Metamorphosis
a poem for children and the young at heart25 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
Poems are best when they are inspired by something around you, and what's better than the curious world of a child. This story of the caterpillar is charming and the child's voice gives the narrative a sense of awe and wonder. Excellent poetic values in this poem make it a delight to read. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Poems are best when they are inspired by something around you, and what's better than the curious world of a child. This story of the caterpillar is charming and the child's voice gives the narrative a sense of awe and wonder. Excellent poetic values in this poem make it a delight to read. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I really appreciate your great review and encouragement. I am thrilled to have won this one. Rod
Comment from Njorgensen
A sweet and gentle romp about a child's curiosity and imagination. The rhyming was easy and free, creating a simplistic vision - just right for this piece.
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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A sweet and gentle romp about a child's curiosity and imagination. The rhyming was easy and free, creating a simplistic vision - just right for this piece.
Njorgensen
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this "romp" with my child-narrator. Thanks for sharing. RodG
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was lovely, Poet 'X', and so well rhymed, with perfect meter and flow. There are some excellent examples of near rhymes that truly worked well here, up/stop, touch/watch...
A beautifully presented, pleasing poem about the innocence of youth, and how the very young view the world and everything in it with such awe and reverence.
Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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This was lovely, Poet 'X', and so well rhymed, with perfect meter and flow. There are some excellent examples of near rhymes that truly worked well here, up/stop, touch/watch...
A beautifully presented, pleasing poem about the innocence of youth, and how the very young view the world and everything in it with such awe and reverence.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Dean, it's always a pleasure to be reviewed by you. Thanks so much for sharing and your support. I am thrilled to have won this one. Rod
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You are very welcome, Rod.
Comment from royowen
This is a beautifully written poem, it touched my heart! This lovely work is exquisitely written in simple language, it flows with a n ease and life of its own! The aabb rhyme scheme is good, and the meter even and consistent!
Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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This is a beautifully written poem, it touched my heart! This lovely work is exquisitely written in simple language, it flows with a n ease and life of its own! The aabb rhyme scheme is good, and the meter even and consistent!
Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Roy, thank you so much for sharing my poem and your lovely words of praise. Rod
Comment from Jackarrie
A very cute image of the little girl, and a great poem for children. It rhymes well and has magic for the young reader. from caterpillar to butterfly is always a fascination for everybody.
Well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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A very cute image of the little girl, and a great poem for children. It rhymes well and has magic for the young reader. from caterpillar to butterfly is always a fascination for everybody.
Well done, good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Mary, for your kind praise of "Metamorphosis." Rod
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent observation and description of the caterpillar from the view of a child, and wonderful metaphor for life. As the caterpillar changes into a butterfly, each child will change and it will take patience and time for the dramatic transformation to be realized.
Excellent cadence in your eight beats per line and good rhyming couplets.
What a lovely thoughtful piece to brighten the day. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Excellent observation and description of the caterpillar from the view of a child, and wonderful metaphor for life. As the caterpillar changes into a butterfly, each child will change and it will take patience and time for the dramatic transformation to be realized.
Excellent cadence in your eight beats per line and good rhyming couplets.
What a lovely thoughtful piece to brighten the day. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for this great review. I am delighted you enjoyed the poem so much. Rod
Comment from Ben Colder
Hall Mark worthy in my opinion. Nothing is more precious than a child. Especially when exploring nature. Well done poet. My blessings and beast wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Hall Mark worthy in my opinion. Nothing is more precious than a child. Especially when exploring nature. Well done poet. My blessings and beast wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Ben, it's always a pleasure to have my work reviewed by you. Thanks so much for sharing another one and your support in the contest. Rod
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your chosen words with vivid images allow the reader to see and feel the conversation between the little girl and the caterpillar
how she was told it would soon become a beautiful butterfly
and wondering about her life and what she will be
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
your chosen words with vivid images allow the reader to see and feel the conversation between the little girl and the caterpillar
how she was told it would soon become a beautiful butterfly
and wondering about her life and what she will be
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Smoothiecool, for your most encouraging review.
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most welcome...SC
Comment from Charlene0513
The wonderful essence of a child is so harmless and innocent.
Little minds love to explore and ask questions that keeps them in tune with this ever changing world.
Charlene
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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The wonderful essence of a child is so harmless and innocent.
Little minds love to explore and ask questions that keeps them in tune with this ever changing world.
Charlene
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I am delighted you shared this poem with me, Charlene. Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from Karen B.
What a sweet tribute to the inquisitiveness of children. Well written with perfect rhyming that makes it flow smoothly start to finish. I love the question at the end. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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What a sweet tribute to the inquisitiveness of children. Well written with perfect rhyming that makes it flow smoothly start to finish. I love the question at the end. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I truly appreciate your kind words and best wishes, Karen.