Hurt Feelings
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Comment from Bayberry
This is a strong message carrying a lot of emotion. It is well presented in the 5-7-5 form. Thankfully, a child can be very forgiving for a time because parents are the foundation of their young life. But the window to right a wrong closes rapidly.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This is a strong message carrying a lot of emotion. It is well presented in the 5-7-5 form. Thankfully, a child can be very forgiving for a time because parents are the foundation of their young life. But the window to right a wrong closes rapidly.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review of my work
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You're very welcome. :-)
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Five judgmental words LOVE 'judgmental'
or seven hurled in anger " 'hurled'=hurting
child lost forever Childhood is a precious time
A strong message well said and presented.
Regards:
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Five judgmental words LOVE 'judgmental'
or seven hurled in anger " 'hurled'=hurting
child lost forever Childhood is a precious time
A strong message well said and presented.
Regards:
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind review
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Dear ?: My pleasure to help out. Well deserved. Do drop by sometime. Just invented new sonnet form called a CARRET. Check out the contest. Thanks.
With Respect: Steve
Comment from buzclick
Five judgmental words
or seven hurled in anger
child lost forever
This creates a lot of guessing.
What Five words? What seven words?
Was it to help the child?
Why has the child been lost?
The struggle involved to uncover these answers is too great a task.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Five judgmental words
or seven hurled in anger
child lost forever
This creates a lot of guessing.
What Five words? What seven words?
Was it to help the child?
Why has the child been lost?
The struggle involved to uncover these answers is too great a task.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks for taking the time to read and rate my work....
Any five words that are judgmental
any words spoken in hate
lost------always when words drive the wedge into a heart
meant only to be thought provoking.... must have succeeded if you are pondering answers.
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True
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good 5/7/5 entry for the contest. A lovely picture that shows how, what you have written in your poem, can affect a child. Their fragile little minds must be nurtured if they are to grow up happy and secure. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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A good 5/7/5 entry for the contest. A lovely picture that shows how, what you have written in your poem, can affect a child. Their fragile little minds must be nurtured if they are to grow up happy and secure. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind words and review of my work.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
The brain of a child is innocent and receptive, and full of love and trust; such a canvas accepts all words and phrases.
Some of the words and phrases are harsh, damaging, evil, and they forever adhere to the canvas of the mind.
The gallery of the mind will be visited often by the child, while growing up, and more often as an adult; the photos and memories of bad times, and sad times, of scolding, of violence, stand out like a ringing bell in a library; not to be avoided with closed eyes, or covered ears.
The painter of violence to a child's brain is like a chronic disease taking root in a child's organs; a painful existence, a difficult recovery, and possibly insanity.
Domestic violence-physical-and especially emotional, is a cardinal sin and should rate the person who does this-to anyone-especially children-a permanent place in emotional Hell.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Excellent.
The brain of a child is innocent and receptive, and full of love and trust; such a canvas accepts all words and phrases.
Some of the words and phrases are harsh, damaging, evil, and they forever adhere to the canvas of the mind.
The gallery of the mind will be visited often by the child, while growing up, and more often as an adult; the photos and memories of bad times, and sad times, of scolding, of violence, stand out like a ringing bell in a library; not to be avoided with closed eyes, or covered ears.
The painter of violence to a child's brain is like a chronic disease taking root in a child's organs; a painful existence, a difficult recovery, and possibly insanity.
Domestic violence-physical-and especially emotional, is a cardinal sin and should rate the person who does this-to anyone-especially children-a permanent place in emotional Hell.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work and for your thoughtful words
Comment from mauial
Verbal abuse can do so much. I like the way you employed a Biblical like proverb with this. In the Bible the number 7 represents completeness.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Verbal abuse can do so much. I like the way you employed a Biblical like proverb with this. In the Bible the number 7 represents completeness.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so very much for the nice review of my work
Comment from write hand blue
A picture of a child who is upset.
Yes we can hurt the feelings of a child. And I suppose they can remember for a long time.
An evocative write, concise and visual.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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A picture of a child who is upset.
Yes we can hurt the feelings of a child. And I suppose they can remember for a long time.
An evocative write, concise and visual.
:) mel.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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thank you for such a nice review of my work
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My pleasure...
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem is emotional and creative. The author's 5-7-5 poem is thought provoking. The reader found this poem heart felt. The artwork is precious and compliments the poem.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem is emotional and creative. The author's 5-7-5 poem is thought provoking. The reader found this poem heart felt. The artwork is precious and compliments the poem.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for such a nice review of my work
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you have the correct line and syllable count
your words allow the reader to see and feel that what is said to child will have lasting consequences for their future
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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good luck in the contest
you have the correct line and syllable count
your words allow the reader to see and feel that what is said to child will have lasting consequences for their future
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review of my work.
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welcome..SC
Comment from barleygirl
Even tho I appreciate your very true message & the way it's expressed, this poem is not about "having fun" so it doesn't seem to be appropriate for this contest. That being said, I thank you for sharing this important message.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Even tho I appreciate your very true message & the way it's expressed, this poem is not about "having fun" so it doesn't seem to be appropriate for this contest. That being said, I thank you for sharing this important message.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the nice review of my work. I did not interpret the instructions for the contest as meaning the content had to be about having fun..only the process of creating the work to be fun.. thus I only created that which was spoken to me. Thanks again and all the luck to you in your personal endeavors.
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I understand how writing about something you feel strongly about can also be fun.