The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "dragonflies whiz by (double haiku)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from l.raven
HI Carolyn, I can just picture the dragon flies and the bass...and the birds snacking away...so very well written...you did a great job on this...I have to go check out the contest...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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HI Carolyn, I can just picture the dragon flies and the bass...and the birds snacking away...so very well written...you did a great job on this...I have to go check out the contest...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks Linda for this fabulous review and encouragement. Love, Carolyn
Comment from angelface2
This is very lovely, Carolyn and exactly as statement for this prompt. I enjoyed reading it. It has good imagery. I love the first Haiku, especially. Good job. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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This is very lovely, Carolyn and exactly as statement for this prompt. I enjoyed reading it. It has good imagery. I love the first Haiku, especially. Good job. Miss Sally
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Hey there,
Thanks Miss Sally for the great comments. Love, Carolyn
Comment from heyjude
Carolyn, a job well done. Right on with your syllable
count. I like how you did the part about dragon
flies no more. Good alliteration in blackberry bush
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Carolyn, a job well done. Right on with your syllable
count. I like how you did the part about dragon
flies no more. Good alliteration in blackberry bush
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Hi there Judy,
So glad you liked this one. Thanks for the affirming remarks. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Creative writing Carolyn. I like how you turn dragonflies in the first line into dragon flies in the last line of the first haiku. Good alliteration of the b sound in the second haiku. Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards
sarah
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Creative writing Carolyn. I like how you turn dragonflies in the first line into dragon flies in the last line of the first haiku. Good alliteration of the b sound in the second haiku. Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards
sarah
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks Sarah, it is always good to hear from you and receive those affirming remarks.
Have a great day,
:-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Carolyn;
after reading these two haiku's I thought I was going to enter this contest but after reading these I just may not.
These are two excellently done haiku's in both the first two lines of each were very descriptive and expressive and both were interconnecting. The third line of each or the satori were both totally summing up the idea and the concept which the haiku was trying to represent.
Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing and posting in May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Carolyn;
after reading these two haiku's I thought I was going to enter this contest but after reading these I just may not.
These are two excellently done haiku's in both the first two lines of each were very descriptive and expressive and both were interconnecting. The third line of each or the satori were both totally summing up the idea and the concept which the haiku was trying to represent.
Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing and posting in May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much Alex. You should go ahead and enter. Your work is always a joy to read. It would be nice to win, but it would also be great if you did.
Have you heard from Ritchie lately? I miss him.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from GE Parson
Dear Carolyn,
Due to financiel reasons, thi will be my last entry of fellowsip with you and all my fans.
I have really felt like we got to know each other even though we have never met face to face.
If you care to keep in contact here is my E-mail:
jp2howarths@gmail.com
Your Friend,
Jerry
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Dear Carolyn,
Due to financiel reasons, thi will be my last entry of fellowsip with you and all my fans.
I have really felt like we got to know each other even though we have never met face to face.
If you care to keep in contact here is my E-mail:
jp2howarths@gmail.com
Your Friend,
Jerry
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Dear Jerry, thank you so much for your encouragement throughout the years. I am sorry to see you go. However, I understand priorities. Please take care and you have been a dear friend. We have always been able to discuss God's word with love.
Study well my friend, for it is in the pages of the Bible we find the road to Heaven. He has prepared a place for us and we have to but 'obey the Gospel.' and live a faithful life to join Him there.
Hear the word Romans 10:17 John 6:45
Believe the word John 8:24 Mark 16:16
Repent of our sins Luke 13:3-5 Acts 2:38
Confess that He is the son of God Acts 8:37 Romans 10:9-10
Be baptized for the remission of our sins... Mark 16:16, Acts 2:38
Love to you and your sweet wife, it has been a pleasure.
Carolyn Deaton Stephens
carolstephens@sbcglobal.net
Romans 6:3, 1 Peter 3:21
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Dear Jerry, thank you so much for your encouragement throughout the years. I am sorry to see you go. However, I understand priorities. Please take care and you have been a dear friend. We have always been able to discuss God's word with love.
Study well my friend, for it is in the pages of the Bible we find the road to Heaven. He has prepared a place for us and we have to but 'obey the Gospel.' and live a faithful life to join Him there.
Hear the word Romans 10:17 John 6:45
Believe the word John 8:24 Mark 16:16
Repent of our sins Luke 13:3-5 Acts 2:38
Confess that He is the son of God Acts 8:37 Romans 10:9-10
Be baptized for the remission of our sins... Mark 16:16, Acts 2:38
Love to you and your sweet wife, it has been a pleasure.
Carolyn Deaton Stephens
carolstephens@sbcglobal.net
Romans 6:3, 1 Peter 3:21
Comment from Spitfire
You make it look easy! I read the requirements and had no clue. Good use of onomatopoeia with "whiz". Alliteration with b in stanza one connects with the b sound in stanza 2.
Two captivating images for the price of one. Good work, Carolyn.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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You make it look easy! I read the requirements and had no clue. Good use of onomatopoeia with "whiz". Alliteration with b in stanza one connects with the b sound in stanza 2.
Two captivating images for the price of one. Good work, Carolyn.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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You are the Queen of Senyru so I am amazed by your review. Thanks so much. I love the 5-7-5 structure, but it has only been recently that I finally understood the connectivity required in Haiku. Easy, no, fun, yes. So glad you liked it Shari. I hope Maureen is doing better, she is very, very ill according to her profile page. Bless her heart, she has been through so much with that MS.
Be well, :-) Carolyn
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Last I heard, she's amazed the doctors by making some improvement. I suspect she's meditating while in her coma.
Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, this 34 syllables in 6 lines writing prompt entry fulfills all the elements with two bonus poems in one. The perfect syllable and line count is powerful as the ah ha moment full of irony is revealed in the last line. Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Carolyn, this 34 syllables in 6 lines writing prompt entry fulfills all the elements with two bonus poems in one. The perfect syllable and line count is powerful as the ah ha moment full of irony is revealed in the last line. Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thanks GracieAnn,
It's all up to the voters now. :-) I am always encouraged by your remarks. Thanks so much.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from flylikeaneagle
notesandmore: I like your visual of the tasty food, the dragon flies and the berries on the stream. The stream seems peaceful. Hope that you do well in the contest!
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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notesandmore: I like your visual of the tasty food, the dragon flies and the berries on the stream. The stream seems peaceful. Hope that you do well in the contest!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, I am delighted that you liked the entry.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from w.j.debi
Nice double haiku. You tie the two together well. That poor dragonfly didn't stand a chance flying over the lake like that. Sounds like a nice place with dragonflies, trout, birds and berries. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Nice double haiku. You tie the two together well. That poor dragonfly didn't stand a chance flying over the lake like that. Sounds like a nice place with dragonflies, trout, birds and berries. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thanks for this wonderful review. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
:-) Carolyn