Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi anon - You have written 6 very good 5/7/5 poems and fulfilled the requirements of the prompt. Every one you have written is very good and makes sense. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thank you Dorothy for the excellent review and the vote of confidence.

Comment from flamingstar

Excellent

Shoot, I might have entered this one if I'd been aware of it sooner. I really like:
we experience
chaotic currents of life
before awareness

I like to think that before one experiences the chaos, you merely create it obliviously; however, actually experiencing it signals a dawning awareness of one's role in it. Maybe?

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the excellent comments.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Nicely done. You have the perfect picture to accompany your words. Together they make a great contest entry. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks jannypan for the excellent review

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent stacked poem, mystery writer, a great way of accentuating the need for peaceful solutions to problems, great imagery, my favorite one is a tie between the first one and last one.

amalgamate means to acclimate, right?
good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks for the excellent review and great comments.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

fear/a/pow/er/ful/force - 6 syllables
good assonance and consonance in experience of peace
good alliteration in chaotic currents
excellent consonance in fear, a powerful force
good insights throughout
Brooke
since this is a syllable count contest, my score is a 4 - if you adjust that one line, please let me know and I'll gladly raise the rating
Brooke
rating raised for good revision

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks for the great review, I have changed the syllable count, it may not have the same ring to it, but at least it is 5 syllables, I was counting powerful as two and of course it is three.
Thanks again.

reply by adewpearl on 01-Oct-2014

I reread and raised the rating :-)

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks Brooke. I appreciate it.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

If you make a choice to see life in a positive way. Every morning you wake up will be an adventure that you will look forward too. This is well written. Good luck.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

I am pleased you enjoyed it, thanks.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is sound advice...thoughts bring actions so let the thoughts be good ones..this reminds me of Phil 4:8
Finally, brothers, whatever is true, whatever is honorable, whatever is just, whatever is pure, whatever is lovely, whatever is commendable, if there is any excellence, if there is anything worthy of praise, think about these things.
God bless..your poem is very good

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

I am so pleased you enjoyed it,

Comment from bkbehera

Excellent

It is an impressive piece of work fulfilling the required norms of entry with multiple stanza, each having 5-7-5 style.I wish it as one of the best in this contest as an entry. Good luck.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks you so much for the great review.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very strong read. Praise, sing and shout is one unique phase of worship.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

I am pleased it raised you up, thanks for the review

reply by c_lucas on 01-Oct-2014

You're welcome.

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

Powerful message and oh so inspirational. I love the words you choose to get your message across. My particular favorite stanza is the 5th one. Taking a leap of faith and believing that we are important. Well written with a perfect image to accompany it.

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 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks NurseBarb for the great review and the positive comments, (no pun intended)