Who Knew?
What happens when you least believe28 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah-hh-h-h..., I certainly know this feeling. We've seen our kids grow to manhood and womanhood, respectively, and it does make one long for those days when they needed us for more than just what we had in our pocketbooks, or wallets.
Very well stated!
Good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Ah-hh-h-h..., I certainly know this feeling. We've seen our kids grow to manhood and womanhood, respectively, and it does make one long for those days when they needed us for more than just what we had in our pocketbooks, or wallets.
Very well stated!
Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much,Dean. I was telling them this morning that I skipped her "black" period...but everything else seems like yesterday. Thanks so much for the great comments.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A nice entry for the 'Behind the Door' contest entry. Well written with plenty use of colour - especially cobalt. Good story about growing up and changes in taste. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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A nice entry for the 'Behind the Door' contest entry. Well written with plenty use of colour - especially cobalt. Good story about growing up and changes in taste. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you, dear Dorothy.It just seems like yesterday. Bless you.
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent alternating iambic tetrameter and trimeter lines.
You do transgress from the meter pattern in last line, which is also tetrameter.
Maybe: 'you've-GROWN-be-HIND-the-DOOR'
Very accomplished and entertaining read.
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Excellent alternating iambic tetrameter and trimeter lines.
You do transgress from the meter pattern in last line, which is also tetrameter.
Maybe: 'you've-GROWN-be-HIND-the-DOOR'
Very accomplished and entertaining read.
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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This is such a great comment because I knew I was changing up, but it was so what I wanted to say. I almost changed it to:"you grew up..." And leave. Off "for". Thanks so very much. Love your words! And thank you for your help!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with purple/phone...these/things...marked/moody. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with purple/phone...these/things...marked/moody. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Hello dear Righteous, thank you so very much for your comments! I meant it when I told you, yours mean a great deal to me. I love your work.
Comment from 24chas
I really enjoyed this piece. I thought it was very creative and unique. It was also bittersweet about a child growing up and leaving the nest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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I really enjoyed this piece. I thought it was very creative and unique. It was also bittersweet about a child growing up and leaving the nest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much! This was of my daughter and it seems like it was yesterday! Blessings and thank you again.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem touched my heart, I found it easy to read and very well written. You can't ask for much more. I need to read all the poetry, but so far your poem shines.
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Your poem touched my heart, I found it easy to read and very well written. You can't ask for much more. I need to read all the poetry, but so far your poem shines.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Not many entries yet, but yours
is most certainly the best -
a well thought out little poem
which works really well.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
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Not many entries yet, but yours
is most certainly the best -
a well thought out little poem
which works really well.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from jmdg1954
They grow up fast. It feels like yesterday I would rock my daughter to sleep, play board games on her floor, check her Halloween candy, listen to her practice her flute solo, and say how beautiful she looked in her wedding gown!
Beautiful poem, I wish I had a six left for you... John
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They grow up fast. It feels like yesterday I would rock my daughter to sleep, play board games on her floor, check her Halloween candy, listen to her practice her flute solo, and say how beautiful she looked in her wedding gown!
Beautiful poem, I wish I had a six left for you... John
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from rouskin
Good descriptive word use that draws a clear picture in my mind Excellent artwork too Nice contest entry. Best of luck and be blessed
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Good descriptive word use that draws a clear picture in my mind Excellent artwork too Nice contest entry. Best of luck and be blessed
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
I very much like this - very inventive. Parents watching their baby grow up.
I see a young girl growing - like the old song: Bobby Socks to Stockings.
Rhyming was good - words were great. Good Luck!
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I very much like this - very inventive. Parents watching their baby grow up.
I see a young girl growing - like the old song: Bobby Socks to Stockings.
Rhyming was good - words were great. Good Luck!
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2014