Comment from TheWriteTeach

Exceptional

Dean,

I love this piece, but I gotta tell ya, I can think of something better to excise from a cheating man than his heart. . .

This is exceptional and truly worthy of the win. Congratulations. I seriously enjoyed it from start to finish. I like the subtle humor in this. It might be a horror story, but I did laugh in places. Especially where Amanda couldn't sneak out of the OR with the sternum spreader tucked under her skirt. I loved that she kept him alive while she operated - cool. The pictures gave strength and authenticity to your words. The hand with the dripping blood at the end was a perfect choice. I liked the way you ended it, too. We aren't sure why Amanda was looking up at Lyra's window. Was she next on Amanda's list?

Excellent job, Dean. Congrats again on the win.

Suzanne

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks a bunch, Suzanne, I'm glad you picked up on the black humor in this, and did not take it too seriously, just as I intended. Hey, horror can be fun too, right, LOL?

Thanks again!

Comment from Earthfairy

Exceptional

I have this piece 6 stars because I felt like I was reading a professional's work. It was very detailed, to the point, and I never got lost or got bored. Very well done!

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks so much, Earthfairy, I really appreciate that. The most important thing to me is that it entertained you. Hearing that always makes my day!

Thanks so much again!

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

Good Lord, Lucy! Well, I guess he had it comin'. As always a highly entertaining story. Macabre, bizarre, all the things I know you like to hear. Congrats on your contest win. Well deserved as usual.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Hah, yep, you got THAT right, Green Lake Girl. Well, unless it's one of my more serious pieces, like My Story, Edited, or ~Our World-So Blue~...

I really appreciate it!

Comment from Supe

Exceptional

Good grief! And the sound effects made me jump a mile high. My dog ran from the room.
I can see why you won this contest. Beautifully done, though that's not an appropriate description really. lol The authors notes are interesting. Wondered where you got your inspiration from. As always you have another accomplishment. Nice job.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks, Supe, and sorry about the doggie, LOL. I have three of my own, and I would never forgive myself if I traumatized one of our canine companions, LOL...

As for inspiration? Well, I really don't know, they just come to me. Sometimes I'll see a picture, and think, "H-m-m-m-m-m-m, what if..." I all can say is I have read horror stories, watched horror movies, ever since I was about ten years old. The genre has always fascinated me.

Thanks so much again. Much appreciated!

Comment from MelReyn

Excellent

This had my attention from start to finish! And the twist at the end, with Amanda glaring at Lyra left room for more trouble/ story if you so desire.

You take a character, a woman, a med student, who I make all kinds of assumptions about... "She's kind." "She's in the med field to help people. She must have a big heart." And you turn them all upside down, which makes for an unpredictable story.
Well done!

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, MelRyan. I really appreciate it, and I am very glad that you found it entertaining.

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

Oh, Dean, where do you find all this macabre trivia?

The story drew me in from the first line. This is taking revenge to the ultimate point--cutting out the unfaithful lover's heart while he is still alive to see it. The sound track even made me jump since I wasn't expecting it. I see you won another contests with this one. Well deserved. Congratulations.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks very much, w.j. debi, and sorry about the sound track. It does come in a bit late, LOL...

Thanks again for the wonderful review and comments, my friend!

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

CONGRATS ON YOUR WINNING MY FRIEND NICE BLODDY BLEEDING HEART GETS'EM EVERY TIME IT WAS A GOOD ONE THOUGH. ENJOY YOUR CELEBRATION

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks very much, country ranch writer. I really appreciate that!

reply by country ranch writer on 08-Dec-2013

lol

Comment from Deborah Ahern

Excellent

Wow. You really sent the message. Don't screw with an angry woman, especially after the betrayal from a less than man creep. Gives a whole new meaning to the word awesome.
Any man who would cheat on his girlfriend has officially lost his status as a man.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks a million, dahern. I am really glad that you enjoyed it!

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

oooh yuk yuk yuk! and of COURSE I know who this is! (You still don't like those good old possessive 's's, right?) Good load of nasty here - poor Lyra!

marveling at it's (its) sinewy, tough texture

then cut the bastards(bastard's) heart out of his contemptible cheating chest.

:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Heh, thanks, Sharyn. Those darn things get me every time! I put'em in when I shouldn't, and omit them when they should be in there. Oh...have mercy!

I'll get it fixed ASAP!

Comment from Teagan Rose Horton

Excellent

wow this is intriguing.
and oh so very thrilling, i started to shake when i heard the scream... nearly jumped out of my skin... ahaha.
um this was such a good read!
thanks for sharing this.
you have exceptional writing techniques well done for writing such a high level of quality piece of work.
have a blessed day..

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2013