New Wings
Starting life anew...19 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
I have a thing for butterflies. Most of the art I do on my computer will have a butterfly some place in it.
Good luck in the contest. Patricia
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I have a thing for butterflies. Most of the art I do on my computer will have a butterfly some place in it.
Good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Well penned butterfly poem paired nicely with color scheme and artwork. Wonderful contest entry; good luck. Nice presentation of free verse and rhyme as well as progression, rhythm and flow. Thanks for sharing and good luck, Deb
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Well penned butterfly poem paired nicely with color scheme and artwork. Wonderful contest entry; good luck. Nice presentation of free verse and rhyme as well as progression, rhythm and flow. Thanks for sharing and good luck, Deb
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from country ranch writer
love butterflies of all shapes and sises some even wear disguises many rich in aquatic colors others yellow,black and spotted all to bring an abundance of total joy
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love butterflies of all shapes and sises some even wear disguises many rich in aquatic colors others yellow,black and spotted all to bring an abundance of total joy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Aylee.Jackson
Very beautiful written!
I personally would have liked to learn about what caused her to start over again in life, but I realize that not all poems or stories have to be emotionally deep.
Good job with the imagery!
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Very beautiful written!
I personally would have liked to learn about what caused her to start over again in life, but I realize that not all poems or stories have to be emotionally deep.
Good job with the imagery!
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from tfawcus
I love the way you have used the emerging butterfly as a metaphor for a teenager spreading her wings and taking the first delicious flight into the unknown world of adulthood.
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I love the way you have used the emerging butterfly as a metaphor for a teenager spreading her wings and taking the first delicious flight into the unknown world of adulthood.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nicely written with good imagery.
-There is good progression in the poem.
-It is always difficult for any new being to emerge but somehow they are ready. You get this across well.
-I like how you show the observations of this creature freeing itself to move on, especially in stanza five with the image of the armor.
-I like the image wings of gold.
-Like the butterfly, all creatures have to adapt to their circumstances.
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-Very nicely written with good imagery.
-There is good progression in the poem.
-It is always difficult for any new being to emerge but somehow they are ready. You get this across well.
-I like how you show the observations of this creature freeing itself to move on, especially in stanza five with the image of the armor.
-I like the image wings of gold.
-Like the butterfly, all creatures have to adapt to their circumstances.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from TAB_that's me
A great pondering poem and good entry for the butterfly contest. Great comparisons of the butterfly and human feelings. Good luck to you.
Teresa
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A great pondering poem and good entry for the butterfly contest. Great comparisons of the butterfly and human feelings. Good luck to you.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Pyrrho
The metaphor of caterpillar-to-butterfly is a common one for metamorphous from one stage of life to a better one and you did well with it.
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The metaphor of caterpillar-to-butterfly is a common one for metamorphous from one stage of life to a better one and you did well with it.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Loanna, This is a really good entry for this Butterfly competition, wonderfully penned in free verse and rhyme they blended together beautifully, good luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Loanna, This is a really good entry for this Butterfly competition, wonderfully penned in free verse and rhyme they blended together beautifully, good luck in the contest my friend.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015