Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Conductor"A collection of free verse poems
24 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
he holds expectant silence in the air -
What a great line that is!
So many exciting lines - Here's another I really liked:
The orchestra subsides
like puppets who have lost their puppeteer.
Your pitch, pace and pauses in this write are truly great, Tony.
I could feel the tempo of the music and the conductor's total control over the music, musicians, and the audience.
Lovely work, m'dear.
Rose.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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he holds expectant silence in the air -
What a great line that is!
So many exciting lines - Here's another I really liked:
The orchestra subsides
like puppets who have lost their puppeteer.
Your pitch, pace and pauses in this write are truly great, Tony.
I could feel the tempo of the music and the conductor's total control over the music, musicians, and the audience.
Lovely work, m'dear.
Rose.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thanks for another lovely review, Rose, and for your six stars. Both very much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from fimarie78
I really enjoyed this. Some lovely descriptions- the conductor as penguin/ puppeteer. You described the scene so well from the violins like bees, the masculine lower strings and the exchanging pleasantries at the end. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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I really enjoyed this. Some lovely descriptions- the conductor as penguin/ puppeteer. You described the scene so well from the violins like bees, the masculine lower strings and the exchanging pleasantries at the end. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Many thanks for this lovely review, Fimarie. So glad that you enjoyed my poem enough to bookmark! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is so well presented, your words
painting the scene and firing the
reader's imagination. I felt I was
there - a real pleasurable read, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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This is so well presented, your words
painting the scene and firing the
reader's imagination. I felt I was
there - a real pleasurable read, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Margaret. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Dawny53
You write about an emotion I have always felt each time I watch a conductor.. and listen to a symphony.. I love the ending of this free verse.. you describe so well the puppeteer and the puppets that are the symphony.. I just loved reading this, very, very well done.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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You write about an emotion I have always felt each time I watch a conductor.. and listen to a symphony.. I love the ending of this free verse.. you describe so well the puppeteer and the puppets that are the symphony.. I just loved reading this, very, very well done.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Dawny. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from krys123
Tony; I found some interesting alliteration in: "blackness of his back" and "swathes of sounds". Also found some excellent descriptive and it's demonstratively expressive imagery with a touch of metaphoric amplitude: "They float like butterflies returning to the gods. The audience erupts, washing the magic away in a torrent of sounds." All throughout your poem was very impressive imagery of how the orchestrated conductor handles his orchestra in a manner that overwhelms the audience. Thank you for sharing and posting Tony and may the Lord be with you always. Congratulations on placing third in the free verse contest.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Tony; I found some interesting alliteration in: "blackness of his back" and "swathes of sounds". Also found some excellent descriptive and it's demonstratively expressive imagery with a touch of metaphoric amplitude: "They float like butterflies returning to the gods. The audience erupts, washing the magic away in a torrent of sounds." All throughout your poem was very impressive imagery of how the orchestrated conductor handles his orchestra in a manner that overwhelms the audience. Thank you for sharing and posting Tony and may the Lord be with you always. Congratulations on placing third in the free verse contest.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Alex, and for the congratulations. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from kiwijenny
I love this I love the flute...keening liquid notes
Opening blossoms of cymbals stops their breath
So cool I think I hear it
And see the maestro...
Then the anti climax
God bless
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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I love this I love the flute...keening liquid notes
Opening blossoms of cymbals stops their breath
So cool I think I hear it
And see the maestro...
Then the anti climax
God bless
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Jenny. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from MSJVClarke
Another excellent poem. This is very deep and you certainly dissected the motions of the conductor with your words. I enjoyed this immensely and I think it was very creative.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Another excellent poem. This is very deep and you certainly dissected the motions of the conductor with your words. I enjoyed this immensely and I think it was very creative.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, MSJVC. Much appreciated. Tony
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You are welcome.
Comment from Pyrrho
I suspect you had fun creating this one. Were you thinking of, or listening to, a particular symphony? If I were I writing it I would have had Beethoven's fifth Piano Concerto playing.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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I suspect you had fun creating this one. Were you thinking of, or listening to, a particular symphony? If I were I writing it I would have had Beethoven's fifth Piano Concerto playing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Pyrrho. My mind started wandering during a concert last week, Wagner's Tanhauser, Tchaikovsky's Violin Concerto and 5th Symphony. The result ended up being an eclectic mix of conductors I have watched over the years!
Comment from patcelaw
In my head as I was reading this I was hear a wonderful rendition of the grand Canyon Suite. You describe the orchestra so very well. Patricia
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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In my head as I was reading this I was hear a wonderful rendition of the grand Canyon Suite. You describe the orchestra so very well. Patricia
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Patricia. My mind started wandering during a concert last week, Wagner's Tanhauser, Tchaikovsky's Violin Concerto and 5th Symphony. The result ended up being an eclectic mix of conductors I have watched over the years!
Comment from BeasPeas
Beautifully written poem describing the symphony with its drama and intricacies. You immediately start off with a great line: "A ripple rises as the lights are dimmed," giving the reader a hint of the excitement of ensuing lines. Other good ones: "opening blossom of cymbals," "across the silken blackness of his back," and "float like butterflies returning to the gods."
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Beautifully written poem describing the symphony with its drama and intricacies. You immediately start off with a great line: "A ripple rises as the lights are dimmed," giving the reader a hint of the excitement of ensuing lines. Other good ones: "opening blossom of cymbals," "across the silken blackness of his back," and "float like butterflies returning to the gods."
Comment Written 16-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2015
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Thanks very much for the sixer and your lovely comments about this poem. Much appreciated. Tony