The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Light that Dims"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, Carolyn, you did an e xcellent job writing this free verse poem about the light of love that grows dim as time passes by. I love the last two lines.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, Carolyn, you did an e xcellent job writing this free verse poem about the light of love that grows dim as time passes by. I love the last two lines.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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I appreciate your fine comments and that you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
I've enjoyed this poem immensely because of its perfect rhythm and rhyme made it so easy to read and fun to understand. Your rhymes were neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed so well that it made it easy for me to read your poem clearly. The topic a context Was also fun to read that love doesn't necessarily have to fade when someone leaves it goes away but naturally just sometimes a relationship fades over time to strengthen the soul and the happiness is always still there. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for others. May you and yours be blessed.
Alex
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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I've enjoyed this poem immensely because of its perfect rhythm and rhyme made it so easy to read and fun to understand. Your rhymes were neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed so well that it made it easy for me to read your poem clearly. The topic a context Was also fun to read that love doesn't necessarily have to fade when someone leaves it goes away but naturally just sometimes a relationship fades over time to strengthen the soul and the happiness is always still there. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for others. May you and yours be blessed.
Alex
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
Thanks Alex for this fine review. I am so happy you enjoyed The Light that Dims... :-) Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome Carolyn
Comment from angelface2
Well, Carolyn I enjoyed reading it. Funny how words will do that isn't it? I love the rose. I think it is my favorite flower. I love the red ones in particular. thanks for sharing. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Well, Carolyn I enjoyed reading it. Funny how words will do that isn't it? I love the rose. I think it is my favorite flower. I love the red ones in particular. thanks for sharing. Miss Sally
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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And thank you Miss Sally for reading and enjoying. You are always so supportive and I appreciate you. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very apt and fitting piece of writing in this post. Unfortunately the light dims in many lovers hearts. That is just the way it goes sometimes.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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This is a very apt and fitting piece of writing in this post. Unfortunately the light dims in many lovers hearts. That is just the way it goes sometimes.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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You are so right, it is a blessing indeed that love last for some, for a lifetime.... Thanks Tomes for this great review. :-) Carolyn
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My pleasure
Comment from Petriesan
this hurts: It once shined bright
with youth's delight
and this: where once the ardent
flame did glow
and all that preceeds makes this difficult: Be saddened not
embrace thy age
you speak truth to life here. Had I a six to give. . .sorry
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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this hurts: It once shined bright
with youth's delight
and this: where once the ardent
flame did glow
and all that preceeds makes this difficult: Be saddened not
embrace thy age
you speak truth to life here. Had I a six to give. . .sorry
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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What a wonderful review this is, I will take a virtual six any time. Thank you so much, I am glad you liked this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good eye catching photo that grabs my attention from the start. Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind. I see nothing that I would add, take out, change or adjust in this piece. Good work and thanks for sharing.
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Good eye catching photo that grabs my attention from the start. Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind. I see nothing that I would add, take out, change or adjust in this piece. Good work and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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You are so welcome and thank you for this thoughtful and encouraging review. :-)Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
Carolyn, this is so very beautiful and well written, what a great poem. You've certainly popped out an outstanding read. Bless you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Carolyn, this is so very beautiful and well written, what a great poem. You've certainly popped out an outstanding read. Bless you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, sometimes don't you just wonder where they come from? I appreciate you. :-) Carolyn
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Carolyn, very likely they come from your heart. Bless you
Comment from Nosha17
Good choice of words for your love poem. You have made good use of language and imagery and the rhyming works well. I wanted to point out a few errors-I hope you don't mind-there are a couple of apostrophe s errors (one being lover's eyes-2 times)and you used the intransitive verb shine which is 'shone' in its past tense (when transitive, then shined is ok)Most enjoyable poem. Faye
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Good choice of words for your love poem. You have made good use of language and imagery and the rhyming works well. I wanted to point out a few errors-I hope you don't mind-there are a couple of apostrophe s errors (one being lover's eyes-2 times)and you used the intransitive verb shine which is 'shone' in its past tense (when transitive, then shined is ok)Most enjoyable poem. Faye
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thank you Faye for this excellent review and suggestions. I will revisit The Light that Dims. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Kingsland
This flows so very easily within its thoughts and phrases. It is formatted just right as well. This poem has excellent vocabulary that just ignites the poetic verve that is romances it words. This was an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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This flows so very easily within its thoughts and phrases. It is formatted just right as well. This poem has excellent vocabulary that just ignites the poetic verve that is romances it words. This was an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thanks John, what a nice review you have given The Light that Dims. I am happy you liked it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Keturah Martin
If this is what just popped out of your head then I commend you for sharing such popping. It is written so beautifully, especially to one who has known nothing about such things, but only abuse, lust and horror. It flows like a beautiful river of crystal light and reality. God bless
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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If this is what just popped out of your head then I commend you for sharing such popping. It is written so beautifully, especially to one who has known nothing about such things, but only abuse, lust and horror. It flows like a beautiful river of crystal light and reality. God bless
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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I am sorry that you have not known the sweetness of a love that last. I pray that will happen for you. I am delighted you found this to your liking. :-) Carolyn