Comment from The Death

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn.

Great use of brevity to create a haunting atmosphere. Strong verb choices add to the setting and sensory appeal. Striking presentation of your work, with excellent word economy.


Bone chilling screeches

Ice-cold terror grips the heart

Owls in the attic

Fine use of I and O assonance throughout, and R consonance in the first two lines. Nice satori-esque ending. Enjoyed this!

Regards,
Anupam

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thanks Anupam, good to see you. :-) Carolyn

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I must admit I haven't heard one yet, not native to our country, Carolyn, so although I've been to US, I haven't seen one, but I'm sure a lot of people have on FS have, well done, my friend, good luck, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

So you don't have robins or screech owls. LOL.. Well we don't have Kangaroos or Wallabies.. I guess that makes us even.
You have made me so aware of the differences in nature in our respective countries. Isn't our site interesting. I love to hear about where each of us are from and the life forms there.
Thank you for your fine comments.
Love, Carolyn

reply by royowen on 17-Mar-2015

You're very welcome, why don't you read Mark fowler, fan him, he is a Christian and a fine writer, he frequently writes Australian stuff, you can live vicariously through him, blessings, sis, Roy.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent haiku, Carolyn, I love the picture, but I know what you mean about the eerie sound that they make. it makes your skin crawl when they hear it...

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Doesn't it though... Thanks for the great comments. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn,

Beautiful pix of the owl. So real looking. I've never heard owl either. In fact, I've actually hardly ever seen any period. Guess this chickie doesn't get out much. (*<*)

Nicely penned and presented.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

I don't know if your area has owls or not, I would think so. I'll have to look that up. Missouri has several species of them. This one is rather small, some are huge and of course, Hoot..Whooo Whooo. LOL Thanks for the great comments Jax,
Love, Carolyn

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Carolyn;
+ imagery is very distinct and clear and superbly expressive and demonstratively and vividly descriptive as it perfectly describes the loud screeching of an owl especially before it attacks its prey.
+ Enjambment used to it's the running on of a thought and/or concept from one line or verse to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Juxtaposition used to it is a two distinct thoughts or ideas and one poem and in this case the similarity technique is used when you describe the two distinct images of screeching of the owl and how it grips terror into the hearts of men and women along with its prey.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting us to bad you didn't have this in the contest and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thanks Alex for yet another wonderful and uplifting review. You are so encouraging to me.
Love, Carolyn

reply by krys123 on 17-Mar-2015

You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

I think this is an excellent horror-haiku. Now why didn't you put it in the contest? This one is too good not to be in it. I think it might have had a good chance,

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thanks Nicole,,,, then I'm a winner...LOL I appreciate that you liked the poem. It was fun.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

Owls are spooky creatures. Many nights camping we've encountered these scary animals. Thanks for sharing your poem. The picture gives me the creeps. LOL

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thanks V, they are spooky and yet 'cute' at the same time....
:-) Carolyn