Comment from honeytree

Excellent

I really loved the art work for these words written.

The words were written very well

describing this snake and its movements very well.

loved the words

snow cones sound so soothing

honeytree

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thank you for the review and kind comments.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ssssso snakes slither S-like
Sound-use-of-prompt.....ssssssssssssssss
Snow-cones sound so soothing

God bless... I tried to review using only S's ...silly

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thank you. Your response to the "s" is funny. I appreciate it.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Good presentation. But, even in a picture, a snake is a snake is a snake is a snake!

We had one in our house recently. Eeeeekkkks! It was a baby, but like I said -- a snake and so on.

The best of luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thank you. The picture is the only one that I could find that was not too scary. I do not like snakes either. They can stay far, far away from me out in the open range.

Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

I believe you met all the requirements for this contest. Snakes may have a chance at winning but dogs, cats and babies are hard to beat. Great job with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you so much. You are right about the trifecta of topics. Thanks for your time.

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

Excellent use of alliteration in your description of the snake and his avoidance of the students.
The snake also lends itself very well to superb use of assonance.


Warmly,

Juliette

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate both.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

This was good. I think using the one letter is less intimidating than I had first thought once reading many of the works here. Some people are so brilliant. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you so much. I had a 5-7-5 poem that I used as the start of this one. I just wrote that poem and started adding words (or lines) that made sense and helped make a story. Thank you for your comments. I appreciate everything you said.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Needless to say, great alliteration. I don't quite get the second stanza unless you mean the students were sidestepping the seven deadly sins until the following Sunday for a cooler temptation- sometimes. Which relieve the heat with a ssssss.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you for your review. The second verse is just about 7 students watching the snake--no religious connotations intended. After watching the snake in the hot sun, the students just want a cool refreshment--the snowcone. Thanks for your time. I am glad you enjoyed it

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Some snakes can and will sneak up on ya, that's for sure. Sometimes they are even disguised as friends and people we know. Adam and Eve found out the hard way how deceptive serpents can be.

Well done, Poet "X', and good luck to you in the contest. :)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you. I appreciate your support.

reply by Dean Kuch on 08-Oct-2014

No worries.

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

Wow you have done really well here with this one ! Using the letter s is not always such an easy task for something like this ! well done !

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you. I appreciate your time reading/reviewing my poem.

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

Very creative contest entry. What excellent use of the letter S. The read was very easy to understand and was so much fun to read. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

I appreciate your review.