~Midnight DeMonica~
Monica's waiting for you...17 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Nice picture of a mirror that complements your poem very well. It rhymes and flows well. At the end I realised you wrote this for the prompt. Nice to enter a horror one. Best wishes for the prompt.
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Nice picture of a mirror that complements your poem very well. It rhymes and flows well. At the end I realised you wrote this for the prompt. Nice to enter a horror one. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
Comment from mshirachot
Yikes! This one was a bit scary, but well written. You chose the perfect to go along with it. Interesting to read in your author's notes that the poem was about your old girlfriend. True life can sometimes be much scarier than fiction!
Best wishes with the contest. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
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Yikes! This one was a bit scary, but well written. You chose the perfect to go along with it. Interesting to read in your author's notes that the poem was about your old girlfriend. True life can sometimes be much scarier than fiction!
Best wishes with the contest. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings to you,
Marsha
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
Comment from IndianaIrish
A great poem inspired by a weird chick ex-girlfriend. Loved the imagery in this poem, Dean, and liked the use of the mirror ... Both in the photograph and your words. Monica is out for revenge.mbestnwishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
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A great poem inspired by a weird chick ex-girlfriend. Loved the imagery in this poem, Dean, and liked the use of the mirror ... Both in the photograph and your words. Monica is out for revenge.mbestnwishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like deadly demon's soul survives
and others
vivid, mood-creating descriptive detail
good assonance as well as alliteration in hardened heart
good assonance in scathing gaze
a powerful poetic portrait :-) Brooke
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solid use of rhyming couplets
stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in phrases like deadly demon's soul survives
and others
vivid, mood-creating descriptive detail
good assonance as well as alliteration in hardened heart
good assonance in scathing gaze
a powerful poetic portrait :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of ~Midnight DeMonica~, I wonder how you were able to give this girl up!! She sounds scary. Ha.
I love the last line even thou they aren't your words, "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned!" The presentation is gorgeous. Good luck in the contest. Carole
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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To the author of ~Midnight DeMonica~, I wonder how you were able to give this girl up!! She sounds scary. Ha.
I love the last line even thou they aren't your words, "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned!" The presentation is gorgeous. Good luck in the contest. Carole
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Carole. That's why I put that phrase in quotation marks, but we all know I didn't write it even if I hadn't, LOL. I wish I had thought of it 'cause it's so darn true!
Comment from giraffmang
This was a very bewitching poem.
An excellent entry into the competition.
Draws the reader alone nicely from beginning to end and before you know it you have been entranced with the poem as the mirror would entrance the reader.
Good luck.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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This was a very bewitching poem.
An excellent entry into the competition.
Draws the reader alone nicely from beginning to end and before you know it you have been entranced with the poem as the mirror would entrance the reader.
Good luck.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Gareth. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Anon! You just scared the daylights out of me with this exceptionally brilliant piece mate. I don't have a six to give sadly. Now I will go and hide in my closet! Good luck in the comp. Cheers Fez
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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G'day Anon! You just scared the daylights out of me with this exceptionally brilliant piece mate. I don't have a six to give sadly. Now I will go and hide in my closet! Good luck in the comp. Cheers Fez
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2015
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Just watch out for her in your mirror, Fez... Monica, I mean...
She's a beast!