read. :) Sandra.
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
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Thanks Sandra,
Nature is so amazing! One of the mysteries of life that we will never understand I guess. So glad you enjoyed the Salmon's Journey.
I also appreciate all those bright stars.
:-) Carolyn